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04-24-2016, 02:53 PM
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A little somethin...
I'm not jeezy. But I'm feeling young
Little coke on my tongue got me feeling numb Little weed in my lungs got me feeling SWEET Shot off twice on her cheeks. now, I'm feeling weak Took a seat. Another shot of the vodka Got my head spinning. No helicopters. I don't punchlines. Just disgust minds Go hard in the trenches when its crunchtime I'm hearing strange things; you got the game locked? You done ran out. Just like the game clock From the home of panthers, tigers and gamecocks Aim pop. You get picked up in a stained top Young lo. I tried not too change much But on the mound my fav pitch is change up I'm coming for ya spot. You better get right! Putting heads to bed without telling em, "good night" So rude. But i guess I'm just being me Young reza. Flow's contagious. No std... |
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04-25-2016, 11:45 AM
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I like your shit, man. Flow is a lot better than a lot of dudes that do text, this is more audio-friendly and I respect that.
I disliked the helicopter line because it felt a little lazy to me, where the rest had a laid back vibe I fucked with for the most part. I felt this four was your best, Quote:
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05-15-2016, 12:40 PM
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^^Agreed...helicopter line felt outta place, flow overall is pretty straight though...liked alot of this...would fly in audio.
Stay up wit it. |
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05-15-2016, 03:42 PM
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Yeah I read this like it was on a beat, real clean and smooth flow, couple decent bars nothing real eye-popping but a nice statement verse. I digg it
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05-16-2016, 07:12 PM
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Yessir..got thaT young nigga flow.. stylin on em.. it works.
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05-18-2016, 02:20 PM
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Thx ppl
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05-22-2016, 02:12 AM
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lold at that first line but your lines smooth
like the others said this needs a beat to rhyme to. I read this in Ludas voice & it blew my mind dude. could have dropped punchlines & the 4th line too otherwise I think you bring potential to the board keep it up brah....welcome....aboard?
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