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Old 01-04-2014, 07:43 AM   #1
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I fit the nomenclature of a known crusader,
Associated with holding sabres, crossbows and rapiers,
Keep a hidden shank in my fitted cap like the Oakland Raiders (as shown by Neighbor).
You fold like paper when I pick apart your broken nature,
Criticizing every facet of your own behavior.
Your skill is like an ice cube - mine is like a frozen glacier so grand in stature it could span the whole equator.
Unloading chambers to change your skull into a smoking crater.
My style is basically excessive hyperbole designed perfectly,
My grammar is fine and I write with a dire Certainty, the rhymes in each line can fry thermally your mind circuitry.
I write with a wide diversity, Vulgar would describe it as a Persian caravan adventure from Samarkand to Mecca.
You’re just a basement dweller, your Grandma’s cellar is your hacienda.
My style is precise at catching errors like a tax assessor.
This is task force Kappa Delta - we’re reading active sensors in the Alpha sector, wait Zygote has escaped, activate all Satnav antennas.
I come in peace like an open handed gesture, and then thrash pretenders because frankly I'm better.
Unbeatable like an acapella, defeat opponents at my leisure and mute you like flash suppressor.
Raw enough to give you salmonella, attack defences in half a second to completely smash your center.
You’re a badly tempered transgendered sex offender clad in leather,
You make me sick – I’ll need an Alka-Seltzer just to stand your presence.
Put opponents under massive pressure like a trash compressor,
I grow tired with your bland conjecture, what you craft is boring,
What I craft is habit forming, it should come with flashing warnings.
Without resorting to a moderate effort I could have every novelist bettered with one dominant sentence.
I’m as consistent as dead man referencing coffees and breakfast and psychological pressures.
My cognitive ventures are incredibly handled, my pseudo-intellectual technical babble can leave VERITAS baffled.
Aggressively smack you, I create the kind of things you could not produce,
The rhyme technique makes CopyPat appear like Dr. Seuss. This is child’s play like halftime orange juice and soccer boots,
So give me my proper dues or I’ll give your chest a target, I know more rhymes than Pancakebrah knows different independent artists.
My skill set is the sharpest in every single department I kill the competition market.
Regardless of your pathetic attempts I press onwards with an aggressive intent,
Study my opponents with a sense of contempt, their efforts to beat me are ineffective at best.
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Old 01-04-2014, 09:08 AM   #2
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You fold like paper when I pick apart your broken nature,
Criticizing every facet of your own behavior.
Your skill is like an ice cube - mine is like a frozen glacier so grand in stature it could span the whole equator.
Unloading chambers to change your skull into a smoking crater.

all real nice man...that glacier spannin the whole equator line was nasty

My style is basically excessive hyperbole designed perfectly,
My grammar is fine and I write with a dire Certainty, the rhymes in each line can fry thermally your mind circuitry.

hyperbole designed perfectly is a little choppy of a word combo, so it messes with the flow a little in my opinion...but that's just me since i'm more of a flow based writer. aside from that...another ill section.

I write with a wide diversity, Vulgar would describe it as a Persian caravan adventure from Samarkand to Mecca.
You’re just a basement dweller, your Grandma’s cellar is your hacienda.

i'm not on here enough to know of the vulgar reference, so i wasn't feelin' the first line...but the second line is funny as shit...g1

Unbeatable like an acapella, defeat opponents at my leisure and mute you like flash suppressor.
Raw enough to give you salmonella, attack defences in half a second to completely smash your center.
You’re a badly tempered transgendered sex offender clad in leather,
You make me sick – I’ll need an Alka-Seltzer just to stand your presence.
Put opponents under massive pressure like a trash compressor,
I grow tired with your bland conjecture, what you craft is boring,
What I craft is habit forming, it should come with flashing warnings.

nothing to say about any one line individually...feelin' all this shit...you're definitely nice with it yo.

overall i like it. just didn't get some of the references here and there and a couple lines i wasn't feelin..but way more shit i did like. flow was nailed in spots...and some solid imagery. good shit man.
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Old 01-04-2014, 12:00 PM   #3
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This was dope. The references were hilarious. I looked and oooed
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Old 01-04-2014, 12:05 PM   #4
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Your skill is like an ice cube - mine is like a frozen glacier so grand in stature it could span the whole equator.
Unloading chambers to change your skull into a smoking crater.

Sikwitit sir. Drop moar, quit playing with toys.
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Old 01-04-2014, 12:42 PM   #5
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Your skill is like an ice cube - mine is like a frozen glacier so grand in stature it could span the whole equator.



Lol, raw
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Old 01-04-2014, 12:52 PM   #6
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The dead man and Cake references had me laughing. Your word usage is top notch seriously. How you manage to maintain a flow with that kinda vocab still surprises me. Always enjoy these pieces from you. Nice shit.
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Old 01-04-2014, 01:59 PM   #7
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Mostly the references were corny to me....but aside from tjem this shit was fire
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Old 01-04-2014, 04:05 PM   #8
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hahaha outstanding. reading any of your "battle raps" has been a treat since day 1. the amount and quality of your wordplays are always incredible. u make them look ridiculously easy. u also hold the flow properly which makes it even better. Still on that very mechanical rigid scheming but it always works. would be neat to see you write a tad more fluidly and not so regimented. since ur so good at imitating styles i think u would be able to do it quite handily. another dandy post good sir! loveed it
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Old 01-04-2014, 04:33 PM   #9
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hahaha the flow was outstanding man..the string of rhymes you put together was just fire..dope references tbh didn't really add or take from the piece..i was more in impressed with your writing skillsa and schemes...you portrayed them very well...dope piece fo sure.

keep posting man I enjoy all of your writing.
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Old 01-04-2014, 04:45 PM   #10
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Cool shit Zyg! Enjoyed the read, some funny shit in there along with a mixture of hard hitting lines and great rhymeschemes like the equator one. Don't know why I've kinda slept on you in the past, thought this was dope as fuck.
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Old 01-04-2014, 09:36 PM   #11
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dope. this style of yours may be my favorite. would be very spittable on a beat. props dude
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Old 01-05-2014, 02:34 PM   #12
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not my favourite of the Battle Rap series, i think it was your last one? but still pretty solid for what it was. since day one i've seen a lot of 'Bis in you -- maybe too much to begin with but your voice seems to be gradually gaining its own identity. these pieces in particular are still highly reminiscent, though. cool.
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who is 'Bis
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Canibis.
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Old 01-05-2014, 06:16 PM   #16
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Lovedd that unbeatable like an accapella phrase.
This was flames zyg. Name references were fun. Enjoyed this
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Nice writing overall, I like how you make braggadocio sound casual. Accomplishing the approach without turning the volume up so high or beating the war drum phonetically.

Favorite part:

"My style is precise at catching errors like a tax assessor.
This is task force Kappa Delta - we’re reading active sensors in the Alpha sector, wait Zygote has escaped, activate all Satnav antennas."

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Ridiculous

Had me smiling the whole way thru
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Yeah this was sick it had me laughing. very subtle

this was my favorite part
"This is task force Kappa Delta"
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