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I'm not a slave for entertainment, I'm entertainments personal slave,
So deep into writing I'm concerned bout the text on my grave. www.youtube.com/watch?v=gV8ozGcGJ6o Last edited by Objective; 09-08-2014 at 02:57 PM. |
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blah blah blah. keep talkin bout my Family,Guy and end up in a wheelchair like Joe Swanson, but in actual life here's two middle fingers up plus the F word cuz it aint my mom on the corner Obscene,Gestures ima 70/30 favorite to advance and take the dub according to predictions from Sharp,Object wont make the cut it's 9/11, a day of remembrance for losses suffered by records, it'd take next anniversary to reflect on all urs fucker dude tryna be a Gangster bully, battlin rookies but he's not hood bcuz if OBGY Nigga acting pussy 10 lines @Objective |
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None would be surprised if your boring ass life memorized Desperate Housewives,
I can tell you hike by yourself to escape crackpipes and keeping your wrists away from jacknives. You've never had a real opinion in your life, and you know that it's right dude, you'd get happy slapped and still question whether or not you support their reason to fight you. When cops come storming your place and charge you for bringing down your race and being putrid, your nick's based on what you say as half your face have paralyzed itself for being attached to stupid. If how you act on the boards reflect how you are in person you're worthless, I'm not speaking about battles and posts without purpose, you just seem constantly nervous; You're keeping a clean slate, a stupid perfectionist whose persona is equally weak and fake, a country of you's a dictators dream state, someone show this no personality having fuck to Eden Lake.
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I'm not a slave for entertainment, I'm entertainments personal slave,
So deep into writing I'm concerned bout the text on my grave. www.youtube.com/watch?v=gV8ozGcGJ6o Last edited by Objective; 09-11-2014 at 11:24 PM. |
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After reading Jilti's I thought Objective had a big shot at winning due to the lack of consistency and misses, but Objective's verse just really didn't have the battle format that I personally prefer. Everyone has their own style and bc of this I won't dog it bc I did like it for what is was. I have this scored 2-1 Objective but Jils bar was lotb so that cancels out 1 of Objective's making it 1-1. To break the draw I'm going to go with the bar that impressed me the most and that was Jiltis. v-Jilti |
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jilti, your lines were great, and nice and short. It had some good punch lines to it, but IMO you're not a newbie, you're a multi.
Objective, your lines were great. I loved them. Despite a missed comma and 1 misspelled word.... I think overall you won this. /v Objective |
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LOL i'm not sure many will get Objective's Eden lake reference apart from me, but either way, jilti got this. Just smoother wording and execution of concepts right throughout his verse. gestures / Just Yours doesnt work in my accent but I allow some leniancy, i'm sure @Destroyer will have something to say about tit though. Erm, yeah, that's about it.
jilti for the smoother overall verse here.
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ima 70/30 favorite to advance and take the dub
according to predictions from Sharp,Object wont make the cut vs nothing. im not sure if i just didnt get it or objects verse lacked a punch or strong enough punches to make ann impact. jilti verse wasnt really all that either, he was just more consistent and that sharp object line was craazy. vote: jilti
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Jilti: 70/30 was cool and 9/11 could have been good if reworded. "On all yours fucker" doesn't really come off as hard hitting.
Objective had a cool S&F piece, but not for a battle. It read nice though and I can see you having some good Open Mic pieces. But on punches, Jilti got this. Vote - Jilti |
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Jilti had:
here's two middle fingers up plus the F word cuz it aint my mom on the corner Obscene,Gestures ima 70/30 favorite to advance and take the dub according to predictions from Sharp,Object wont make the cut Kinda liked Obs, closer. But the two verses in comparison, Jilti's is a much more effective battle verse. V-Jilti |
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blah blah blah. keep talkin bout my Family,Guy
and end up in a wheelchair like Joe Swanson, but in actual life here's two middle fingers up plus the F word cuz it aint my mom on the corner Obscene,Gestures ima 70/30 favorite to advance and take the dub according to predictions from Sharp,Object wont make the cut it's 9/11, a day of remembrance for losses suffered by records, it'd take next anniversary to reflect on all urs fucker dude tryna be a Gangster bully, battlin rookies but he's not hood bcuz if OBGY Nigga acting pussy i liked the first line it was simple but effective 2nd was not feelin it much 3rd was nice 4th nah man i see where u were goin but it didnt feel that effective closer ...i didnt understand. None would be surprised if your boring ass life memorized Desperate Housewives, I can tell you hike by yourself to escape crackpipes and keeping your wrists away from jacknives. You've never had a real opinion in your life, and you know that it's right dude, you'd get happy slapped and still question whether or not you support their reason to fight you. When cops come storming your place and charge you for bringing down your race and being putrid, your nick's based on what you say as half your face have paralyzed itself for being attached to stupid. If how you act on the boards reflect how you are in person you're worthless, I'm not speaking about battles and posts without purpose, you just seem constantly nervous; You're keeping a clean slate, a stupid perfectionist whose persona is equally weak and fake, a country of you's a dictators dream state, someone show this no personality having fuck to Eden Lake. first was ehhh 2nd was was another ehh line im not really seein no punchlines 3rd line made me fuckin lol ,enjoyed it, 4th was nah, no punch and 5th i see where u were goin but the way u wrote it wasnt that harsh overall jitli got it with lotb it was a close one i liked objectives attached to stupid line tho that shit was funny but based on consistency and harshness jitli gets it v/jilti |
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