Jimbo vs. megatron {megatron wins}

[Sn00p]

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@Jimbo @megatron

[megatron]

RIP

[Jimbo]

RIP? Cocky fuck - check fo 10

[Jimbo]

Im a butcher - I take a hatchet - Slash this cock n leave Mega gone
I'll cut 'Mega' from 'Tron' quicker then the producers cut Megan Fox after one
Yo I know your mum was the type to shag anyone who came to the door
You'd think wit a postman's genes you'd deliver, but the only delivery was you from that whore!
This guy wears glasses, pink beanies, I bet da opposite sex never been in his bed..
You are as wanted in AOB's 'family...guy' about as much as they wanted 'Meg'
Go back to lets beef before AOB finds out da way your beggar ass writes
Cus they wont need to be technical geeks to understand the term - 'Megabites'
Seriously hes only here to battle cus he heard about AOB's archives
His lines are so rehashed ill be surprised if they dont start #overusedpunchlines

[megatron]

Lets get it clear, ya not a thug ur a queer.ill stomp ya leg w. the force of 7 bears
You can try n claim u G to the bone till i have u lookin at it like kevin ware
U not the scrap type ,I dont even think u strike fear in a midget
If i give jim a knee he'll be out cold, quiet all u hearin is crickets
You on kno who u facin fool, im bout that action ill take ya cash b4 u can make a move
It aint the same for u, cuz if Bo jack son the only thing he stole was a base or two
since he was born he never saw that part of a bitch again, shit if he get sugar he had to ask his neighbor
This nigga here got a fisherman swag, he cant reel a bitch in he jus a master baiter
Id say ur far from clever g, U beatin tron is somethin that u would neva see
Battlins my specialty, we'd have to be talkin time zones for u to ever be ahead of me

RIP

[Sharp]

Family Guy, megabites

v

kevin ware, bo jackson


alright battle. Jimbo, you should prolly drop the quotes. You should word your punches so the wp is detectable, quotes generally make the lines look corny. fairly close, could see it going either way, but going beyond the 2 quoted from each Jim's were all misses while megatron's jim a knee was alright. boiled down to that for me. Keep it up guys

v/ megatron

[megatron]

vote?

[bleak]

Family guy, almost megabites would've been better if he actually bit.

vs.

jim a knee, bo jackson

Both need to work on consistency, the ones I quoted were decent but most of the unquotes were misses. Decent drops from both, but I got tron by a half quote.

v/Megatron

[Dominate]

Megan Fox cool/decent, 'delivery' wp reeeallly old n that hurt u, family guy nice - wording a bit off but still liked, megabites prolly been done on him cuz seems obv and would be better if u had some grounds to claim he bit, rehashed I thought was pretty decent... not bad dawg, keep improving

vs

Kevin ware OK, jim a knee/crickets dope - lotb, bo jackson pretty nice np and well worded, fisherman nah thought was a miss, closer concept seen a lot before n that hurt u a bit... good start, end fell off... but ur not bad at all


crickets was lotb, then bo jackson, then family guy, then rehashed... delivery was the worst miss, followed by time zone and/or fisherman

so vote Mega bc his good bars were better and his bad bars weren't as bad albeit he had one more of them



v/ Mega

[~RustyGunZ~]

Yo I know your mum was the type to shag anyone who came to the door
You'd think wit a postman's genes you'd deliver, but the only delivery was you from that whore!
Go back to lets beef before AOB finds out da way your beggar ass writes
Cus they wont need to be technical geeks to understand the term - 'Megabites'
Seriously hes only here to battle cus he heard about AOB's archives
His lines are so rehashed ill be surprised if they dont start #overusedpunchlines

opener nah. family guy line was a cool concept the bar was just not worded nicely at all. postman line got a chuckle it wasn't DELIVERED well but i like the idea. megabites okay, still shaky wording. rehash ehh okay. decent i guess. wouldn't quote any of those if I was voting in a higher tier battle but those are the ones that weren't to bad. you really need to work on setting up your punches and ending ur bars nicely so the concept works and the shit hits hard. concepts are there though.

vs

Lets get it clear, ya not a thug ur a queer.ill stomp ya leg w. the force of 7 bears
You can try n claim u G to the bone till i have u lookin at it like kevin ware
U not the scrap type ,I dont even think u strike fear in a midget
If i give jim a knee he'll be out cold, quiet all u hearin is crickets
You on kno who u facin fool, im bout that action ill take ya cash b4 u can make a move
It aint the same for u, cuz if Bo jack son the only thing he stole was a base or two

last two were bad misses, the closer was super played. those quotes were cool though same as jimbo though u don't word ur lines well at all, makes it more awkward to read. the crickets concept was LOTB though so

v/megatron

both need to just work on using those concepts at another level

[ill nik-A]

I honestly only enjoyed the kevin ware line in this battle, some stretched stuff and not muh roflz

I like funny n there wasn't any here... I got mega winning though

[Defiant]

nothing

vs

U not the scrap type ,I dont even think u strike fear in a midget
If i give jim a knee he'll be out cold, quiet all u hearin is crickets


mayyyyyybbbeee im being to harsh, but jim you gotta try and rhyme better, real weak rhyming.
both gotta try and make the wording harsher, cricket was the only thing i liked so mega gets the win

vote - megatron