Plot vs timeless - PLOT WINS

[Sharp]

Netcees Newbie Tourney VII

Rules

Due Dates:

• Verses are due Friday,
  September 12th 2014 11:59 PM PST.
• Check Ins are due WEDNESDAY, Sept 10t 2014
• Battles that lack votes may close later.
• One sided battles may get closed early.
• Extensions are 24 hours

Line Limit:

• Min. = 8 lines
• Max. = 16 lines
• Limit MUST be agreed upon

General Rules:

• First to 5, Win by 2, 3-0=KO
• 1st person to post can't edit after the 2nd person posts.
• 2nd person to post can't edit after a vote has been made.
• Feeding = DQ.
• Recycling = DQ.
• Biting = DQ.
• No freeposting, swaying or bitching.
• Unless a picture battle is agreed upon,
  linking to your opponent's picture or posting it
  means you will be disqualified.
• A check in ISmandatory.
• Competitors should agree on a line limit in their check in.
• If no line limit is agreed on, then the 2nd person to post
  must match the 1st person's line amount.

@Plot @timeless

[Plot]

yup

[timeless]

Yeaaa

[timeless]

Drunk. 10am. I will forget about this so fuck your criticism.


Plot be stressed, check the avatar all depressed.
No direction with a lack of heart, he fiends sex.
Asked sharp nine for some smart pickup lines,
ended up messaging certain, asking for some fuck time.
Witty volunteered, or was it the fox that lubed up?
Either way, deadman found P's grave, told him to suit up.
When plot finally won the newbie tournament,
he lost his V card, joined queenhoney with roofies whorin it.

[Plot]

sigh, quick key then..

He's prepubescent aint got dope, cash or weapons: a dumb fuckin kid,
So if T's growin a 'stashe, we know its just bum-fluff on his upper-lip.
He aint pickin-up bitches he's just a DUMB FUCKIN KID, not flippin the motions,
We'll never see a dish maritime, when there's so many other fish in the ocean.
Just a story-teller who's short of notions, so my subby will perforate this dork,
Put a sky-light in the back of his skull, that might help to illuminate his thoughts.
This category isnt good for you geek, least I've quickly dispensed of your horrible shit,
I guess here Plot was to strong for you kid, unlike most of your topical spits.

[Sharp]

Would normally do a breakdown here but it's kind of a blowout imo. Alright timeless... You should prolly read a few text battles. Your verse wasn't really too hard hitting or cohesive

Plot had a dope key, maritime was clever and the topical line was a nice personal. Thought he won handily

Timeless. Feel free to pm me for battling tips but


V/plot

[theMuzzl3]

timeless: short, precise lines that rhymed, and the closing 2 lines were good.

plot: it was okay but lacked rhymes on 2 lines, otherwise I'd say u won.

/v timeless

[Kill Spree]

This was one sided tbh

Time - you had trouble with rhyming fa real. I see your concepts and personals but I felt you tried to jam allot into each bar. If you focus on one concept and keep it simple, you'll get this. Get a concept, right the punch then build off that punch

Plot - the bum fluff was kinda childish but I laughed. Maritime was nice tbh. And that was enough there to take it but then the rest of your verse didn't rhyme.

Vote plot for two solid hits

[Objective]

Timeless - Yo, you know you had another day to write, right? Did you just post something to show, or because you were drunk or what? Either way, the shit you posted was pretty wack. It could have been me who posted that shit son. It rhymed tho', so you got that going for you. Some weak bars all over, could have worked with some of the lines that you got and there might have been something. But as it stands now it's just too bland.

Plot - Abit more direct, looking forward to read something more refined by you but overall I thought this was decent. Then again my knowledge in battlerap is very limited, but ye, I can easily tell who I thought did the shit better though.

Vote - Plot.

[jilti]

Plot had..

He's prepubescent aint got dope, cash or weapons: a dumb fuckin kid,
So if T's growin a 'stashe, we know its just bum-fluff on his upper-lip.
He aint pickin-up bitches he's just a DUMB FUCKIN KID, not flippin the motions,
We'll never see a dish maritime, when there's so many other fish in the ocean.
This category isnt good for you geek, least I've quickly dispensed of your horrible shit,
I guess here Plot was to strong for you kid, unlike most of your topical spits.


Vote-Plot

[Camp Bell]

He aint pickin-up bitches he's just a DUMB FUCKIN KID, not flippin the motions,
We'll never see a dish maritime, when there's so many other fish in the ocean.
Just a story-teller who's short of notions, so my subby will perforate this dork,
Put a sky-light in the back of his skull, that might help to illuminate his thoughts.

vs

personals?


i hated times verse cuz it seemed lazy
with some netcee references to make
it relevant. smh. plot was ok here, had
a few misses but the two i quoted was
nice.

vote: plot

[Tic]

Plot got this easily with some cool lines. Maritime was forced AF, though. Timeless was just rhyming and didn't really have any punches. You have to attack your opponent, man, not just rhyme lines. This is a battle so in order to win, you have to direct your lines AT your opponent. You can't just talk shit either because that really does nothing.

Vote - Plot

[Window Taco]

I feel Plot def took this with every bar and in every category. Plot had a nicely creative line with the maritime play and the way he tied his name into the topical jab was cool. Timeless said he was drunk so lol I get it. I think had he been sober or whatever and not keyed the verse he could have gave a stronger showing since it seemed like he had some possible personals to use.

V/Plot