WEEK 6: Eviction 1-1 VS Ajax 1-1 AJAX WINS

[UPN Zuch]

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Good luck, gentlemen

[Eviction]

check

[Ajax]

Yup. 16.

[Eviction]

16 sent to zuch.

[Ajax]

You’re a nobody… and…

With me, every verse is insane…
While you leave crowds ‘less riveted’ than the Aviator’s personal plane.
I live a storied life; the intro’s where you chapter ends…
Try me, you’ll get snatched ‘out of thin air’ so fast you’ll contract the Bends.
Even on NC, you don’t have enough boys to win…
Everyone hates me and I’ll still beat you ‘ten fold’ like Destroyer’s chin.
Against me, you’ll end like you caught a disease…
People from all ‘walks of life’ look down on you. After I hobble your knees.
You started mediocre. Now, you’re forced into the back…
Bring your team of green scrubs. They’ll get dropped with an orderly attack.
Rivals quake when I talk… All time; I’m adjacent to Pac.
I make money ‘hand over fist.’ You throw all your paper on rock.
Step up. Get pounded to shit…
You’re in no mans land in this battle. While your girl’s surrounded by dick.
This bum’s an immaculate slob…
In the company of greatness… the closest you’ll ever come to having a job.

Peace.

[Eviction]

somebody gonna die tonight.

Originally Posted by Ajax

Still waiting on the retainer. $25k. You have my wire instructions. Then this imposter is dead in the water.

You have limited skill, and try to mimic the real ur kidding yaself if u think that gimmick’ll kill.
U’re such a pussy bitch after u get waxed u can use that retainer on a fucking chemical peel
Where the fuck did you go to school? And who would trust you with a prosecution?
Your defense is fucked on the corner, only clients are sluts that was convicted of prostitution.
You being in the spotlight is corny, we should never see ur name next to the’ banner.
All cases end with u broke, that’s why u’ll always live in ya dad's house like stephanie tanner.
You failing the bar exam is Shakespeare, you might as well hide behind the closed curtains.
Because you're so worthless, why would you name yourself ajax, when you have no purpose.
Keanu Reeves, except he was too pussy to answer the door, he must have heard of me.
He’ll need surgery, you’ll see ajax dumped on the floor like I cleaned up a murder scene.
You shouldn’t have to second guess what’s been instrumental, to your lack of respect.
must be carrying an ax, when I heard ur shit it felt like being stabbed in the back of the neck.
You should stay in your lane this motherfucker has a checkered past tryna play a chess game.
Posting after me is your best aim. It doesn’t mean ur prime if you're delivering shit the next day.
After the punches send u to the hospital u’ll sue me for battery, why did you even agree to fight.
have u seeking medication but no amount of melatonin can help a crooked lawyer sleep at night

[evaD]

Ajax came with heat this week. The bends, ten fold and company of greatness all nice and hand over fist was amazing. Perfectly worded bar.

Eviction you had some concepts but the execution was shown up here in comparison. Bars a bit long and mostly concepts that aren’t new ie. prime. Dump Ajax on the floor probably the highlight

Vote - Ajax

[Wanderer]

[B]Ajax[B]

With me, every verse is insane…
While you leave crowds ‘less riveted’ than the Aviator’s personal plane.
Even on NC, you don’t have enough boys to win…
Everyone hates me and I’ll still beat you ‘ten fold’ like Destroyer’s chin.
Against me, you’ll end like you caught a disease…
People from all ‘walks of life’ look down on you. After I hobble your knees.
Rivals quake when I talk… All time; I’m adjacent to Pac.
I make money ‘hand over fist.’ You throw all your paper on rock.
This bum’s an immaculate slob…
In the company of greatness… the closest you’ll ever come to having a job.

Solid verse and these were all cool to me. More than enough for you to win

Eviction

I’m not gonna quote anything bro but you had some ideas and some of the Multis were strong, just nothing that made me think ‘wow’ y’know. I echo Dave Your execution lacked and the bars were too wordy. This isn’t to say you can’t step your game up for next week. Looking forward to seeing what you can do.

Vote ajax

[UPN Zuch]

Hand over fist was an absolute banger.

[dull boy]

Vote - Ajax

[Saint]

interesting, both have what I'd call older styles of battling. Ajax w/ the witty short/long punchline style & Eviction the longer, box verses... Ajax had The Bends, 10 Fold, Hand over Fist lines that sealed it. Wording & execution much better.

From Evic opener was ok - liked the concept of chemical peel. My first concern is your multies are fine but you take too long to get to the point. I think you'll refine your style as your progress in the league... punches are fairly basic as of now...

V - Ajax

[Dank]

Hand over fist top punch this week

vote - Ajax

[fraze]

Originally Posted by Ajax

With me, every verse is insane…
While you leave crowds ‘less riveted’ than the Aviator’s personal plane.
aight
I live a storied life; the intro’s where you chapter ends…
Try me, you’ll get snatched ‘out of thin air’ so fast you’ll contract the Bends.
ok
Even on NC, you don’t have enough boys to win…
Everyone hates me and I’ll still beat you ‘ten fold’ like Destroyer’s chin.
light
Against me, you’ll end like you caught a disease…
People from all ‘walks of life’ look down on you. After I hobble your knees.
meh
You started mediocre. Now, you’re forced into the back…
Bring your team of green scrubs. They’ll get dropped with an orderly attack.
ok
Rivals quake when I talk… All time; I’m adjacent to Pac.
I make money ‘hand over fist.’ You throw all your paper on rock.
this is nice, but would have it even harder with better setup
Step up. Get pounded to shit…
You’re in no mans land in this battle. While your girl’s surrounded by dick.
not feeling this
This bum’s an immaculate slob…
In the company of greatness… the closest you’ll ever come to having a job.
concept is cool but wording doesn't hit to me

Originally Posted by Eviction

You have limited skill, and try to mimic the real ur kidding yaself if u think that gimmick’ll kill.
U’re such a pussy bitch after u get waxed u can use that retainer on a fucking chemical peel
ok concept, doesn't hit hard as worded
Where the fuck did you go to school? And who would trust you with a prosecution?
Your defense is fucked on the corner, only clients are sluts that was convicted of prostitution.
aight
You being in the spotlight is corny, we should never see ur name next to the’ banner.
All cases end with u broke, that’s why u’ll always live in ya dad's house like stephanie tanner.
not feeling this
You failing the bar exam is Shakespeare, you might as well hide behind the closed curtains.
Because you're so worthless, why would you name yourself ajax, when you have no purpose.
don't get this
Keanu Reeves, except he was too pussy to answer the door, he must have heard of me.
He’ll need surgery, you’ll see ajax dumped on the floor like I cleaned up a murder scene.
ok concept, badly worded
You shouldn’t have to second guess what’s been instrumental, to your lack of respect.
must be carrying an ax, when I heard ur shit it felt like being stabbed in the back of the neck.
not for me
You should stay in your lane this motherfucker has a checkered past tryna play a chess game.
Posting after me is your best aim. It doesn’t mean ur prime if you're delivering shit the next day.
nice concept w. prime but doesn't hit
After the punches send u to the hospital u’ll sue me for battery, why did you even agree to fight.
have u seeking medication but no amount of melatonin can help a crooked lawyer sleep at night
this rhymes but i don't see a punch

Ajax had the more consistent verse. Like the opener and hand over fist. There were also a couple others that were quotable or close to it.
I don't have a lot of quotables from Eviction but I did like a lot of the concepts you came up with. If you had sharper wording and working on your punchlines this would have been a much closer battle.

Vote: Ajax

[Scout]

Ajax

With me, every verse is insane…
While you leave crowds ‘less riveted’ than the Aviator’s personal plane.
I live a storied life; the intro’s where you chapter ends…
Try me, you’ll get snatched ‘out of thin air’ so fast you’ll contract the Bends.
Even on NC, you don’t have enough boys to win…
Everyone hates me and I’ll still beat you ‘ten fold’ like Destroyer’s chin.
Rivals quake when I talk… All time; I’m adjacent to Pac.
I make money ‘hand over fist.’ You throw all your paper on rock.
This bum’s an immaculate slob…
In the company of greatness… the closest you’ll ever come to having a job.

Nice verse
Pretty consistent, familiar style. I like it. Only a few misses
Props


Eviction

You failing the bar exam is Shakespeare, you might as well hide behind the closed curtains.
Because you're so worthless, why would you name yourself ajax, when you have no purpose.
Keanu Reeves, except he was too pussy to answer the door, he must have heard of me.
He’ll need surgery, you’ll see ajax dumped on the floor like I cleaned up a murder scene.

Being generous if we're taking wording real serious
Those ideas were good though. Prime had potential too

Voting Ajax

[Blue Bayou]

With me, every verse is insane…
While you leave crowds ‘less riveted’ than the Aviator’s personal plane.
like this concept.. i think this is dope
I live a storied life; the intro’s where you chapter ends…
Try me, you’ll get snatched ‘out of thin air’ so fast you’ll contract the Bends.
yupp... cool idea, worded well
Even on NC, you don’t have enough boys to win…
Everyone hates me and I’ll still beat you ‘ten fold’ like Destroyer’s chin.
funny
People from all ‘walks of life’ look down on you. After I hobble your knees.
ehh
You started mediocre. Now, you’re forced into the back…
Bring your team of green scrubs. They’ll get dropped with an orderly attack.
scrubs/oderly been done but the wording made this cool
Rivals quake when I talk… All time; I’m adjacent to Pac.
I make money ‘hand over fist.’ You throw all your paper on rock.
wordings fire but this is an overdone idea... like the flip tho
Step up. Get pounded to shit…
You’re in no mans land in this battle. While your girl’s surrounded by dick.
ok.. no mans / surrounded by dick seems contradictory as worded
This bum’s an immaculate slob…
In the company of greatness… the closest you’ll ever come to having a job.
nice company concept

vs.


You being in the spotlight is corny, we should never see ur name next to the’ banner.
All cases end with u broke, that’s why u’ll always live in ya dad's house like stephanie tanner.

Keanu Reeves, except he was too pussy to answer the door, he must have heard of me.
He’ll need surgery, you’ll see ajax dumped on the floor like I cleaned up a murder scene.

ajax/cleaner line was cool but prob played


Fun battle...like Ajaxs style a lot.... he won with better ideas and wording .... props to both

[Fracture]

Eviction doesnt seeem like a slouch. Some good concepts mostly worded weird


Ajax brought the fire. That company bar was crack

[Smod of War]

Elvistion got this pretty easily with creativity


Vote excistion

[Destroyer]

Ajax got this
I wouldn’t say there was anything especially clever or witty or well-written in his verse but eviction has a lot of work to do to be a contender in this league. Wayyy too much focus on multis and rhyming than throwing punches. Focus more on the hit first. THEN go back and make it rhyme better.

V/Ajax