CONTENDERSHIP MATCH: Razah vs Timeless [RAZAH WINS 5-0]

sral · 09-18-2015, 07:19 AM

AOWL Season V, Week 9

SUMMARY OF RULES:

Verses are due
Monday at 11:59 p.m. Western / or Tuesday 2:59 Am Eastern / 7:59AM UK
There are NO extensions.

Verses MUST be a minimum 10 lines or a maximum of 48 lines (or 650 words).

Votes are due Thursday at 11:59 p.m. Western / or Friday 2:59 Am Eastern / 7:59AM UK. Failure to vote will result in automatic sign out for the next week.

All competitors must vote on THREE battles and post links/ references in the voting thread.

Read the full rules here!

TOPIC:

Good luck!

@Razah @timeless

timeless · 09-18-2015, 08:47 AM

Hope you bought a new blade

Razah · 09-19-2015, 12:24 PM

I don't get it.

16-24 if ya can keep it short and sweet.

Razah · 09-22-2015, 08:52 PM

Looking up to the clouds, I would dream of the sky
Millions of years went by, in the blink of an eye
I just happened to walk, before I could fly
Ambition & thought- Had a fire scorching inside
My brain fed the flame, I could rule without a throne
But I had to build one- With tools made out of stone
The world made me resistant, I was made for the anguish
All the sounds that I uttered, I created a language
Never was life tainted, a masterpiece that I painted
Home was getting too crowded- At this age, it's time I migrated
A few blinks later- I laughed if you thought evolution was lost
From society to technology, I smile at the revolutions I saw
-- I don't smile as much, what happened to passion
Things are getting redundant, the world is so stagnant
It's like a diamond I molded, but it ran out of facets
Thought too much of myself, it's me, that I'm actually trapped in

There's no alpha, no omega, everybody's a beta
Back then, we looked up the clouds, now, it'll manage your data
You don't need to be sorry, it's you yourself you disrespect
When you replaced your intellect with the internet
There's no need to survive, no reason to fight
Won't be happy 'til the world freezes over & every season's alike
We don't share the same fire, it's the thunder you lack
You've grown content - You don't share the same hunger I have

Dead end.

Spoken · 09-23-2015, 05:20 AM

This was a nice short verse battle here. Timeless as usual u always have this natural act for telling such detailed stories in such little time. Made it str8 to the climax and detailed with intricate rhymes my dudw. Nice touch and flow was effortless. Razah I dont kno who u are but this spoken word scheme ya had was nice. I dug it nicely with its easy bobbing and weaving antics.

Content itself... I have to base my votw on as the two style almost stand perpendiculiar.... I got razah just going more intellectual and fitting the the verse complete....

2tripple0 · 09-23-2015, 09:57 AM

Is funny the same thing happened to me..so I tried to think and it was on point and the person responding was spoken and I thought well I voted for h I'm in his battle and wanted m we to read w a shame that it didn't work out because of a lack of a spine or backside whereas they both depended and retraced 4th story with feedback..so I kept replying to show you how simple your metaphysical being in order for ugliness to resume and narr at ion so 7th rather reply with his vote

Vote razah

timeless · 09-23-2015, 10:02 AM

I don't speak 7

2tripple0 · 09-23-2015, 10:09 AM

It's okay I give up you don't get it this an apology for anyone who doesn't u nd er stand I barely know any of you

Nigma · 09-23-2015, 08:31 PM

yay a short battle!

timeless, loved some of your references and their relation to the picture. started off with the mirror one, then you have several bits suggesting trying to turn around and that made me and my stoned things imagine that guy at the end turning back and trying to walk against the grain of his other less evolved lifeforms. in saying that, i feel you could have incorporated the title more, youre predestined angle of it seemed to lack thought imo.

razah. really impressive verse. super cool angle, going through the different eras and bringing it up to the modern era, the stare at the clouds/icloud reference was really cool. then ended it off with how things are now failing. really good concept usage from that picture. thought you nailed this verse

pretty easy decision for me after the read, timeless had a solid verse but razah had a much better angle at the topic which helped him correlate each line with his conceptual progression.

+1 razah

Mr. J · 09-24-2015, 02:45 AM

timeless, It's nice seeing you make another showing around these parts
your road is an up & down one when it comes to your performances
you quickly shed any doubt that your anything less than an impressive writer
you showcase some interesting ideas from the start of your verse.
the vocab use you apply really makes the read feel less bumpy this time around
towards the end I was impressed that you ended it in the mere moments you started
I'm not disappointed though, you kept me reading...nice work...

Razah, I'm really impressed by you as well, the ability to rapidly pen a verse such as yours is praiseworthy
the flow of your verse makes this a fun read due to you staying consistent in your thought
finding a breaking point and also an ending to your piece in just a compact piece is very idk the word
I've enjoyed this read though...

v/I've gotta say that I really liked this battle because of how short the verses were
both came with an interesting take on their subject matter...
timeless came with a smooth flow, his topic was worded nicely & had impressive ideas
I really thought his verse was cool, but after reading Razah's verse I feel Razah took it
he came with a stronger flow & his build up had a more impacting ending.
dope battle fella's...

v/Razah

Flow · 09-24-2015, 06:38 AM

There's no alpha, no omega, everybody's a beta
Back then, we looked up the clouds, now, it'll manage your data

Loved that line. Really nice.

Nice short battle which i always prefer. Id rather be left wanting more as opposed to the other way round.

Id say both matched in terms of nearly everything except the content. I feel one stood a foot in front in terms of really capturing his topic while also keeping me as a reader wanting more but still feeling satisfied when i didnt get more which is a really delicate balance i feel.

Vote Raz

sral · 09-24-2015, 08:18 AM

Razah wins 5-0!

timeless · 09-22-2015, 07:39 PM

Ever since a young buck I wanted to stampede across the nation.
Travel coast to coast, maybe see the Keys, Boston or Graceland.
My problems were faced when I spotted myself in the mirror.
Tried to turn and run but living in Hell couldn't be clearer.
With limited generosity, we can only give so much until we take it back.
Follow the same route everyday until we finally traced the map.
Drowning in mediocrity, we look for a way to turn it around.
Trial and error through the peril, dead but my nerves have been found.
Learn from the sounds of cries and agony in the night.
Living worse in the now than back when apathy was a fight.
Soon we grew thin, evolved into an inhumane existence.
Plenty stars were falling but what's there to gain from wishing?
The maze was shifting, too many loose ends on a tied knot.
No matter what, you'll die hitting Send on your time clock.
The elixir's non-existant, what's also missing is bliss.
Too busy capsizing each other's thoughts wishing we're rich.

09-18-2015, 07:19 AM	#1
sral LARSLARSLARSLARSLARS Join Date: Aug 2014 Location: CRUMPETVILLE Posts: 8,605 Battle Record: 28-3 Champed - Gimmick Battle League - The Winter Topical - Topical Martyrs - Lime Green Poetry Association - Lyric Olympics - Art of Writing League - Guerrilla Writing League (2x) - Black August II Rep Power: 85899396	CONTENDERSHIP MATCH: Razah vs Timeless [RAZAH WINS 5-0] AOWL Season V, Week 9 SUMMARY OF RULES: Verses are due Monday at 11:59 p.m. Western / or Tuesday 2:59 Am Eastern / 7:59AM UK There are NO extensions. Verses MUST be a minimum 10 lines or a maximum of 48 lines (or 650 words). Votes are due Thursday at 11:59 p.m. Western / or Friday 2:59 Am Eastern / 7:59AM UK. Failure to vote will result in automatic sign out for the next week. All competitors must vote on THREE battles and post links/ references in the voting thread. Read the full rules here! TOPIC: Good luck! @Razah @timeless __________________ - Netcees Rebuttal Tourney - Art of Writing League (x 4) - AOWL Season 11 Champion (Undefeated Season) Last edited by Adonis; 09-24-2015 at 09:41 AM.

09-23-2015, 05:20 AM	#5
Spoken ...DA GAWD... Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 2,355 Battle Record: 13-34 Rep Power: 5860413	This was a nice short verse battle here. Timeless as usual u always have this natural act for telling such detailed stories in such little time. Made it str8 to the climax and detailed with intricate rhymes my dudw. Nice touch and flow was effortless. Razah I dont kno who u are but this spoken word scheme ya had was nice. I dug it nicely with its easy bobbing and weaving antics. Content itself... I have to base my votw on as the two style almost stand perpendiculiar.... I got razah just going more intellectual and fitting the the verse complete.... __________________ WP Po'ethics

09-23-2015, 09:57 AM	#6
2tripple0 death warmed over Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Downstairs illstreet dam Posts: 2,564 Battle Record: 6-21 Rep Power: 0	Is funny the same thing happened to me..so I tried to think and it was on point and the person responding was spoken and I thought well I voted for h I'm in his battle and wanted m we to read w a shame that it didn't work out because of a lack of a spine or backside whereas they both depended and retraced 4th story with feedback..so I kept replying to show you how simple your metaphysical being in order for ugliness to resume and narr at ion so 7th rather reply with his vote Vote razah __________________ https://soundcloud.com/user-876573949/ https://soundcloud.com/user-634430314/

09-23-2015, 10:09 AM	#8
2tripple0 death warmed over Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Downstairs illstreet dam Posts: 2,564 Battle Record: 6-21 Rep Power: 0	It's okay I give up you don't get it this an apology for anyone who doesn't u nd er stand I barely know any of you __________________ https://soundcloud.com/user-876573949/ https://soundcloud.com/user-634430314/

09-23-2015, 08:31 PM	#9
Nigma The COAT... Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: BC, Canada Posts: 1,723 Battle Record: 28-20 Champed - Art of Writing League (x3) Rep Power: 4595813	yay a short battle! timeless, loved some of your references and their relation to the picture. started off with the mirror one, then you have several bits suggesting trying to turn around and that made me and my stoned things imagine that guy at the end turning back and trying to walk against the grain of his other less evolved lifeforms. in saying that, i feel you could have incorporated the title more, youre predestined angle of it seemed to lack thought imo. razah. really impressive verse. super cool angle, going through the different eras and bringing it up to the modern era, the stare at the clouds/icloud reference was really cool. then ended it off with how things are now failing. really good concept usage from that picture. thought you nailed this verse pretty easy decision for me after the read, timeless had a solid verse but razah had a much better angle at the topic which helped him correlate each line with his conceptual progression. +1 razah __________________

09-18-2015, 08:47 AM	#2
timeless past tense Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: NJ Posts: 1,623 Battle Record: 22-39 Rep Power: 4341329	Hope you bought a new blade

09-19-2015, 12:24 PM	#3
Razah rockkFresh Join Date: Apr 2015 Location: Chicago. Posts: 1,088 Battle Record: 8-10 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 11328545	I don't get it. 16-24 if ya can keep it short and sweet.

09-22-2015, 08:52 PM	#4
Razah rockkFresh Join Date: Apr 2015 Location: Chicago. Posts: 1,088 Battle Record: 8-10 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 11328545	Looking up to the clouds, I would dream of the sky Millions of years went by, in the blink of an eye I just happened to walk, before I could fly Ambition & thought- Had a fire scorching inside My brain fed the flame, I could rule without a throne But I had to build one- With tools made out of stone The world made me resistant, I was made for the anguish All the sounds that I uttered, I created a language Never was life tainted, a masterpiece that I painted Home was getting too crowded- At this age, it's time I migrated A few blinks later- I laughed if you thought evolution was lost From society to technology, I smile at the revolutions I saw -- I don't smile as much, what happened to passion Things are getting redundant, the world is so stagnant It's like a diamond I molded, but it ran out of facets Thought too much of myself, it's me, that I'm actually trapped in There's no alpha, no omega, everybody's a beta Back then, we looked up the clouds, now, it'll manage your data You don't need to be sorry, it's you yourself you disrespect When you replaced your intellect with the internet There's no need to survive, no reason to fight Won't be happy 'til the world freezes over & every season's alike We don't share the same fire, it's the thunder you lack You've grown content - You don't share the same hunger I have Dead end.

09-23-2015, 10:02 AM	#7
timeless past tense Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: NJ Posts: 1,623 Battle Record: 22-39 Rep Power: 4341329	I don't speak 7

09-24-2015, 02:45 AM	#10
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	timeless, It's nice seeing you make another showing around these parts your road is an up & down one when it comes to your performances you quickly shed any doubt that your anything less than an impressive writer you showcase some interesting ideas from the start of your verse. the vocab use you apply really makes the read feel less bumpy this time around towards the end I was impressed that you ended it in the mere moments you started I'm not disappointed though, you kept me reading...nice work... Razah, I'm really impressed by you as well, the ability to rapidly pen a verse such as yours is praiseworthy the flow of your verse makes this a fun read due to you staying consistent in your thought finding a breaking point and also an ending to your piece in just a compact piece is very idk the word I've enjoyed this read though... v/I've gotta say that I really liked this battle because of how short the verses were both came with an interesting take on their subject matter... timeless came with a smooth flow, his topic was worded nicely & had impressive ideas I really thought his verse was cool, but after reading Razah's verse I feel Razah took it he came with a stronger flow & his build up had a more impacting ending. dope battle fella's... v/Razah __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

09-24-2015, 06:38 AM	#11
Flow Upset Champion Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: West Mids Posts: 3,861 Battle Record: 57-49 Accomplishments - 50 Wins Champed - BA Rookie Tourney - 1-2 Punch League (x2) - Pandemonium Cypher - 1-2 Punch league Season 9 Rep Power: 24894581	There's no alpha, no omega, everybody's a beta Back then, we looked up the clouds, now, it'll manage your data Loved that line. Really nice. Nice short battle which i always prefer. Id rather be left wanting more as opposed to the other way round. Id say both matched in terms of nearly everything except the content. I feel one stood a foot in front in terms of really capturing his topic while also keeping me as a reader wanting more but still feeling satisfied when i didnt get more which is a really delicate balance i feel. Vote Raz

09-24-2015, 08:18 AM	#12
sral LARSLARSLARSLARSLARS Join Date: Aug 2014 Location: CRUMPETVILLE Posts: 8,605 Battle Record: 28-3 Champed - Gimmick Battle League - The Winter Topical - Topical Martyrs - Lime Green Poetry Association - Lyric Olympics - Art of Writing League - Guerrilla Writing League (2x) - Black August II Rep Power: 85899396	Razah wins 5-0! __________________ - Netcees Rebuttal Tourney - Art of Writing League (x 4) - AOWL Season 11 Champion (Undefeated Season)

09-22-2015, 07:39 PM	#13
timeless past tense Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: NJ Posts: 1,623 Battle Record: 22-39 Rep Power: 4341329	Ever since a young buck I wanted to stampede across the nation. Travel coast to coast, maybe see the Keys, Boston or Graceland. My problems were faced when I spotted myself in the mirror. Tried to turn and run but living in Hell couldn't be clearer. With limited generosity, we can only give so much until we take it back. Follow the same route everyday until we finally traced the map. Drowning in mediocrity, we look for a way to turn it around. Trial and error through the peril, dead but my nerves have been found. Learn from the sounds of cries and agony in the night. Living worse in the now than back when apathy was a fight. Soon we grew thin, evolved into an inhumane existence. Plenty stars were falling but what's there to gain from wishing? The maze was shifting, too many loose ends on a tied knot. No matter what, you'll die hitting Send on your time clock. The elixir's non-existant, what's also missing is bliss. Too busy capsizing each other's thoughts wishing we're rich.