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nyc:
Chimerical comings of chiliastic consciousness clouds the populous bows, fuck it I move with dominance now. Midas drinking molten gold 'til his esophagus drowns carnival of kings muted, morphin' opulence clowns. Seeds to rule - peep poetry, my providence ploughs a cognizant brow, hubris flow 'n the prophetess frowns but FUCK Delphi, I'm moving into prominence proud pullin' bitches on beast mode like I'm Adonis endowed and script subversive slum shit leaving congress in doubt though if they flash Obama's dick pic I promise I'm out Honestly these lies are NY metropolis bound... grab the messengers, bury 'em in necropolis mounds. lately - crystal clarity circles consciousness crowns poor or rich...we're good and evil, simply bottomless nouns. A quantum of karmic soup. Actions consequence bound just spoon up the courage and BUILD like Romulus, dawg wade Vesuvius ash slopes with only oxalis thoughts... then erase friends who act like hippopotamus cocks We're all Earth cells, gravitating homologous dots... Jungle roar alpha swag, kick autonomous trots stat killer God incarnate: the hypothesis drops. vulgar: Joseph Stalin was pot smoking, stalling in droughts Spalding he’d caught, war was his ballgame, pardon the plodding in smock Mocked, he was, for communist plots & calling the shots A sparse conscience; the apostles had brought him to the monolith’s top He’d had preconceived notions, like many, about powerful flocks And maintaining control over the slaves in the mold, bibles were charred Just remember table etiquette when dining with gods, the pagan patrol Will smile upon the traces of scrolls…glad you’re staying abreast of world events but I’d rather see breast through the world’s lens. All the nipples Aegis can hold. I lurk among the Bergeron’s and hyacinths - it puts a burden on my sinuses So many cliques guard my front door, you’ve gotta search the lawn for hyperlinks Persian dawn - the site of sphinx - our turbans donned - the cycle’s stint Inspecting decks, collecting debts for the murmuring myrmidons in Cyprus We urge you to be more open with your writing, Bermuda triangle width Before you lie in a pile of dirt fit for an alliance of pious kings This collab verse was originally written for a split personality The way Satan’s work paid off, we made comparative salaries Until unresolved rage caused me to plagiarize my own work then try to battle me Naturally, I lost, as all do who try to pass a tariff on the sheriff Fists flailing on ya harelip before we tear into your barracks like some barons I’m loco with the hoards exterminating these locusts on the boards You will be assimilated…then pink slipped…LOCUTUSOFBORG And if you think that you’re provokin’ with the chords We’ll treat em like a warthog…smoke em with the boars |
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but FUCK Delphi, I'm moving into prominence proud
pullin' bitches on beast mode like I'm Adonis endowed and script subversive slum shit leaving congress in doubt though if they flash Obama's dick pic I promise I'm out ^lmfao, that was so well written. And pretty much murdered the verse with how well u carried the 2 schemes. I'm def gonna check more of ya stuff.. Joseph Stalin was pot smoking, stalling in droughts Spalding he’d caught, war was his ballgame, pardon the plodding in smock Mocked, he was, for communist plots & calling the shots A sparse conscience; the apostles had brought him to the monolith’s top ^you always had a knack for putting historical shit into perspective in a way that is unmatched on this site. Bravo.. He’d had preconceived notions, like many, about powerful flocks And maintaining control over the slaves in the mold, bibles were charred Just remember table etiquette when dining with gods, the pagan patrol Will smile upon the traces of scrolls…glad you’re staying abreast of world events but I’d rather see breast through the world’s lens. All the nipples Aegis can hold. ^lol, that was crazy. so effortless though. wish i could do shit like that sometimes. I lurk among the Bergeron’s and hyacinths - it puts a burden on my sinuses So many cliques guard my front door, you’ve gotta search the lawn for hyperlinks ^ill. that cliques/hyperlinks shit leaned me. jeezus. pretty dope collab here(as expected). Some pretty raw shit to behold being one of the first thing verses i've read since coming back from haitus. Fuck. really puts things into perspective on how much niggas have elevated their pen game. 'rspect
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nyc came fire, pounded that verse to the ground from a tree top yo.
vulgar came more prounced and low tempo compared to his partner, giving a nice contrast, still came with a passion to motivate any writer great colab, this is what it's about yall. NYC laid a great foundation, heavy laden with tight short bar structure...added depth of knowledge of topic vulgar, great vocab and master of topic pleasure to read, thanks for sharing.
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dayum g's on some vocab shit!
well first of all mad props to NYC for keepin his shit concise and on tempo... again to be able to spit this audio.. underapprecated by most text heads. good shit. Hippopotamus cocks. hahahah word. V ha. this is you to a T. so knowledgeable and technical. some historical references, vocab out the mahfugga. all with retardedly complex multi's and scheming. vulgar personified...as usual "So many cliques guard my front door, you’ve gotta search the lawn for hyperlinks Persian dawn - the site of sphinx - our turbans donned - the cycle’s stint" Wooooowzers you two meshed well on this one. only thing i can say to u V is to try to write to beats more dude. u obviously have this text shit on lock now u gotta try to push urself to make it all fit properly on a real track. it will be well worth it in the end even if u don't spit it now but to be ABLE to when u want to later |
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I thought this was insane as fuck. Some of the words I wasn't sure how to pronounce but I just went w/ the rhyme scheme and pronounced it like that. Vocab was insane. Not even gonna check if it made sense, as I'm sure it did and context clues allow me to make an educated guess on most of the words. Both of the verses I can imagine being spit to a beat and sounding nice as fuck. This was cool as fuck, bros. Keep it up.
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ya this was sick. nyc came fire. when I started reading his verse, I was like oh its gonna be all dictionary words and no flow, but this shit had serious flow. and the multis were pretty ridiculous. had some swag to it too.
vulgar came with it too and really matched the tone and steez used by nyc. but he may have tried to match nyc a bit too much cause although his multis were pretty strong, its not his strong point. that being said the verses did mesh and as a whole were awesome. pz.
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this was pretty beast, you both have nasty vocab and unique style as far as how you put them together. nyc had a little more impact on me because i think his verse was a little more raw and on that battle tip. not taking away from your verse at all vulgar, you to me are more of a philosophical writer and your pieces come off very poetic like if im reading an old book lol. anyways i enjoyed both of the verses. thank you guys for a dope read. peace
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thanks for the feed my Gz
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I thought this was so sick, nyc your was on fire, Both of you had some insane vocabs.
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will edit with response here. been meaning to get at this one + Vulgar's orgasm
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I have the gayest song on my playlist now and it's ruining this.
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