The Reason You're Wack

CopyPat · 07-11-2013, 02:20 AM

November, it's minus 3. Degrees chillin, when I rhyme a free. Mc's shiverin' every time I speak cause each sentence is designed to freeze. Ya mind deceased if ya think you compete. Which means brain dead to you simpleton geeks. I see jpegs when I picture the beat and just repaint them with my digital speech. At least eight tenths of the dentists agree ya catch a teeth ache when it's a bitten of me. But Brother man please stop before ya talk absurd n dispute, cause I understand teeths not the proper plural of tooth. I run a damn detox hockin verbals at dudes, cause my stuff is mad clean ya'll rockin words that's uncouth-that's a clever word for vulgar for cat's who never heard it altered-But I ain't talkin bout the jewish dork, and I'm not about to use fedoras. I'm just rockin out my huge assortment of words that's hardly often used before. I'm hauling off a huge cigar that was probably bought in Cuban stores, the quality stock is true to form cause it always be locked in humidors. Apologies ya'll I'm super sorry, that part of this jot wasn't too important. But it's a part of my job to you the boarder to draw in your thoughts and view the story. I'm constantly gone I do exploring to get lost in the sound of new recordings. My jollies be off for music yours be always involved with using porn, see it's not even that that's got me vexed, but it's why you'll always be wack when dropping texts.

Coup · 07-11-2013, 02:33 AM

catch a teeth ache when it's a bitten of me

not sure if you meant tooth ache, but teeth ache adds some personality to the written.

and I fell for the trap lol

cause I understand teeths not the proper plural of tooth.

but I did catch this

Quote:

But it's a part of my job to you the boarder to draw in your thoughts and view the story. I'm constantly gone, I do exploring to get lost in the sound of new recordings.

should read:

But it's part of my job to use the boarder to draw in your thoughts and view the story. I'm constantly gone, I do expoloring to get lost in sound of new recordings.

Dropping the 'a', fixing the 'you' typo to use, comma after gone and dropping 'the' in "in the sound".

//

Very dope drop...flow was hot and hit.

PancakeBrah · 07-12-2013, 06:51 PM

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Originally Posted by Coup

\should read:

But it's part of my job to use the boarder to draw in your thoughts and view the story. I'm constantly gone, I do expoloring to get lost in sound of new recordings.

Incorrect.

All it needs is commas.

It's a part of my job to you, the boarder, to draw in your thoughts and view the story.

He's not talking about borders and shit. It's a parenthetical phrase clarifying who he's drawing in and giving his stories.

Don't fuck around anymore.

Coup · 07-12-2013, 07:37 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by PancakeBrah

Incorrect.

All it needs is commas.

It's a part of my job to you, the boarder, to draw in your thoughts and view the story.

He's not talking about borders and shit. It's a parenthetical phrase clarifying who he's drawing in and giving his stories.

Don't fuck around anymore.

holy mother virgin mary....I feel so invalid now

oats · 07-11-2013, 04:34 AM

I read this one and your other one right below it, pretty much have the same thing to say: they were dope, just begged for more. you're def a skilled writer, and I like seeing you have fun with rhyming and bounce schemes around, but I would really like to see a concerted effort from you. like, weave these verbal exercises throughout a more coherent thought or feeling. nah mean?

but that's got little to do with this particular verse. This was dope and fun to read, I like how you came back to the "plural of tooth" bit, nice reprieve of self-awareness which allowed me to forgive you for saying it in the first place lol. good shit

Lars · 07-11-2013, 06:05 AM

Plural of tooth showed you were just straight flexing, this guy knows what he's doing, has been at it for years. Original RF representer.

Still one of the brightest crayons in the box, and he leaves his mark all over the wall like a disobedient child. You gotta love it.

I do.

Ghost1 · 07-11-2013, 02:52 PM

Fresh.

I wonder if this is actually how copys thought patter is....

Dude be thinkin about wat hes havin for lunch in multis lmao

Schemes were really complex ....and the simplicity of making this feel like a simple mind jumble puked all over the page is ill......cuz i kno from experience.....least for me.....this was labored....

Fresh

Can u pls rock the tony soprano avy again tho?

Vulgar · 07-11-2013, 08:08 PM

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Which means brain dead to you simpleton geeks. I see jpegs when I picture the beat and just repaint them with my digital speech. At least eight tenths of the dentists agree ya catch a teeth ache when it's a bitten of me. But Brother man please stop before ya talk absurd n dispute, cause I understand teeths not the proper plural of tooth. I run a damn detox hockin verbals at dudes, cause my stuff is mad clean ya'll rockin words that's uncouth-that's a clever word for vulgar for cat's who never heard it altered-But I ain't talkin bout the jewish dork, and I'm not about to use fedoras. I'm just rockin out my huge assortment of words that's hardly often used before. I'm hauling off a huge cigar that was probably bought in Cuban stores, the quality stock is true to form cause it always be locked in humidors. Apologies ya'll I'm super sorry, that part of this jot wasn't too important. But it's a part of my job to you the boarder to draw in your thoughts and view the story.

On second read, this whole part was fire. Very nice, Copster.

NYCSPITZ · 07-12-2013, 03:16 PM

A sepulchral monument to solar plexus chakra enlargement - a great flex piece but not one with a focused mental energy. This is good though because when the central bar of those types of galaxies collides with an exceptional mega black hole and its surrounding nebulae, a coherent take of incoherence becomes the anthropomorphic ode to sagittarius the archer. It is important to note that as we enter the age of Aquarius, one solitary, melancholic soul's ministry to the monolithic structure of christianity dissolves into nothingness - in the end one can only stare into the abyss. As you stabilize your lower chakras and feed more energy into your spiritual centers above the heart, you will meet your spiritual guide. This spread out mental power is powerful, but the force will also be with you if you create stories with a kilgon plot, buy real estate and cling on plots. That's the thing my g. Your shit appreciates in value parallel to your sacrifices. Go to mount sinai and revel in that burning flame, you are an inch away from the mecca, the akashic records which thrive in the 4th dimension.

PancakeBrah · 07-12-2013, 03:36 PM

Used before/humidor scheme was well done. Aforementioned teeth/tooth tomfoolery was humorous. This reminded me of the collab between me and you, paragraph swag piece. This type of piece is perfectly suited to your style. No topic to constrain your inherent desire to just rhyme the fuck out of things. Enjoyed reading this.

CopyPat · 07-12-2013, 03:48 PM

lmao thanks cakes. "rhyming the fuck outta things" that's dope, I think u nailed it hahaha. just great feed @NYCSPITZ too, wow you really enlightened me, I can't possibly thank you enough

NYCSPITZ · 07-12-2013, 04:01 PM

anytime my nigga

Geno · 07-12-2013, 04:51 PM

This...
I see jpegs when I picture the beat and just repaint them with my digital speech
Was an ill ass line to me. Loved it

And this..
But Brother man please stop before ya talk absurd n dispute, cause I understand teeths not the proper plural of tooth. I run a damn detox hockin verbals at dudes, cause my stuff is mad clean ya'll rockin words that's uncouth-that's a clever word for vulgar for cat's who never heard it altered-But I ain't talkin bout the jewish dork, and I'm not about to use fedoras.

..this section was one hell of a stab at vulgar.

But vulgar my dood. I'm sure hell get atcha somehow

Dope drop copypat. Had some meh areas but was entertaining and friggity fresh for real

veritas · 07-12-2013, 07:05 PM

Dope. Remeinded me of if james joyce rhymed.

Dove Dozer · 07-13-2013, 02:08 PM

Jesus christ this was dope.. rhyme scheme was retarded

Teeth/tooth section was ill as shit

EbadiBeats · 07-14-2013, 02:37 AM

This was dope AF. I could picture you on... what is it called where they battle... grindtime? And everyone just going "ooohhhh" after some of your lines. I don't like writtens and think they are childish, but this was dope fam. Keep it up.

zygote · 07-16-2013, 07:47 AM

The rhyme scheme is very advanced and entertaining. The introspective tone and reflective quality make the writing stronger/give it direction. Enjoyed the mix between vocabulary of some bigger words and some light entertainment E.g., "Jollies."

Xnub · 07-17-2013, 01:08 PM

don't peep OM drops much anymore... but thought I'd just give some props where I thought they were due.

I love Copy style, he reminds me of a Wise Ways in his prime... shots fired. Cake, u, and Wise should collab on some shit and rhyme the fuck out of it.

PancakeBrah · 07-17-2013, 04:21 PM

I AGREE

Exis · 07-18-2013, 12:26 PM

Ya mind deceased if ya think you compete. Which means brain dead to you simpleton geeks. I see jpegs when I picture the beat and just repaint them with my digital speech.

^^Lol chea.

Your flow is awesome...the openin' really set the tone, from top to bottom it's laced with multies galore and you've thrown in some wicked schemes...combine that with the usual Copy cockiness and yeah...great read fam.

07-11-2013, 02:20 AM	#1
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 707 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742222	The Reason You're Wack November, it's minus 3. Degrees chillin, when I rhyme a free. Mc's shiverin' every time I speak cause each sentence is designed to freeze. Ya mind deceased if ya think you compete. Which means brain dead to you simpleton geeks. I see jpegs when I picture the beat and just repaint them with my digital speech. At least eight tenths of the dentists agree ya catch a teeth ache when it's a bitten of me. But Brother man please stop before ya talk absurd n dispute, cause I understand teeths not the proper plural of tooth. I run a damn detox hockin verbals at dudes, cause my stuff is mad clean ya'll rockin words that's uncouth-that's a clever word for vulgar for cat's who never heard it altered-But I ain't talkin bout the jewish dork, and I'm not about to use fedoras. I'm just rockin out my huge assortment of words that's hardly often used before. I'm hauling off a huge cigar that was probably bought in Cuban stores, the quality stock is true to form cause it always be locked in humidors. Apologies ya'll I'm super sorry, that part of this jot wasn't too important. But it's a part of my job to you the boarder to draw in your thoughts and view the story. I'm constantly gone I do exploring to get lost in the sound of new recordings. My jollies be off for music yours be always involved with using porn, see it's not even that that's got me vexed, but it's why you'll always be wack when dropping texts. Last edited by CopyPat; 07-11-2013 at 04:22 AM.

07-11-2013, 06:05 AM	#6
Lars PROVEN BITER Join Date: Feb 2013 Location: Wolverhampton Posts: 1,588 Battle Record: 5-0 Champed - The Winter Topical Rep Power: 1809295	Plural of tooth showed you were just straight flexing, this guy knows what he's doing, has been at it for years. Original RF representer. Still one of the brightest crayons in the box, and he leaves his mark all over the wall like a disobedient child. You gotta love it. I do. __________________ PROVEN BITER

07-12-2013, 04:51 PM	#13
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,330 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036758	This... I see jpegs when I picture the beat and just repaint them with my digital speech Was an ill ass line to me. Loved it And this.. But Brother man please stop before ya talk absurd n dispute, cause I understand teeths not the proper plural of tooth. I run a damn detox hockin verbals at dudes, cause my stuff is mad clean ya'll rockin words that's uncouth-that's a clever word for vulgar for cat's who never heard it altered-But I ain't talkin bout the jewish dork, and I'm not about to use fedoras. ..this section was one hell of a stab at vulgar. But vulgar my dood. I'm sure hell get atcha somehow Dope drop copypat. Had some meh areas but was entertaining and friggity fresh for real __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

07-13-2013, 02:08 PM	#15
Dove Dozer loose leaf bruce lee Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,079 Battle Record: 7-6 Rep Power: 1853213	Jesus christ this was dope.. rhyme scheme was retarded Teeth/tooth section was ill as shit __________________

07-11-2013, 04:34 AM	#5
oats Steel Cut Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 5,075 Battle Record: 19-10 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Fight Night LXXXIV - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 79005425	I read this one and your other one right below it, pretty much have the same thing to say: they were dope, just begged for more. you're def a skilled writer, and I like seeing you have fun with rhyming and bounce schemes around, but I would really like to see a concerted effort from you. like, weave these verbal exercises throughout a more coherent thought or feeling. nah mean? but that's got little to do with this particular verse. This was dope and fun to read, I like how you came back to the "plural of tooth" bit, nice reprieve of self-awareness which allowed me to forgive you for saying it in the first place lol. good shit

07-12-2013, 03:16 PM	#9
NYCSPITZ SYRACUSE Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,033 Battle Record: 31-37 Champed - Write Night II - Alias Topical Tournament Rep Power: 4743544	A sepulchral monument to solar plexus chakra enlargement - a great flex piece but not one with a focused mental energy. This is good though because when the central bar of those types of galaxies collides with an exceptional mega black hole and its surrounding nebulae, a coherent take of incoherence becomes the anthropomorphic ode to sagittarius the archer. It is important to note that as we enter the age of Aquarius, one solitary, melancholic soul's ministry to the monolithic structure of christianity dissolves into nothingness - in the end one can only stare into the abyss. As you stabilize your lower chakras and feed more energy into your spiritual centers above the heart, you will meet your spiritual guide. This spread out mental power is powerful, but the force will also be with you if you create stories with a kilgon plot, buy real estate and cling on plots. That's the thing my g. Your shit appreciates in value parallel to your sacrifices. Go to mount sinai and revel in that burning flame, you are an inch away from the mecca, the akashic records which thrive in the 4th dimension.

07-12-2013, 03:36 PM	#10
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 13,052 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899406	Used before/humidor scheme was well done. Aforementioned teeth/tooth tomfoolery was humorous. This reminded me of the collab between me and you, paragraph swag piece. This type of piece is perfectly suited to your style. No topic to constrain your inherent desire to just rhyme the fuck out of things. Enjoyed reading this.

07-12-2013, 03:48 PM	#11
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 707 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742222	lmao thanks cakes. "rhyming the fuck outta things" that's dope, I think u nailed it hahaha. just great feed @NYCSPITZ too, wow you really enlightened me, I can't possibly thank you enough

07-12-2013, 04:01 PM	#12
NYCSPITZ SYRACUSE Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,033 Battle Record: 31-37 Champed - Write Night II - Alias Topical Tournament Rep Power: 4743544	anytime my nigga

07-14-2013, 02:37 AM	#16
EbadiBeats Junior Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 14 Rep Power: 34	This was dope AF. I could picture you on... what is it called where they battle... grindtime? And everyone just going "ooohhhh" after some of your lines. I don't like writtens and think they are childish, but this was dope fam. Keep it up.

07-16-2013, 07:47 AM	#17
zygote Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 502 Battle Record: 33-12 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Art of Writing League (3x) Rep Power: 737825	The rhyme scheme is very advanced and entertaining. The introspective tone and reflective quality make the writing stronger/give it direction. Enjoyed the mix between vocabulary of some bigger words and some light entertainment E.g., "Jollies."

07-17-2013, 01:08 PM	#18
Xnub SZNUBBED Join Date: Apr 2013 Location: California Posts: 286 Battle Record: 5-13 Rep Power: 34	don't peep OM drops much anymore... but thought I'd just give some props where I thought they were due. I love Copy style, he reminds me of a Wise Ways in his prime... shots fired. Cake, u, and Wise should collab on some shit and rhyme the fuck out of it.

07-17-2013, 04:21 PM	#19
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 13,052 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899406	I AGREE

07-18-2013, 12:26 PM	#20
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Ya mind deceased if ya think you compete. Which means brain dead to you simpleton geeks. I see jpegs when I picture the beat and just repaint them with my digital speech. ^^Lol chea. Your flow is awesome...the openin' really set the tone, from top to bottom it's laced with multies galore and you've thrown in some wicked schemes...combine that with the usual Copy cockiness and yeah...great read fam.