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Mic Check
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Microphone Vicious. The tightest most gifted, typin so sick it’s like I’m right at home writin poems, I compose vintage. Like a pro did it, I am so vivid, rhyming so crisp the mic is kinda cold, mind is bold, style is gold..riches. Mind control wizard, so mind ya own business, I been so busy, no time for no kiddies. No xylophones ringin, so what? No cups, and no Styrofoam drinking. But no hate, no beef and no fries with those really. Showcase, you know me, my whole style is so pretty. Oh great ya gold teeth ya whole smile is so blingy. I’m ok, I don’t need a whole pile a those thingies. My own way is toll free, I don’t buy it yo, really. No nines and no millies, no knives and no killing. No lies, I’m no kidding. Know why I’m so illy? Cause I chose rhymes that most guys don’t try to flow, silly…
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nok Su kow
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this wasn't bad. But nothing new from you.
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when i first opened the thread i was slightly disappointed in the length but only cause this was nicely done and it would have been dope to try to extend the verse even longer
pretty much felt like a rhyme mechanic exercise. sword sharpening etc.. ive never seen you join up into any sort of league for writing competitively, only drop these lil poisonous darts in om sections but i enjoy all of them. while you suggest i write more upbeat and positive verses, i challenge you to write something darker and more thematic.. for the record, i think you came out with guns blazing to introduce this one and it began to sort of lull towards the end. right around the smile is so blingy.. thanks
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Fun read nice schemes I always enjoy you lil nuggets. Rhyming internals flow was all on point as per the usual.
Collab sometime.. |
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Yeahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!
Real slick in here Copy, flow is butter smooth, good to see you back at it my G! |
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This was dope. Nice and simple but dope. I liked this. Your flow was hot. You'd sound dope on a mic assuming your delivery is dope too bro. Forget all the complex shit textcees try to do, keep it simple... That's how the best tracks are made.
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I want to transcend. I should write a novel.
More hemingway I say. Tick tock. You should get more emotional without sounding tacky. Write stuff people should quote. Not saying this isn't good. It is. But in the long run, your most treasured pieces won't be pieces like this. Although you love them all the same |
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I sounded douchebaggy i apologize.
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dope shit dallas
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