WANNA BE A BALLA SHOT CALLA 20 INCH BLADES ON THE IMPALA

YDK · 08-26-2013, 04:04 AM

I grew up addicted to my afflictions sniffin coke off a bitch
prescription pills on the regular so I flipped the whole script.
Nyquil gives a slight thrill if ya mix it wit liquid oxy's
Thick an saucy goin down then bring it back with black coffee.
You ain't bout the life,
I hustle wit nothin but a blunt an a knife
Fuck tryna stunt I'm just bringin wat I want into sight.
Like McDonald's delivery I'm delivering smiles
Only selling enough shit till my daughter's set for awhile.
Yes the heckles are vile but I deal dope to cope
Sanity hangin by a thread...hope on a rope.
Like a scope on the Pope my sites are questionable
But livin in this bitch as a vegetable is the only thing regrettable.
Its inevitable that I'll have to make a choice soon, damn
Will I howl at the moon or use my voice as a man?
I ain't lettin my baby mother suffer
Im tougher than other suckers
Im more gifted when I'm lifted makin hatin faces pucker!
Strugglin while I'm hustlin just makin a name for myself
This aint candyland but I'm leavin the game on the shelf.
Ain't no shame in my wealth an I ain't blamin my health
But since I started ta write this piece I see the pain that I've dealt.
There ain't a risk I could take that would make losin my family worth it,
Im just a father that grew up slangin that's slowly realizing I ain't perfect.

YDK · 08-26-2013, 08:23 PM

http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=13245
http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=12913

Natural · 08-26-2013, 08:26 PM

contents ok. Nothing to deem brilliant. You have made huge improvements in the flow department since I last read anything from you. Its by far the most scheme complex I have read from you. Keep up the elevation and later the wit and content will catch up.

Geno · 08-26-2013, 09:13 PM

had some swag to the flow, if your into a word like swag that is?

content could use a lil more thought, read smooth enough tho0. your getting there ydk

08-26-2013, 04:04 AM	#1
YDK ghost in the matrix Join Date: Apr 2013 Location: Covington, KY Posts: 4,563 Battle Record: 14-25 Champed - Art of Writing League (x2) - Lime Green Poetry Association Rep Power: 8181113	WANNA BE A BALLA SHOT CALLA 20 INCH BLADES ON THE IMPALA I grew up addicted to my afflictions sniffin coke off a bitch prescription pills on the regular so I flipped the whole script. Nyquil gives a slight thrill if ya mix it wit liquid oxy's Thick an saucy goin down then bring it back with black coffee. You ain't bout the life, I hustle wit nothin but a blunt an a knife Fuck tryna stunt I'm just bringin wat I want into sight. Like McDonald's delivery I'm delivering smiles Only selling enough shit till my daughter's set for awhile. Yes the heckles are vile but I deal dope to cope Sanity hangin by a thread...hope on a rope. Like a scope on the Pope my sites are questionable But livin in this bitch as a vegetable is the only thing regrettable. Its inevitable that I'll have to make a choice soon, damn Will I howl at the moon or use my voice as a man? I ain't lettin my baby mother suffer Im tougher than other suckers Im more gifted when I'm lifted makin hatin faces pucker! Strugglin while I'm hustlin just makin a name for myself This aint candyland but I'm leavin the game on the shelf. Ain't no shame in my wealth an I ain't blamin my health But since I started ta write this piece I see the pain that I've dealt. There ain't a risk I could take that would make losin my family worth it, Im just a father that grew up slangin that's slowly realizing I ain't perfect. __________________

08-26-2013, 08:23 PM	#2
YDK ghost in the matrix Join Date: Apr 2013 Location: Covington, KY Posts: 4,563 Battle Record: 14-25 Champed - Art of Writing League (x2) - Lime Green Poetry Association Rep Power: 8181113	http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=13245 http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=12913 __________________

08-26-2013, 09:13 PM	#4
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	had some swag to the flow, if your into a word like swag that is? content could use a lil more thought, read smooth enough tho0. your getting there ydk __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

08-26-2013, 08:26 PM	#3
Natural Senior Member Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 659 Rep Power: 0	contents ok. Nothing to deem brilliant. You have made huge improvements in the flow department since I last read anything from you. Its by far the most scheme complex I have read from you. Keep up the elevation and later the wit and content will catch up.