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BEAT:
note: starts really fast just 4 beats in i, talk shit in my dreams, i sleep with an 8 track tryna ramp my shit up, you could say that im laid back with a girl for every day that i wished, for every day back wasting time gettin' high no lie like a drake track man, its not the money its the time that it takes to get nice. ya'll sweeter than a iced lemonaide. man, ya'll sweeter than an iced cake at a wedding between two fags that eloped with a bar of soap, fleshlight n' some lace but its alright, cause the strings just playedddd i slow dance when life throws me a ball, just bring the bouquet, where im from, it gets cold and friendships get old and love comes undone, and myself - i do not know so just, collapse your lungs inhale, and pack it up gettin high ,all the time, lose track, nowhere to go, look back, at what i've done. god damn, its not enough if i had a song for every gram i'd have a grammy. but, . . . .
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Ayo but
I hated this shit. |
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Bags I would like to take the opportunity in this wack niggas thread, to tell you to reply to my K2 Season 1 episode.
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wow bags. must have really got at you when i replied in that thread... u know your digital gfs audio verse. that must have really hit home bud.. im sorry, i didnt realize homie. shittt, maybe i should go back to slinging lines like you guys. then i can get recognized by a handful of individuals on a message board that write hybrid spoken word verses and think people like that shit in real life.
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Sorry boss.
Youll get em next time! |
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why do you write these and not record them?
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honestly, i dont know my identity yet. i tried the drake stuff, eminem, tyler creator, lincoln park...not sure what my style is. guess i fear choosing the wrong path...
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Here's a thought; do your own style instead of copying someone else's.
Crazy, I know, but fuck it might as well give this crazy strategy a shot. |
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lol ,thats a given my man. but if you watch interviews of famous artists william, drake, eminem, jcole, etc they all copied other artists styles before they found their niche. its just part of the process...be yourself yeah i get that i really do
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to be honest this isn't good, take your time & write your style, Get creative.
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i think this shit would go hard if i performed it at a high school or something. ur judge of hot / not is based on how the crowed of 50 netcees that write weird ass stuff on a message board view it. thats wrong. why dont u copy paste the lyrics to pharrels happy and learn some thing
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If you think everything written here is weird, and not applicable to what you want to write, why are you posting this here?
Better yet, since you think the opinions of people on netcees are biased towards 'weird ass stuff' why do you feel the need to defend your work to that very crowd? Do you think were going to collectively look at your argument and say "he's right, were doing it wrong" and then suddenly see your writing for the high quality you purport it to have? Good writing is good writing. Shines through regardless. This isn't it. |
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You're going to say "fags" in a sanctioned high school concert in 2014? Good luck.
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Sorry boss
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cause this is the shit i came from thats why i write here.. im not posting to try to impress anybody im trying to become what your not. what your affraid of thats why you write these stpid ass rhymes cause you cant accept times have changed. every single one of you, when i read your verses its like the same dude wrote them. ur all the same, and i can say that cause i used to be like you. and u can bet ill drop another verse and bags dumb ass is gonna write the same shit tomorrow.. unless i get banned. but cant do anythen bout that
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lol
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keep practicing you'll get better.
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i am better dude
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Ur 17 .... go drink a beer ...get in a fight...wack off....then run away from home. This anger will pass. |
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