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11-10-2013, 03:56 AM
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ghost in the matrix
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relief
Maybe I shoulda cried with you,
Handed you a tissue when mom died instead of throwing fists at you. I hope you know I never blamed you It was painful to see you hurt but I was going insane too! You lost your wife and I was 22 when it happened we both lost the most important woman in our lives Who could imagine? That the repercussions would leave us cussing busting windows doors cabinets drawers just to end up with nothin. You turned to heroin strippers and alcohol and I saw you were about to fall But I couldn't catch you; I was on those pills after all. you wasted a half million dollars, most would get their throat slit I blame the opiates cuz I know they numb the pain so you don't owe me shit. I remember the last at the house I almost killed you, I choked you unconscious in anger but that's wat pills do when your father tries to kill you and your daughter by setting the house on fire. I saved your life the same night, The cop said he woulda shot you had he caught you with the lighter. We didn't speak for months even when the baby came, I didn't want her to know you or you to even know her name. But then we stopped by one night to cop a sack of weed I didn't wanna see you but you offered it for free. As long as I let you meet your granddaughter I tried to be a man and dammit you saw her. But then I really saw you past all the torture and misery I realized how much you really did for me. You showed me how not to be and its odd to see the facade I believed Wasn't really as hard to be alone; my father and me. I guess we're one in the same...I forgive you. Look how strong we are together look how much shit we've been through! Mom was right, we don't need to be around each other when we're mad, So I fuckin hate to say it but for mom I will... I love you dad
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11-10-2013, 07:23 AM
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you sometimes write such personal and real life emotionally packed stuff. this is refreshing to see in a forum of fantasy rap. thanks for this. good piece.
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11-10-2013, 11:41 AM
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ghost in the matrix
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The fukin phone cut off the first half my verse lol
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11-10-2013, 01:04 PM
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hey bud, thanks for usually feeding all my shit bro, appreciate it. this seemed pretty real legit. more of a poem or letter almost than a rap verse. hard to critique obviously, so i can't really say anything good or bad about it, but i wanted you to know i peep ur shit still. i didn't read your other long one about ur girl or whatever tho.. was too long and emo for my liking haha. i'll keep watchin for ur next one though for sure. u should drop some lil spits in the cypher
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11-10-2013, 09:00 PM
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ghost in the matrix
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@Mike Wrecka and @CopyPat thanks guys an I got the whole verse posted now
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