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Old 07-26-2013, 03:33 PM   #1
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Default Subcutaneous hyperdermic needles

the letters S.H. are the theme


subcutaneous hyperdermic needles, used as instruments of evil,
shooting heroin directly into the bloodstream of all our people/
hallucinations become a safe haven, and empower the feeble,
till everything is backwards and they crash down from the highest steeple/
see section eight becomes section hate as things get medieval,
poverty is the new secret home of the dark ages upheaval/
sometimes those under these conditions seek a harrowing escape,
so they inject themselves with drugs and imagine a better place/
or a better time as several hours go by,
some how they feel better and don't really know why/
seeking the answer to all the secrets held below skies,
silence holds the truth so shhhhhhhhhhhhhh, speak no lies/
never sacrifice honesty, one look in the mirror its clear,
that selfishness hindered your judgment to get your here/
seek help go to a sober house till things appear,
less clouded, inner sanctity and hope help one persevere
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Old 07-27-2013, 12:12 AM   #2
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wow cool, big words!
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ayyyo fuck outta here with that 'letter S.H. are the theme'...dead that...shit is beyond retarded i aint even got words for that shit to do it justice

& that said, i fucked with this verse, it had its moments...
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hallucinations become a safe haven, and empower the feeble,
till everything is backwards and they crash down from the highest steeple
^ like the message, first line was written nice, second line - i feel the message could've been delivered nicer but wdeva...

fuck it i wont quote anymore, but i will say i didnt mind reading this at all, but it was def lacking a lil something...like originality

never a hate thing, but take it how you want

#1 be easy.
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