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04-11-2021, 03:55 AM | #1 |
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First Song... Roasts, Opinions, Feedback?
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04-11-2021, 06:39 AM | #2 |
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Initial impression...Mix needs some work. vocals need upped or instro needs down.
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04-11-2021, 01:43 PM | #3 |
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thanks. any positives?
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04-11-2021, 12:05 PM | #4 |
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good beat..... uhhh ya flow isnt mucb,,, I didn't look what wyou werre sahng but I bet it was garbarge... but beat sounded ok and if you could spit itd be str8
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04-11-2021, 01:41 PM | #5 |
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i can def spit but thanks for the feedback
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04-11-2021, 01:44 PM | #6 |
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mind you this was my first song and recorded verse ever. i flowed over it ogod enough but with practice and more songs i think the delivery will be improved
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04-11-2021, 01:55 PM | #7 |
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the upside is you've got a decent voice and i dont think your delivery or presence are bad, but the flow definitely needs work. Not really a fan of the beat choice either tbh
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04-11-2021, 02:05 PM | #8 |
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thanks bro
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04-11-2021, 02:06 PM | #9 |
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do you think with more songs and more experience with recording i’ll improve flow wise
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04-11-2021, 02:54 PM | #10 |
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Nah practicing a specific skill over time has been proven to regress the practitioners capabilities actually. You're fucked idiot.
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04-11-2021, 03:00 PM | #11 |
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how u doin bags, also do u have a link to the NC discord bro? was looking to join
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04-11-2021, 10:07 PM | #12 |
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Jon really made this whole thread to pick out positive shit and help with poor self-image. The bars lack a bit and it's a basic as fuck song.
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And I'm pretty sure that you can't say fag or steelo in 2021
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04-11-2021, 02:59 PM | #15 |
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04-12-2021, 12:03 AM | #16 |
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flows nice in my opinion - def got a lil sketchy in areas ("dunno how to act i just lie" & couple bars following it were off up until "dont rip track i move weight..." & then onwards its butter. - on the whole its straight, unorthodox, but im with that.
everthing else is just generic though - nothin overly whack - but nothin particularly nice either. i wasnt mad at it. i also still say steelo - fuck what year it is. |
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The commentary at the end came off pretty corny and unnecessary. You don’t need to tell a random listener to suck your dick for no reason.
The track itself was ok. Not bad, by any means. I think it could use some re-takes, because in a couple spots the flow slipped, but the flow in general was solid enough.. What was really missing was delivery — you didn’t sound amped enough. But, that will come with practice, and some of that is definitely a mixing issue... all in all, this was pretty cool. Definitely a good foundation.
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04-12-2021, 12:38 PM | #20 |
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Beats cool. Your raps sound like you didn't write it to the beat. It comes off like a text, which is why I hate text rappers over beats normally lol. Your voice wasn't that bad. Delivery was cool. It just really comes off like someone reciting a text over a beat. Work on that shit. peace.
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