Humpty Dumpty Dances So Lovely

Mr. J · 10-11-2013, 06:49 PM

Annihilation once again it's the time I'm facin'
the wide arrangement set on my plate, aside from basics
I keep my utensils set...with my eyes complacent
tuck in the napkin, make sure the planets align my spaceship
your lack of faith is disturbing, the death you die is painless
none shall remember, nor will the find time to say shit
disintegration, elimination of all follicles
all fallacies, my interpretation alone is phenomenal
do it for bragging rights for those who had to write
had to think, then got mad cuz they ain't had it right
dust off the crumbs, that makes me a real monster
wear the high heels if your skills are above or hold real mantra
should be a real honor...or reason behind these still waters
I just skip over these stepping stones & conceal product
doing time behind bars that could leave your will haunted
hung up, scared of the real world, what do you feel Doctor?
afraid? Lost? consumed by your so called train of thought
I leave em....walking dead it's true their need for brains is odd...
short witted and unfit to deal with this abrasive draw
keep speakin' on it with your 2 cents, change it all...
rewrite the words insightful herbs bring the gauge, the odds
the rage...the balls, and maybe you could explain to God
how you keep coming up short when I decide to play along....
shit's unpredictable, any minute left is minuscule
too little to get into over shit that's so trivial
they want...words from the wiser, search the earth...
or the cypher...you'll soon see what it's worth you liars
birthed in the fire, rose from the ash...blunt lit
you looking for something else this all your gon' get...
like it matters at all I leave what matters at fault
throw a mirror at your foundation as it shatters the wall
take the nursery route, what you perceive is what you see
especially when these bastards all fall...

Mr. J · 10-13-2013, 04:13 AM

Intrepid

oats · 10-13-2013, 04:26 AM

this was pretty dope to me. more of a flex than anything, but you had a handful of impressive individual lines.

I leave em....walking dead it's true their need for brains is odd...

keep speakin' on it with your 2 cents, change it all...

throw a mirror at your foundation as it shatters the wall

these were my favorite. nice work.

e11even · 10-13-2013, 07:29 AM

I enjoy reading how you put things together. I learn little things every read. I respect your style and execution because it seems effortless how your lines come off to me. I comprehended, but there still seems to be a slightly elusive element to how you set things up.

"short witted and unfit to deal with this abrasive draw
keep speakin' on it with your 2 cents, change it all...
rewrite the words insightful herbs bring the gauge, the odds
the rage...the balls, and maybe you could explain to God
how you keep coming up short when I decide to play along...."

Sick. Maybe when i feel i've hit a comfortable spot in my evolution i'll ask if we can collab on a piece, but right now i'm satisfied with just reading. Good shit J.

Inno · 10-13-2013, 02:37 PM

i dig your style here in the OM seems more loose and relaxed
compared to your style in the league..i dunno prolly not true and
im just talking shit lol..but this was cool man haven't really read anything
from you that i haven't enjoyed...i gotta say i like how you use
such loose language and still your words have this serious tone to them.
i dunno...most people don't like lazy language but you seem to pull it off
quite easily my friend....dope rhyme scheme and the multis i enjoyed through out..

another cool piece man.

Sho Money EMG · 10-13-2013, 06:21 PM

Damn dude, sick vocab. Great flow, nice multies. Def a upgrade from what I read in ur last piece. Started off really strong, great picture u painted.

afraid? Lost? consumed by your so called train of thought
I leave em....walking dead it's true their need for brains is odd...
short witted and unfit to deal with this abrasive draw
keep speakin' on it with your 2 cents, change it all...
rewrite the words insightful herbs bring the gauge, the odds
the rage...the balls, and maybe you could explain to God
how you keep coming up short when I decide to play along....

Sick shit meng.

Keep up the good work

Mr. J · 10-14-2013, 10:54 PM

Thanks fellas appreciated

Bodey · 10-15-2013, 08:59 AM

very solid drop.

doing time behind bars that could leave your will haunted
hung up, scared of the real world, what do you feel Doctor?
afraid? Lost? consumed by your so called train of thought
I leave em....walking dead it's true their need for brains is odd...
short witted and unfit to deal with this abrasive draw
keep speakin' on it with your 2 cents, change it all...

this was def my favorite part. it just flowed so nicely and the words were put together really well. definitely gonna be on the lookout for more of your drops. good stuff

Mr. J · 10-25-2013, 02:04 PM

Did anyone catch the Real Monsters line...
no mas?

Mr. J · 10-27-2013, 01:58 PM

No?

10-11-2013, 06:49 PM	#1
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Humpty Dumpty Dances So Lovely Annihilation once again it's the time I'm facin' the wide arrangement set on my plate, aside from basics I keep my utensils set...with my eyes complacent tuck in the napkin, make sure the planets align my spaceship your lack of faith is disturbing, the death you die is painless none shall remember, nor will the find time to say shit disintegration, elimination of all follicles all fallacies, my interpretation alone is phenomenal do it for bragging rights for those who had to write had to think, then got mad cuz they ain't had it right dust off the crumbs, that makes me a real monster wear the high heels if your skills are above or hold real mantra should be a real honor...or reason behind these still waters I just skip over these stepping stones & conceal product doing time behind bars that could leave your will haunted hung up, scared of the real world, what do you feel Doctor? afraid? Lost? consumed by your so called train of thought I leave em....walking dead it's true their need for brains is odd... short witted and unfit to deal with this abrasive draw keep speakin' on it with your 2 cents, change it all... rewrite the words insightful herbs bring the gauge, the odds the rage...the balls, and maybe you could explain to God how you keep coming up short when I decide to play along.... shit's unpredictable, any minute left is minuscule too little to get into over shit that's so trivial they want...words from the wiser, search the earth... or the cypher...you'll soon see what it's worth you liars birthed in the fire, rose from the ash...blunt lit you looking for something else this all your gon' get... like it matters at all I leave what matters at fault throw a mirror at your foundation as it shatters the wall take the nursery route, what you perceive is what you see especially when these bastards all fall... __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you Last edited by Mr. J; 10-11-2013 at 07:01 PM.

10-13-2013, 04:13 AM	#2
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Intrepid __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

10-13-2013, 04:26 AM	#3
oats Steel Cut Join Date: May 2013 Posts: 5,084 Battle Record: 19-10 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Fight Night LXXXIV - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 79005428	this was pretty dope to me. more of a flex than anything, but you had a handful of impressive individual lines. I leave em....walking dead it's true their need for brains is odd... keep speakin' on it with your 2 cents, change it all... throw a mirror at your foundation as it shatters the wall these were my favorite. nice work. __________________ You should be water

10-13-2013, 07:29 AM	#4
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	I enjoy reading how you put things together. I learn little things every read. I respect your style and execution because it seems effortless how your lines come off to me. I comprehended, but there still seems to be a slightly elusive element to how you set things up. "short witted and unfit to deal with this abrasive draw keep speakin' on it with your 2 cents, change it all... rewrite the words insightful herbs bring the gauge, the odds the rage...the balls, and maybe you could explain to God how you keep coming up short when I decide to play along...." Sick. Maybe when i feel i've hit a comfortable spot in my evolution i'll ask if we can collab on a piece, but right now i'm satisfied with just reading. Good shit J. __________________ Ahem.

10-13-2013, 06:21 PM	#6
Sho Money EMG Senior Member Join Date: May 2013 Location: Zooyork Posts: 2,124 Battle Record: 7-12 Rep Power: 0	Damn dude, sick vocab. Great flow, nice multies. Def a upgrade from what I read in ur last piece. Started off really strong, great picture u painted. afraid? Lost? consumed by your so called train of thought I leave em....walking dead it's true their need for brains is odd... short witted and unfit to deal with this abrasive draw keep speakin' on it with your 2 cents, change it all... rewrite the words insightful herbs bring the gauge, the odds the rage...the balls, and maybe you could explain to God how you keep coming up short when I decide to play along.... Sick shit meng. Keep up the good work __________________ Sho Money \| Camp Bell Team Alpha EMG This site is whack

10-13-2013, 02:37 PM	#5
Inno Ad mini tator Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 10,025 Battle Record: 26-54 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - Black August - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 85899403	i dig your style here in the OM seems more loose and relaxed compared to your style in the league..i dunno prolly not true and im just talking shit lol..but this was cool man haven't really read anything from you that i haven't enjoyed...i gotta say i like how you use such loose language and still your words have this serious tone to them. i dunno...most people don't like lazy language but you seem to pull it off quite easily my friend....dope rhyme scheme and the multis i enjoyed through out.. another cool piece man.

10-14-2013, 10:54 PM	#7
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Thanks fellas appreciated __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

10-25-2013, 02:04 PM	#9
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Did anyone catch the Real Monsters line... no mas? __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

10-27-2013, 01:58 PM	#10
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	No? __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you