Dystopian vs. Rayge {Rayge wins}

[Sn00p]

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@Dystopian @Rayge

[Maximus]

Yeah, 10

[Plot]

Check

[Plot]

Imma need a 24hr extension bro..

[~RustyGunZ~]

@Rayge is that cool w/ u?

[Maximus]

Yeah,

[Maximus]

Dictionary meaning of Dystopia:
'an imaginary place where the people in it lead dehumanized lives'
.
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Wtf? That wack name describes u perfectly & da rhymes u type aint ill
u're da Dystopian from an imaginary place which doesnt exist like ur skill
Yeah, Vinzr's from Sydney and i dont give a fuck if u split his cap in two
funny.. last week u left that Austrailian Open, this week my Tennis smashin u
da awards, da medals & plaques aint urs. So stop fronting with da keys
we'll never see a Dystrophy... i just hope he dies from dat muscular disease
u're a bitch so stop acting like u're ready for war or i'll leave ur ass buried
u're not dressed for da STORM.. u just wear skirts & take pics w/ dat blackberry
u're a gay with sloppy wording and u lack the wit for this shit
fag! i told u get the Flo on Point... u tried luring him to touch da tip of ur dick
.
.
Bla

[Plot]

Should I tell em Rayge is the dope article, and RB thought he was wonderful?
Sarcasm has some deep depths, but I don't think A.O.B. is that gullible.
So Ill just handle Rayge like anger management, coz there's no doubt he fakes it,
Always thinking he drops outrageous, when all we see is what a dropout Rayge is.
This fake jerks just paperwork to me, Imma take his head for a memento,
Have him pressed to the wall under attack, like didn't you get the memo?
Plus he's got such an evil bitch, that wont fuck him coz he's feeble as shit,
So its ironic that she loves the syringes, but won't touch his needle Dick.
Probably coz this crinkled up dudes a seasoned fag, that cringes from the truth,
So now I'm showing raisin the box, finally berrying this wrinkled old fruit.

[Orc]

Wtf? That wack name describes u perfectly & da rhymes u type aint ill
u're da Dystopian from an imaginary place which doesnt exist like ur skill
OK..NOTHING TOO HARD HITTING.
Yeah, Vinzr's from Sydney and i dont give a fuck if u split his cap in two
funny.. last week u left that Austrailian Open, this week my Tennis smashin u
THIS IS GOOD.
da awards, da medals & plaques aint urs. So stop fronting with da keys
we'll never see a Dystrophy... i just hope he dies from dat muscular disease
ALSO GOOD.
u're a bitch so stop acting like u're ready for war or i'll leave ur ass buried
u're not dressed for da STORM.. u just wear skirts & take pics w/ dat blackberry
MEHH SO/SO.
u're a gay with sloppy wording and u lack the wit for this shit
fag! i told u get the Flo on Point... u tried luring him to touch da tip of ur dick
OBVIOUS FLIP HERE

Should I tell em Rayge is the dope article, and RB thought he was wonderful?
Sarcasm has some deep depths, but I don't think A.O.B. is that gullible.
NO STING TO THE CONCEPT...LACKS WIT.
So Ill just handle Rayge like anger management, coz there's no doubt he fakes it,
Always thinking he drops outrageous, when all we see is what a dropout Rayge is.
THIS IS CLEVER.
This fake jerks just paperwork to me, Imma take his head for a memento,
Have him pressed to the wall under attack, like didn't you get the memo?
OLD WP BUT OK.
Plus he's got such an evil bitch, that wont fuck him coz he's feeble as shit,
So its ironic that she loves the syringes, but won't touch his needle Dick.
NOT FEELING THIS HERE. SOUNDS LIKE AN OLD JOKE
Probably coz this crinkled up dudes a seasoned fag, that cringes from the truth,
So now I'm showing raisin the box, finally berrying this wrinkled old fruit.
NOT FEELING THIS ONE.


I THINK RAYGE WAS MORE CONSISTENT. THIS WAS A CLOSE BATTLE THO ITS JUST THAT ONE HAD THE BETTER FLIPS TO THEIR CONCEPTS. NOT TOO TAKE AWAY ANYTHING FROM DYSTOPIAN HE HAD SOME OK CONCEPTS BUT CREATIVITY AND EXECUTION HAS TO BE TAKEN INTO ACC. IVE GOT RAYGE HERE IN A CLOSE ONE.

VOTE RAYGE

[Ox]

Originally Posted by Rayge

Dictionary meaning of Dystopia:
'an imaginary place where the people in it lead dehumanized lives'
.
.
Wtf? That wack name describes u perfectly & da rhymes u type aint ill
u're da Dystopian from an imaginary place which doesnt exist like ur skill

nah

Yeah, Vinzr's from Sydney and i dont give a fuck if u split his cap in two
funny.. last week u left that Austrailian Open, this week my Tennis smashin u

NICE W/P & personal usage cool

da awards, da medals & plaques aint urs. So stop fronting with da keys
we'll never see a Dystrophy... i just hope he dies from dat muscular disease

ehh should of reworded this, felt like u got lazy here tbh

u're a bitch so stop acting like u're ready for war or i'll leave ur ass buried
u're not dressed for da STORM.. u just wear skirts & take pics w/ dat blackberry

nah not really feelin this

u're a gay with sloppy wording and u lack the wit for this shit
fag! i told u get the Flo on Point... u tried luring him to touch da tip of ur dick

lol quality but not really ether material for a closer imo

Originally Posted by Dystopian

Should I tell em Rayge is the dope article, and RB thought he was wonderful?
Sarcasm has some deep depths, but I don't think A.O.B. is that gullible.

kinda statementishy

So Ill just handle Rayge like anger management, coz there's no doubt he fakes it,
Always thinking he drops outrageous, when all we see is what a dropout Rayge is.

smooth flow but not liking the angle u went with here..

This fake jerks just paperwork to me, Imma take his head for a memento,
Have him pressed to the wall under attack, like didn't you get the memo?

nah bruh this was a bad miss

Plus he's got such an evil bitch, that wont fuck him coz he's feeble as shit,
So its ironic that she loves the syringes, but won't touch his needle Dick.

Lol this is better

Probably coz this crinkled up dudes a seasoned fag, that cringes from the truth,
So now I'm showing raisin the box, finally berrying this wrinkled old fruit.

lol ok

v/rayge he had LOTB plus just harder hits and not so bad of missed compare to dys though dys had his moments more LOL's for me tbh but ryage had the better verse

[Sharp]

Basically

Tennis

I swear I saw Trill Clinton use that distrophy - dystrophy line on NC... wanna say it was a BA tourney... have to give you the benefit of the doubt. As it stands it was almost

v

needledick


I've seen both drop a lot better. Rayge had the LOTB with the Tennis line, and I really would be surprised if he bit so I wont let that take away from his verse.

V/ Rayge

[Dominate]

Dictionary meaning of Dystopia:
'an imaginary place where the people in it lead dehumanized lives'
.as a general rule of thumb if u gotta explain ur punches they are not gonna be good...
.
Wtf? That wack name describes u perfectly & da rhymes u type aint ill
u're da Dystopian from an imaginary place which doesnt exist like ur skill
... And this is no exception
Yeah, Vinzr's from Sydney and i dont give a fuck if u split his cap in two
funny.. last week u left that Austrailian Open, this week my Tennis smashin u
tennis wp played but the personal kinda makes it cool
da awards, da medals & plaques aint urs. So stop fronting with da keys
we'll never see a Dystrophy... i just hope he dies from dat muscular disease
cool, good np and set up well
u're a bitch so stop acting like u're ready for war or i'll leave ur ass buried
u're not dressed for da STORM.. u just wear skirts & take pics w/ dat blackberry
nah didn't do anything for me
u're a gay with sloppy wording and u lack the wit for this shit
fag! i told u get the Flo on Point... u tried luring him to touch da tip of ur dick
.ehhhh nah not really digging it


vs


Should I tell em Rayge is the dope article, and RB thought he was wonderful?
Sarcasm has some deep depths, but I don't think A.O.B. is that gullible.
bland, statementish
So Ill just handle Rayge like anger management, coz there's no doubt he fakes it,
Always thinking he drops outrageous, when all we see is what a dropout Rayge is.
cool, not bad. Could have been better by setting up the 'dropout' diss a bit more in the first line
This fake jerks just paperwork to me, Imma take his head for a memento,
Have him pressed to the wall under attack, like didn't you get the memo?
a tack wp played... Liked how u worded the flip tho
Plus he's got such an evil bitch, that wont fuck him coz he's feeble as shit,
So its ironic that she loves the syringes, but won't touch his needle Dick.
not bad
Probably coz this crinkled up dudes a seasoned fag, that cringes from the truth,
So now I'm showing raisin the box, finally berrying this wrinkled old fruit
the raisin/ray's in and 'wrinkled old fruit' was a dope concept, but the berrying bit was corny IMO.

both of y'all showing a lot of potential in this. I was impressed. Both just need to work on wording to make it harsher and have more swag, and also learn what's played, but that only comes with being around a while.

Got Dystopian here with more stuff I liked


V/ Dystopian

[Cashius]

Australian open, dystrophy

Vs.

Pressed to the wall

Rayge was just more the style I prefer. Direct with some decent concepts. Dys was decent but I thought Rayge got it.

Rayge.

[Split]

Tennis, dystrophy,

Outrageous was nice flip but lacking substance, memo

If that dropout line had a basis or was a personal that woulda took it. Close battle, good showing, hafta give it to Rayge for more quotables and more sting.

Rayge

[Flow]

Vote dystopian

Alot of played stuff here but think dystopian took this by a whisper.

[Sn00p]

5-2, Rayge. First to seven wins. Must win by two.

[Witty]

Wtf? That wack name describes u perfectly & da rhymes u type aint ill
u're da Dystopian from an imaginary place which doesnt exist like ur skill
I didn't like this one
Yeah, Vinzr's from Sydney and i dont give a fuck if u split his cap in two
funny.. last week u left that Austrailian Open, this week my Tennis smashin u
Lmao...this was dope
da awards, da medals & plaques aint urs. So stop fronting with da keys
we'll never see a Dystrophy... i just hope he dies from dat muscular disease
I think u cud have made it sting more, but it was dope either way
u're a bitch so stop acting like u're ready for war or i'll leave ur ass buried
u're not dressed for da STORM.. u just wear skirts & take pics w/ dat blackberry
Ehhh, not horrible...but not on the level i expect from u
u're a gay with sloppy wording and u lack the wit for this shit
fag! i told u get the Flo on Point... u tried luring him to touch da tip of ur dick
Nah

vs

Should I tell em Rayge is the dope article, and RB thought he was wonderful?
Sarcasm has some deep depths, but I don't think A.O.B. is that gullible.
Nah
So Ill just handle Rayge like anger management, coz there's no doubt he fakes it,
Always thinking he drops outrageous, when all we see is what a dropout Rayge is.
Illll
This fake jerks just paperwork to me, Imma take his head for a memento,
Have him pressed to the wall under attack, like didn't you get the memo?
nah
Plus he's got such an evil bitch, that wont fuck him coz he's feeble as shit,
So its ironic that she loves the syringes, but won't touch his needle Dick.
Could have done more, not bad
Probably coz this crinkled up dudes a seasoned fag, that cringes from the truth,
So now I'm showing raisin the box, finally berrying this wrinkled old fruit.
Nearly very clever, not bad again

I think Dys definitely has talent, his second bar was reall dope imo I just think Rayge was more clever with his concepts and his wording was smoother...battle was close enough though.

Vote - Rayge

[~RustyGunZ~]

Yeah, Vinzr's from Sydney and i dont give a fuck if u split his cap in two
funny.. last week u left that Austrailian Open, this week my Tennis smashin u
da awards, da medals & plaques aint urs. So stop fronting with da keys
we'll never see a Dystrophy... i just hope he dies from dat muscular disease

the dystopian line could've been ill but the wording was sloppy. ten is played but the first half of the set up made it a cool personal. dystrophy was clever. blackberry storms are like 2 years old so takes from the punch also the rest of the bar was sloppy not a bad attempt though. closer nah.

vs

This fake jerks just paperwork to me, Imma take his head for a memento,
Have him pressed to the wall under attack, like didn't you get the memo?

one quote is played but all that was decent, rays in was a good idea but the last part of the bar killed it. otherwise statementish or just bland.

v/rayge