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Old 09-12-2014, 09:12 PM   #1
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Inspired by the Wack MC, his punchlines flow through me;
the lunch line is through, gee… but my rhymes ain't skewed, see:
so gimme yo lunch money. I be pimpin Grand Ma hoes,
and I be lynchin yo fuckin flows. Even yo Grand Pa knows
that my wack ass flows be goin towards ya toes.
And, thats the grand finale… so phat, everybody lols
and claps, you see. Wait up, hold on, bee.
Can't your wack ass hold yo damned pee,
just for a sec, while I whack my pee pee
on yo honey's goatee lookin ass and coochie…
you queerly cookin trainee of an emcee.
They say I'm a slackin genius, I'm smackin you down with attacks;
who questions my penis… shit, cracked out hoes be my snack,
digesting rapped uncleanliness over your manginess of a track.
You're muzzle's lunch, megalomaniac. You so wack
that even rubble can punch your lines, clackin like tic-tacs.
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Old 09-12-2014, 09:23 PM   #2
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Plz remove my tag from your post

I don't wish to be affiliated with garbage

You cuck
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Old 09-12-2014, 09:27 PM   #3
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Plz remove my tag from your post

I don't wish to be affiliated with garbage

You cuck
Done.

Keep in mind, I'll respect you the same as I'd wish you to respect me... so delete "You piece of shit" from BB's topic... if not out of respect for me, out of respect for his words. Our BS and you calling me a POS should not be in that topic, period.
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Old 09-12-2014, 09:28 PM   #4
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Old 09-13-2014, 12:11 PM   #5
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To be honest u need a lot of work look at other writer s
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Old 09-15-2014, 11:59 PM   #6
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To be honest u need a lot of work look at other writer s
thanx -- it is inspired by Wack MC, so...
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Old 09-18-2014, 08:04 PM   #7
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I don't know what Wack MC is. Is this a parody of bad writing? Because if so you did really well, because this was objectively terrible. All of your rhymes were basic and you often added an unnecessary word after a comma just to make them work (, see). The content was childish and base, without being aware or satirical. It was like reading a 5th grade boy writing potty humor, with worse rhymes. Just being honest. Read some of the 'respected' writers here and try harder to do better. Honest feed.
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Old 09-18-2014, 08:15 PM   #8
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aight bro' you beginnin' to make me wonder if you even serious or juz tryna play us all...
I was gonna reply to whateva you dropped wit' some good feedback to help improvement but I think you juz postin' like this to get reactions...

I mean if you actually make beats...and know people who have music videos you gotta realize what you writing on here isn't anything that would be appealing..

Whatz da deal!
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Old 09-18-2014, 08:15 PM   #9
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Fucking garbage. Stop fucking polluting a craft you have no business trying your hand at.

This is awful.

Its bad to the point that its disrespectful to people that actually put time and effort into honing their skills with thoughtfulness and dedication.

U shit out these horrible fuckin riddles in a matter of minutes with no regard for skill, technique, rhythm, complexity, subject content.....etc

I mean what is the point here? Waste your own time in private. Dont waste ours.

You are the worst writer on this entire site and you are oblivious to it because your a delusional fucking idiot.

People like u saturate the craft and turn legitimate practitioners away from something that you should have never had access to from the start.
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Old 09-18-2014, 08:18 PM   #10
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I don't know what Wack MC is. Is this a parody of bad writing? Because if so you did really well, because this was objectively terrible. All of your rhymes were basic and you often added an unnecessary word after a comma just to make them work (, see). The content was childish and base, without being aware or satirical. It was like reading a 5th grade boy writing potty humor, with worse rhymes. Just being honest. Read some of the 'respected' writers here and try harder to do better. Honest feed.
thank you!!!!! That was perfect feedback!

@Bags --- you take yourself way too seriously, bro. If you lost 25% of your ego you'd be 200 times better.
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