my week recently has just been like

Bodey · 09-17-2013, 01:35 AM

8 bucks an hour, livin check to check
mood is goin sour but what can you expect
gotta black british boss who irons all his sheets
with a rack fulla socks to match it for the week
this other girl at my work, is a little off and maybe outta place
asked me for my name and now she stalks my facebook page
10 notifications, like yo this is awesome, man was i excited
but it was only posts and comments from that same bitch who "liked" it
99 taurus has got almost 200 thousand miles on it
relying on a ford is like countin on a child wearin bonnets
gets me from place to place but i keep seeing horrible imagery
cuz when it finally breaks, i'll be stuck in florida's humidity
now i'm aching down 95, sweating til i'm sore and winded
hallucinations melt my mind, totally disoriented
suddenly i'm gettin hungry and human flesh looks yummy
i step into the street, slowin cars, my eyes red and runny
seein kids rappin to beats so i reach through the passenger seat
and laugh as i eat up his teeth and spit it back stabbin his cheeks
stop eatin yourself, stop eatin yourself, you think i need help?
could you please ask these cops why their bullets arent felt?
might as well growl like an animal cuz this world's no longer human
maybe being a foul-heightened cannibal is better than being stupid
you think i give a shit? please! i'm stronger than pcp
and get more ridiculous than this stack of debt fees
pilin up into this metaphorical greed that my bank feeds
to degenerates who still continue to breathe on my fuckin green

i wrote this while listening to music, wasnt payin attention to flow too much, i just kept writing what came to mind. havin fun with it. i'll go back someday and edit it to a steadier rhythm

Wise Wiggles · 09-17-2013, 01:42 AM

Braaaaap what's up?

lol@bonnets, describing your boss was funny.
talkin bout people in your tummy was gross
but then you flipped it and it was like they were eating their own cheek so it was funny again. liked the disoriented line. post moar.

NYCSPITZ · 09-17-2013, 01:43 AM

what up feminem...

good shit

Bodey · 09-17-2013, 01:52 AM

haaa thanks. yeah how obvious was it htat i was listening to SSLP while writing this. got me in a mood. thanks for the reads guys

CopyPat · 09-17-2013, 02:10 AM

this was dope. lots of super original rhymes here and had hella smoothness for the most part till maybe the very end. i really liked this, it also painted a picture pretty well. was introspective, was funny. good drop. also u were being down on ur life a little but more in a funny self deprecating way rather than depressed emo fagness. so props for that. was pretty real. def post more, check my 2 shits out!!!

Kaeo Seru · 09-20-2013, 09:26 AM

I can tell you didn't put a whole lot of thought into it. it reads like a keystyle going from a direct matter-of-fact approach to a more descriptive and imaginative one then to a more metaphorical ending. the flow was ok. off a bit in some lines and rhyme scheme could've been a little more intriguing. but all in all this wasn't a bad piece. i'll look for more of your work in the future to see what you do when you put in some real effort

StarFaggot · 09-20-2013, 10:01 AM

You only make $8/hr. let me retire you ma

hotdogvendorman · 09-20-2013, 10:34 AM

@Aero lmao

e11even · 09-20-2013, 09:28 PM

This was funny... felt like Office Space. The hilarity and anger spun together came off well. Keep trappin!

Dope girl · 09-21-2013, 11:57 AM

I can tell you rushed through the whole thing, take your time, but dope verse.

dull boy · 09-21-2013, 04:12 PM

This was cool.

Geno · 09-21-2013, 05:39 PM

Hello, my love

I believe its time for another collab. Last one was epic. Let's outdue ourselves. Hit me up, still waiting on those naked pics you said you would send m also

Lol. Hit me up baby

Frank Metts · 09-22-2013, 09:54 AM

I feel your pain girl thats a good thing for these pieces.. I love pieces and i can somewhat relate to

My 03 Taurus got liks 192, 000 on it lol

Goo

Bodey · 09-23-2013, 12:57 AM

Frank Metts yo, these tauruses seem like they'll go foreverrr. my friend's got a mercury milan with only 35000 miles on it and she's had more problems with that thing in 4 months than i have with my car in 3 years.

Genocide fuck yeah we're due for another collab. one that i'll actually take my time on. obviously when i come on here now, i'm not re-writing something i already wrote, i'm just droppin whats on my mind and then i leave. but i'm tired of that. i know what i'm capable of. whaddya say we start exploring some concepts and then i'll think about the naked pics

Aero fuckin tell me about it. i dont know anyone who actually lives off less than 10 bucks an hour. ridiculous.

09-17-2013, 01:42 AM	#2
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,505 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788022	Braaaaap what's up? lol@bonnets, describing your boss was funny. talkin bout people in your tummy was gross but then you flipped it and it was like they were eating their own cheek so it was funny again. liked the disoriented line. post moar. __________________ "black as midnight..black as pitch blacker than the soul of the foulest witch"

09-17-2013, 02:10 AM	#5
CopyPat Mic Check Join Date: Mar 2013 Location: Calgary Alberta Canada Posts: 708 Battle Record: 13-10 Rep Power: 3742225	this was dope. lots of super original rhymes here and had hella smoothness for the most part till maybe the very end. i really liked this, it also painted a picture pretty well. was introspective, was funny. good drop. also u were being down on ur life a little but more in a funny self deprecating way rather than depressed emo fagness. so props for that. was pretty real. def post more, check my 2 shits out!!! __________________ My syllable count approximately a billion, bounce. You cannot compete.

09-20-2013, 09:26 AM	#6
Kaeo Seru Keeper Of The Fresh Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: Mayhem Gardens Posts: 84 Rep Power: 36	I can tell you didn't put a whole lot of thought into it. it reads like a keystyle going from a direct matter-of-fact approach to a more descriptive and imaginative one then to a more metaphorical ending. the flow was ok. off a bit in some lines and rhyme scheme could've been a little more intriguing. but all in all this wasn't a bad piece. i'll look for more of your work in the future to see what you do when you put in some real effort __________________

09-20-2013, 10:01 AM	#7
StarFaggot Leave you flatlined. Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 5,108 Battle Record: 12-9 Champed - Site Diss 2013 - Tag Team Tournament III Rep Power: 0	You only make $8/hr. let me retire you ma __________________ [B][CENTER][SIZE="5"] It's Aero join me at RAPBATTLES[/SIZE][/CENTER][/B]

09-20-2013, 10:34 AM	#8
hotdogvendorman Senior Member Join Date: Jun 2013 Posts: 220 Battle Record: 1-2 Rep Power: 403873	@Aero lmao __________________ The Bad Guys..

09-17-2013, 01:43 AM	#3
NYCSPITZ SYRACUSE Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,031 Battle Record: 31-37 Champed - Write Night II - Alias Topical Tournament Rep Power: 4743547	what up feminem... good shit

09-20-2013, 09:28 PM	#9
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	This was funny... felt like Office Space. The hilarity and anger spun together came off well. Keep trappin! __________________ Ahem.

09-21-2013, 11:57 AM	#10
Dope girl Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: I live in Florida Posts: 4,788 Battle Record: 3-8 Rep Power: 55521419	I can tell you rushed through the whole thing, take your time, but dope verse.

09-21-2013, 04:12 PM	#11
dull boy consults Lloyd Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 4,053 Battle Record: 0-8 Champed -1-2 Punch League Roast Rep Power: 39345604	This was cool.

09-21-2013, 05:39 PM	#12
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	Hello, my love I believe its time for another collab. Last one was epic. Let's outdue ourselves. Hit me up, still waiting on those naked pics you said you would send m also Lol. Hit me up baby __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

09-22-2013, 09:54 AM	#13
Frank Metts Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 2,621 Battle Record: 0-1 Rep Power: 2305789	I feel your pain girl thats a good thing for these pieces.. I love pieces and i can somewhat relate to My 03 Taurus got liks 192, 000 on it lol Goo