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Old 03-10-2014, 03:47 AM   #1
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Exclamation "From Single Cell To Living Hell"

"From Single Cell To Living Hell"


Whether you argue religion conceived us the world that we have
or particle fission as heat and inertia react.
The earth was a mass of violent components
its world uninhabitable by life as we know it.
Ions and protons were fast to generate
a seismic commotion of atmospheric change.
The planetary state reached an extraordinary level
as its recalescent rage meant no water could settle.
The core drawing in metals the planet would need,
but volcanic storms were essential as gas was released.
A gradual easing of temperature meant
rainfall began to increase in torrential descent.
Millennia’s spent as beads then broke from the skies
until the weather relented, leaving ocean’s behind.
These components combined and a new cycle dawned
as we reached a moment in time where life was formed.
Tiny spores of algae hold bold significance -
They provide our orb oxygen through photosynthesis.
A host of primitive flora expand
on their own initiative from water to land.
Early forms of a cyanobacteria constantly merging
in a primordial tapestry of symbiotic convergence.
With oxygen, Earth became more tenantable still
but lots of our early ancestors would be killed.
It lead up to us building on the features that we had
with the necessary skills life needed to adapt.
From seas onto the land, cartilage tissue to bone,
our feet becoming hands as we continued to grow.
Amphibians honing flight as natural selection endeavoured
with the proto-wings that we owned developing feathers.
To weather the elements, fur replaced some scales,
our genetic antecedents balanced weight on tails.
Bipedal traits prevail, we rise up to stand,
as this change unveils an untying of hands.
Our reach rightly expands, along with the girth of our legs,
the arrival of mammals sees births without eggs.
Nature and nurture commence in perfect accord
simians turn into ‘men’ in our earliest form.
Learning to talk helps communication increase
as words replace drawings, we’re able to read.
The attainment of speech was a masterful step
in our brains engineering no other animals met.
With language invented through use of our brains
man had ascended the evolutionary chain.
Us humans created; shaping in time
tools of the trade to aid in our lives.
These basic designs would lead to the usage
of our daily devices, touchscreens and computers.
Our need for ‘improvement’ defied thermodynamics,
leaving the blueprint that Earth had established.
Now we’re usurping the planet of its natural resources
preserving our habitats not a matter of importance.
But what happens when it’s all been brought up from the ground
the vast sums are exhausted and a shortage is pronounced?
We can’t afford to live without it by the time this occurs
a nuclear war is what’s announced and we fight for reserves.
As missiles are returned, our own extinction’s a viable path,
our survival on Earth threatened by the enquiring of man.
We’re so blind to this fact that we can’t even see
we’ve paradise in our grasp, yet it’s never seemed so far from our reach…

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Old 03-10-2014, 07:17 AM   #2
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Shit, this was crazy! Reminded me of the other one ya did, the one I said was like Nas 'I Can'. This was brilliant! Very informative and educational. Vocab in this was second to none.

You're like a lyrical Brian Cox.

Great adaption of the evolution of life.
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Old 03-17-2014, 02:56 AM   #3
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Damn, this was solid all through.. Very elaborate piece with top notch vocab. Really enjoyed it bro
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Old 03-20-2014, 03:24 PM   #4
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Old 04-01-2014, 08:32 AM   #5
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anyone else read this?

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anyone else read this?

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Yeah I think 14 other people already did. Eight of them even liked it.
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Old 04-01-2014, 08:37 AM   #7
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I read it but didn't leave feed before because I'm a lazy douchebag. This was very well written and worthy of a championship verse. I felt in some parts it started to lag, but then a few lines down it'd pick up the pace again and keep me entertained. The last twelve lines or so I thought were damn near flawless and were my favorites of the piece. Nice.
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