Swag&Flow FPS Braggado. (Multi-practice)

[Objective]

The palette of dominance paints a picture of violence
fueled with confidence, saints can't scripture the silence
that marks the battlefield, it sparks what the cattle wields
that'll yield against my army of sharks with human shields.
As we embark;
Get the cues in there when Lucifer's abusing queers,
the truth is here polluting fear, I keep it as a souvenir.
They're accusing air for oxygens foxy lens, my optic pens
writes against humanity, my reality's a toxic cleanse.
He's on the fence dropshotting the hens,
stop mocking the sense, it's fucking intense.
Can't knock the suspense, cockgobblers pretends
they're harder than friends with shock charging defense,
we're bombarding your dens at your departments expense,
a destroyer, no lawyer can judge our apartments defence.
Tom Sawyer's offense doesn't know what honor is,
you bitches can't front my PHD in being chauvinist.
Unless you're me you got no reason to be an optimist,
nothing is stopping this, I'm your personal apocalypse.

[zygote]

The title says practice so here is some input to hopefully assist. Perhaps it would be effective to use natural phrases and the most simple language to create the multiple rhyme. The technique will become easier if the language is simple it will not become awkward. E.g., you've written the battlefield - cattle wields rhyme. However, the wording is awkward "that marks the battlefield, it sparks what the cattle wields" - I understand you want to reference a cattle prong. Then why not just use the words 'Cattle prong' as the rhyme scheme instead?
Same thing for this section "they're harder than friends with shock charging defense,
we're bombarding your dens at your departments expense,
a destroyer, no lawyer can judge our apartments defence." Try to word it with a more conventional sentence structure, some parts here like in the last line the main object of the sentence is in the wrong spot at the start there. Keeping the multiple rhymes to a simple and correct language is much better than writing an awkward phrase. E.g., "picture of violence
fueled with confidence, saints can't scripture the silence" - 'scripture' is the wrong form of word, a scripture is not an action it is a thing, so it makes the phrase awkward. The rhyme technique was good though, nothing wrong with the actual rhyming, just the phrasing is off-putting. Perhaps it would be better practice to find the simple/direct phrasing that fit naturally rather than trying too hard to find some rhyming words and having a strangely worded sentence.

[Wise Wiggles]

liked the last four words

[Orc]

thought it was a cool read, not too complex w/ the multi patterns but u speak another language, right? i think its dope as fuck u can rhyme like u do. anyway yea, cool little read here. enjoyed some of the images

[big baby]

ZYG is becoming my friend. Agreed with him as I read it.

[Scripter]

fantastic bro
not like other trash I've read before
the whole thing had swag and grows
I'm glad ta brag laugh at gags you have savage flow

[jdeek]

i agree with zyg here...i don't think i've read anything else from you...but i will look for something else. s&f braggo made me open this...but it seems like you were trying too hard for the multis...s&f should be direct and hard hitting, at least that's how i view it...and this didn't really draw me in or keep me interested too long...it seems like you know what you're doing...just trying too hard here...i'll look for something else...but like dude said...let it come naturally...keep writing

[Objective]

Word, thanks for all the feed! Specially you @ZYG. Agree with everything you're saying, should have googled the word or at least double checked ''scripture''. Inspiration hit and I should have been more aware about the fact that some things that seems ''ok'' to me, isn't when it comes down to it. Going to try to be more coherent in the future. It's kinda similar to a norwegian word I just happened to think of when I wrote it. I realize how badly I failed when I read your feed, haha. And everything you said was on point. Dope shit.

@Orc: Ye, I do, but when I choose to write in a different language I kinda feel like I should be able to do better at it as well. Appreciate the read and that you enjoyed some of the lines. Thanks for the props as well.

@jdeek: Word, I often experiment with stuff in the OM though, so I'm not sure if you'll find anything to your liking here. The topical tournament might be more interesting in regards of that. This isn't my usual style, just trying to add more shit to my bag of tricks so any feed is valuable to me. I get what you're saying. Thanks for taking your time to read & feed, appreciated!

Rofl @ Scripter.

[Exis]

It's pretty hard to critique sumthin' when it's an exercise for your own benefit, unless you are regarded as some awesome personal trainer I guess but yeah this had some things which were cool and others not so...some of your word choices can be best described as odd which made certain places here read awkward, hence fuckin' the flow up imo...like I said 'tis tricky leavin' thoughts on an experimental joint man, last bar is dope though.

Stay uppity.