Whip Game proper

Eviscerate · 02-02-2014, 04:11 AM

The Garsons quality's higher, 3-peice complete shod in tires
on the block ..it's fire, Continental's swabbed with McGuiars
hella flush. that stance meaner than anything seen on 19's
projectors reflecting diamond gleam intensity of HID beams
for a glimpse of Eviscerate, spectators place they face on the glass
with an air of grace and of class, way that i flash suede on the dash
pass, the Grey Poupon. peasants i poop-on, and take swigs of Hennessy
cognac enters me. this shit is heavenly, reclined in leathery
nobody knows it's me, but they notice me. burl wood below my seats
premium package all i see, Junction Produce from over seas
kit costs 6 G's. I don't ball on clothes, instead, my Whip game proper
Work Equips. drivin big bodies, lookin straight mobster..

PancakeBrah · 02-02-2014, 12:41 PM

Ha this was entertaining. The first line was the best, flow wise. Very slick. It was refreshing to see something other than the normal types of open mic pieces. You wrote about something you're passionate about in a style you're known for. Good stuff. Write more things.

Frank · 02-02-2014, 02:57 PM

Whattup

Exis · 02-04-2014, 07:32 AM

Havn't read sumthin' from you in a long time, this was solid...the middle section was tight imo.

Stay upwards.

Hush · 02-05-2014, 03:30 PM

Dope

CopyPat · 02-05-2014, 04:31 PM

haha sup evis i liked this shit man. fairly simple on a technical basis but mad imagery, really swaggy feel to it. reminded me of some old jayz kinda. dropped some cool vocab that flowed nice. leathery peasants i poop on grey poupon etc. really gave it that classy rich feel hahaha. enjoyable man. also could see this being a nice lil aduio verse. all the lines were kept at the same length etc . good shit bro. post more

Eviscerate · 02-06-2014, 05:27 PM

thnx doods

02-02-2014, 04:11 AM	#1
Eviscerate stokely carmichael of rap Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 144 Rep Power: 3155074	Whip Game proper The Garsons quality's higher, 3-peice complete shod in tires on the block ..it's fire, Continental's swabbed with McGuiars hella flush. that stance meaner than anything seen on 19's projectors reflecting diamond gleam intensity of HID beams for a glimpse of Eviscerate, spectators place they face on the glass with an air of grace and of class, way that i flash suede on the dash pass, the Grey Poupon. peasants i poop-on, and take swigs of Hennessy cognac enters me. this shit is heavenly, reclined in leathery nobody knows it's me, but they notice me. burl wood below my seats premium package all i see, Junction Produce from over seas kit costs 6 G's. I don't ball on clothes, instead, my Whip game proper Work Equips. drivin big bodies, lookin straight mobster.. __________________ i used to do that here.. Last edited by Eviscerate; 02-25-2016 at 03:11 AM.

02-02-2014, 12:41 PM	#2
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	Ha this was entertaining. The first line was the best, flow wise. Very slick. It was refreshing to see something other than the normal types of open mic pieces. You wrote about something you're passionate about in a style you're known for. Good stuff. Write more things. __________________ Netcees 2025 Revivalist Movement Founder

02-02-2014, 02:57 PM	#3
Frank Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 3,228 Champed - NWL Season 2 - Art of Writing League (5x) - Lime Green Poetry Association - AOWL Season 6 - AOWL Season 10 Rep Power: 3853347	Whattup __________________ *VETWORK*

02-05-2014, 03:30 PM	#5
Hush NJ Devil Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,036 Battle Record: Who Cares Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Rep Power: 84181420	Dope __________________ Bed stuy fly Bushwick sick East ny walk

02-05-2014, 04:31 PM	#6
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	haha sup evis i liked this shit man. fairly simple on a technical basis but mad imagery, really swaggy feel to it. reminded me of some old jayz kinda. dropped some cool vocab that flowed nice. leathery peasants i poop on grey poupon etc. really gave it that classy rich feel hahaha. enjoyable man. also could see this being a nice lil aduio verse. all the lines were kept at the same length etc . good shit bro. post more __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.

02-04-2014, 07:32 AM	#4
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,934 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Havn't read sumthin' from you in a long time, this was solid...the middle section was tight imo. Stay upwards.

02-06-2014, 05:27 PM	#7
Eviscerate stokely carmichael of rap Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 144 Rep Power: 3155074	thnx doods __________________ i used to do that here..