11-15-2020, 05:37 PM | #1 |
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WEEK 7: Eviction 1-2 VS Fraze 0-1 FRAZE WINS
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11-15-2020, 07:18 PM | #2 |
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16 cool?
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11-15-2020, 09:04 PM | #3 |
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Yeah that's straight.
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11-16-2020, 11:46 PM | #5 |
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Lots of talent in the league when it comes to doing this poem thing
Eviction has been making noise… wait. my bad, I was hearing his phone ring I’m tempting your Eve. She puts her lips on my tree til it hardens Had his bitch on her knees swallowing seeds quicker than Lucifer did in the garden Got your girl in lingerie. I’m the reason her pussy was never the same She stays on that one-Z tip… she loves dragging that out while saying my name Step up and get spanked... in text or throwing hands in person If you wanna step, child… I’ll beat that ass like the red headed version Climbing the side your building, no running and hiding, it’s been real, Jackie Chan skills… I’ll do crazy flips then I’m killing this man with the pencil Turn your family’s small home to an assault zone. I’m getting focused. Silencer/scope. Avoiding default so… I’ll take care of the ‘rents before eviction notice Pro with the blickey. Put holes in your kidneys & hope that you hold it against me One flick of the wrist will make this bitch lift in the air… like I’m w/ Lassie, throwing a frisbee No chances left. You’re now dancing with death on a date with the devil. When I raise arms I’m like Otto Octavius... so you’re getting eight with the metal… @Eviction |
11-17-2020, 12:18 AM | #6 | |
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Bitch if I was in your neck of the woods, you would call the 502. Wrong place at the wrong time, when you try to beef with a hater. Zuch put you in a bad spot, like the cop that shot breyona taylor. You’re names not etched in stone, that’s just a little more facts dude. It’s pissed on and drug in the mud, more than a damn civil war statue. No body cam when stepping on necks, don’t care if these bitches breath. This L will fuck up your holiday, so bad you’ll burn your christmas wreath. Your bitch is flat as fuck it’s hilarious there’s nothing more to her man. I’m still putting the bag in her mouth like it’s the fucking coroner van. We live in close proximity, but when it comes to skill we never parallel. I’ll leave him brainless u’ll see the led top his apple like fucking caramel. Orange soda pop, I’ll half ass my shit, I’m still going to crush this guy. So he’ll either catch a body from an alias, or a fade from a Russian Spy. It’s obvious you got fucked in ur last battle, no reason to believe its hate. CSI investigated ur verse, found semen samples with ur opponents DNA. |
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11-17-2020, 01:14 PM | #7 |
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With the risk of sounding like a asshole you guys should go for quality over quantity
A stronger substance in a smaller amount maybe I admire your hunger to go so many lines but it can be off putting Fraze good to see u back but some rust was evident Lassie line was cool Some off your stuff felt a bit dated but that will shake off in time Evic That closer was bad bro Lol bad U won tho Vote eviction way more creative and crisper wording Both need some gym time tho
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11-18-2020, 10:57 PM | #8 |
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FRAZE
Lots of talent in the league when it comes to doing this poem thing Eviction has been making noise… wait. my bad, I was hearing his phone ring Uh... nah lol. A bit basic I’m tempting your Eve. She puts her lips on my tree til it hardens Had his bitch on her knees swallowing seeds quicker than Lucifer did in the garden Decent Got your girl in lingerie. I’m the reason her pussy was never the same She stays on that one-Z tip… she loves dragging that out while saying my name Meh. Also don't do two girl jokes in a row Step up and get spanked... in text or throwing hands in person If you wanna step, child… I’ll beat that ass like the red headed version Ok Climbing the side your building, no running and hiding, it’s been real, Jackie Chan skills… I’ll do crazy flips then I’m killing this man with the pencil Now you know that don't rhyme. It's also too statement-ish Turn your family’s small home to an assault zone. I’m getting focused. Silencer/scope. Avoiding default so… I’ll take care of the ‘rents before eviction notice 'silencer/scope' was unnecessary, made it too wordy. Nice np Pro with the blickey. Put holes in your kidneys & hope that you hold it against me One flick of the wrist will make this bitch lift in the air… like I’m w/ Lassie, throwing a frisbee Multies are cool, but supposed to be just icing on the cake. This aiigghh No chances left. You’re now dancing with death on a date with the devil. When I raise arms I’m like Otto Octavius... so you’re getting eight with the metal… Not a bad gun bar, creative. Setup coulda been more relevant for a harder hitter Your biggest weakness is your concepts. Here they are, in order: You suck Fucked yo girl Fucked yo girl Ill beat yo ass Ill beat yo ass Ill kill your parents Ill shoot you Ill shoot you I need more creativity & variety. With that said, eviction notice was nice, closer was good, and your structure was good. Other than that i want more bars with the harshness of your closer, the humor of your opener, and the wordplay & wit of the 'rents/step child bars. 5/10 VS EVICTION It’s cool you don’t fuck with snitches, and sad you’ll die slow soon. Bitch if I was in your neck of the woods, you would call the 502. Meh Wrong place at the wrong time, when you try to beef with a hater. Zuch put you in a bad spot, like the cop that shot breyona taylor. The second "the mod did you dirty by matching you with me" bar i've seen this week. They rarely hit because to me, it aint a diss, it's cockiness. Bars rarely work on cockiness alone You’re names not etched in stone, that’s just a little more facts dude. It’s pissed on and drug in the mud, more than a damn civil war statue. Points for relevancy, avg bar No body cam when stepping on necks, don’t care if these bitches breath. This L will fuck up your holiday, so bad you’ll burn your christmas wreath. Should definitely be "breathe". It changes the rhyme. Punch is super basic. Your bitch is flat as fuck it’s hilarious there’s nothing more to her man. I’m still putting the bag in her mouth like it’s the fucking coroner van. Eh shoulda did more We live in close proximity, but when it comes to skill we never parallel. I’ll leave him brainless u’ll see the led top his apple like fucking caramel. Decent gun bar Orange soda pop, I’ll half ass my shit, I’m still going to crush this guy. So he’ll either catch a body from an alias, or a fade from a Russian Spy. Wasn't feeling it It’s obvious you got fucked in ur last battle, no reason to believe its hate. CSI investigated ur verse, found semen samples with ur opponents DNA. Bland, again You aren't creative enough in executing your concepts. For example, 502, bad spot, christmas wreath, DNA are all just basic statements as punches. Your set-ups rarely tied into the punches as well.... improving that alone would improve your shit a lot. 4/10 Turn your family’s small home to an assault zone. I’m getting focused. Silencer/scope. Avoiding default so… I’ll take care of the ‘rents before eviction notice No chances left. You’re now dancing with death on a date with the devil. When I raise arms I’m like Otto Octavius... so you’re getting eight with the metal… VS We live in close proximity, but when it comes to skill we never parallel. I’ll leave him brainless u’ll see the led top his apple like fucking caramel. Vote: Fraze |
11-19-2020, 05:40 PM | #9 |
Gang shit on my brain
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Lots of talent in the league when it comes to doing this poem thing
Eviction has been making noise… wait. my bad, I was hearing his phone ring lighttt I’m tempting your Eve. She puts her lips on my tree til it hardens Had his bitch on her knees swallowing seeds quicker than Lucifer did in the garden not feelin Got your girl in lingerie. I’m the reason her pussy was never the same She stays on that one-Z tip… she loves dragging that out while saying my name nahh Step up and get spanked... in text or throwing hands in person If you wanna step, child… I’ll beat that ass like the red headed version kinda funny but simple Climbing the side your building, no running and hiding, it’s been real, Jackie Chan skills… I’ll do crazy flips then I’m killing this man with the pencil ok i guess. is the punch killing them literally w/the pencil and figuratively w/your writing?? Turn your family’s small home to an assault zone. I’m getting focused. Silencer/scope. Avoiding default so… I’ll take care of the ‘rents before eviction notice i wanted to like this one, but i don't really ever refer to someones parents as 'the rents', maybe an area thing. Pro with the blickey. Put holes in your kidneys & hope that you hold it against me One flick of the wrist will make this bitch lift in the air… like I’m w/ Lassie, throwing a frisbee i liked this No chances left. You’re now dancing with death on a date with the devil. When I raise arms I’m like Otto Octavius... so you’re getting eight with the metal… cool concept, i feel like rewording this woulda made it dopee vs It’s cool you don’t fuck with snitches, and sad you’ll die slow soon. Bitch if I was in your neck of the woods, you would call the 502. nah Wrong place at the wrong time, when you try to beef with a hater. Zuch put you in a bad spot, like the cop that shot breyona taylor. lighttt You’re names not etched in stone, that’s just a little more facts dude. It’s pissed on and drug in the mud, more than a damn civil war statue. i liked this No body cam when stepping on necks, don’t care if these bitches breath. This L will fuck up your holiday, so bad you’ll burn your christmas wreath. wat m i missing Your bitch is flat as fuck it’s hilarious there’s nothing more to her man. I’m still putting the bag in her mouth like it’s the fucking coroner van. wasn't feeling We live in close proximity, but when it comes to skill we never parallel. I’ll leave him brainless u’ll see the led top his apple like fucking caramel. lightt Orange soda pop, I’ll half ass my shit, I’m still going to crush this guy. So he’ll either catch a body from an alias, or a fade from a Russian Spy. nope It’s obvious you got fucked in ur last battle, no reason to believe its hate. CSI investigated ur verse, found semen samples with ur opponents DNA. def noo v/fraze. i was expecting more from fraze bc i think i remember him being pretty good back in the day. eviction had some light hits but wasn't feeling much this round.
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11-21-2020, 05:46 PM | #10 |
Jeice! Who's that?
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Fraze
Got your girl in lingerie. I’m the reason her pussy was never the same She stays on that one-Z tip… she loves dragging that out while saying my name No chances left. You’re now dancing with death on a date with the devil. When I raise arms I’m like Otto Octavius... so you’re getting eight with the metal… I did eviction notices against him already, otherwise I would have quoted yours Eviction You’re names not etched in stone, that’s just a little more facts dude. It’s pissed on and drug in the mud, more than a damn civil war statue. Voting Fraze |
11-22-2020, 04:54 PM | #11 |
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11-22-2020, 05:56 PM | #12 |
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I conceed
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