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nok Su kow
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Do you pill?..or sniff. Give that milf the dick & kill the rich
Yeah? Cool.. It's payday but life's STILL a bitch We broke & ill equipped, so what's the price of this land? Not like of a man, but right where you stand Ohhhh, you seen my best, huh? I write it in sand Jesus-phlegm, treat this pen like a spike in the hand That's worse than I thought. Last words from the cross I'm sick of this shit, about to murder the boss Killing em softly... Are you sure of the cost? Just a brick in the wall trying to search for a slot It's like hey look cupcake, I give zero fucks about your Facebook update You didn't win no sweepstakes & there ain't no rebate Pea-brain. Keep the weed blazed to cremate ya dream state Place your yums where the stripper rakes her ones My dick orbits around her mouth til it scrape the gums Shave the tongue down to some type of play-doh sponge Okay, you're dumb! Quit playing captain save-a-cunt Trying to raise her sons, lazy bum Raise a razor to ya razor bumps & take the plunge Remember me... The monster to ya soul? I'm on my new shit, though. Ain't karma beautiful? The pen is stronger. Respect's no longer mutual I flow speed, so proceed slowly if you aren't used'ta dope Start'ta jew ya folks, pawning jewlery drawers for pharmaceuticals This type of raw's unusual, & I chase relentless Brain's defective. Put an ad out for a rape apprentice Train with weapons more than Raid: Redemption Such a great invention, the blade's my best friend It's more than just teething. The storage is leaking So follow my trail as I drag this corpse to the ceiling Absinthe-yager assassinator w/Catherine-Zeta You can have this labor, trunk full of plastic layers Trying to catch a kiss from cat woman but that's a taser Ask a neighbor, cuz there's nothing sweet here Cry blood & bleed tears. Time sucks so drink beer 4th birthday at the bar yo... cuz mine was on leap year
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Senior Member
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Dope.
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Mic Check
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haha so sick. i been waiting for a new drop from u. this one was worth the wait. your so straight to the point in ur pieces. no bullshit, just realness. the cocky asshole vibe really works for you haha.
It's like hey look cupcake, I give zero fucks about your Facebook update Okay, you're dumb! Quit playing captain save-a-cunt Trying to raise her sons, lazy bum Raise a razor to ya razor bumps & take the plunge I'm on my new shit, though. Ain't karma beautiful? The pen is stronger. Respect's no longer mutual and then raid redemption catherine zeta shit too Awesome. Oh and great title |
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living
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Ohhhh, you seen my best, huh? I write it in sand
Jesus-phlegm, treat this pen like a spike in the hand It's like hey look cupcake, I give zero fucks about your Facebook update Start'ta jew ya folks, pawning jewlery drawers for pharmaceuticals Absinthe-yager assassinator w/Catherine-Zeta awesome.. i think you're beginning to hit a new stride with the verses ive seen you writing recently. it's like you're rediscovering the fun of it. keep going mah niggar hit me for a collaborashin
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White Earl
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Bout time my g
Wise getting back on his raw shit. Had some slick lines in there. Definitely a dope multi usage going on. Always love some fresh shit from you man. Good to see you dropping again homie. Need to get a collab going
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Razor-thin derision
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This type of raw's unusual, & I chase relentless
Brain's defective. Put an ad out for a rape apprentice Train with weapons more than Raid: Redemption Such a great invention, the blade's my best friend It's more than just teething. The storage is leaking So follow my trail as I drag this corpse to the ceiling Absinthe-yager assassinator w/Catherine-Zeta You can have this labor, trunk full of plastic layers ^bonkers. The rest was chill but the above section was niiice. |
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rhyme capsule.
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Force-feeding the reader rhythms. It can come off pretty damn nicely in segments, and the other times when it's less inspired, the flow is still tangible, so it ticks along. I fucked with that nod to Raid: Redemption, that's a film I'm a fan of.
You rhyme a lot, and go where you like with the content. Overall i'd say it was cool, just not a fan of your style. Last edited by Eŋg; 08-14-2013 at 02:00 PM. |
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