Punishment...

[Exis]

Ima force with horror, remorse ain't coursin' thru my veins
Wherever war remains playin' they be sourcin' out my fame
In portions they are slain & more are left in pain
Your corpse's left with gore can you be affordin' here to say,
My name? 'Cause if gasped it happens to see it backwards
To the reaction of capsules packed with V-X gasses
So take three steps, Jack-knife
Be the one who sees death last
I'm Evil's best match, I've achieved Quests passed
By those that couldn't hack it, foes are my facet
I've chosen the fashion casket & what clothes you will pass in
You're just a has been, looped like loose change
I chew brains you stupid fool
Why go tooth & nail when I can use fangs?
That hang from my twisted mug, so smug & sadistic
& for my next war I wish only Christians be enlisted
I'm sicker than twisted limbs stickin' to blisterin' skin
Invision this sick condition mixed in with six of the sins
Ima cyst within wrists, chemically engineered
To be mentally geared, elemental & medically feared
I'm readily cheered, I'll make your bloody jaw snap
Bring that fuckin' raw rap back to textin' you hear?

[Pharaohs Army]

So, IMO, this verse here belongs on the cypher, and your last cypher verse belongs in the OM piece section for feedback.

There are a few reasons, mainly that the America verse has a theme and makes people think. Whereas this one here is just a flex of which you could write 100.

So I'll read this one again and give you a few thoughts

Originally Posted by Exis

The ghosts of world wars scream, America
This cold world seems to hold it's dreams in America
How many people have to die for your regime, America?

Yo debate the issues of grenade misuse, & crates of great missiles
Tax dollars spent on killin' brown people with different cultures
America has shamed us all, the United States of vultures
History repeats whether you are racist or fascist
Only defeat will bring reality back to the masses
& If you were there you'd know you're in debt to be feared
Let's take a trip back, about 65 to 70 years
We're goin' back to Europe & Asia, back when America was just a country
Before all the nukes started droppin' & our economy was still hungry
& The colonies were still oppressed by the British
Egyptian & Indian slave markets, even the French'll admit it
Germany started to make bombs & bear arms
With Europe in Adolf's bare palms
& the war would of been won for them if Japan hadn't attacked
Their greed was the cause of the wrath laid down on they asses
& that's exactly what'll happen to this country I rap in
If we don't pull out shit together, an ass kickin' is what we'll be askin'
But I'm not about to bash us any longer I'm done, & I hope that
When you see politicians speakin' of war you just remember the ghosts rap

The ghosts of world wars scream, America
This cold world seems to hold it's dreams in America
How many people have to die for your regime, America?...

Pretty good. I like it. Makes one think. Touches on history and foreshadows what could be our future.
Got a hook and everything.
Looking forward to your next "themed" verse.

[emurgencee]

I liked this. Good vocabulary, flow, it rhymed very well.

“ chew brains you stupid fool
Why go tooth & nail when I can use fangs?”

[Exis]

@Pharoahs Army...You're right to some degree, verses were placed in the wrong threads, but havin' said that I liked both.

[Inno]

This was good work. Join the GWL