If the plots thick call Robotnik

Mr. J · 02-07-2018, 01:47 AM

Catch all manner of rhythm & cynicism mixed with wisdom
A bishop sits in check, out among the common systems vision.
I miss the mission that would change how the game is viewed
go to war, & where they station you, you would wait your move.
pace it too...no sense running in without avoiding ways to lose.
the person you are adjacent to plays to a different standard.
the choice is in the distant pattern, what can eclipse the slander...?
submissive chatter lies in the distance, where witnesses gather.
folks pawned off as decoys & were promised sweet picnics after.
hell if they made it to the other side they could be Kings & such.
they toast, drink each cup filled with victory gin, a distinguished club.
laughed as if they didnt drink enough, they never saw things erupt.
how one could get slain daily & still stand to fight is freaking nuts...
Rooks, how they move straight forward after I will never understand.
came packaged with other plans, abilities to collapse one perchance..
but none advance further by choice nor on ones demand...
odd folk that came up in the world when it was too late to become a man.
where is the wonder at? the misconception is fueled by the Queen
whenever her advisers seen you would know its time to leave.
whichever eye she meets shes liable to easily defy your dreams...
one would say she goes overboard & causes life to seize...
why carry on? who would call this a fight?
should just hand them an L....& call it a knight..

Nick James · 02-07-2018, 03:56 AM

good shit.. the last 4 words brought it all together.

amazing what 4 words can do for a piece lol

ACTIVATE SELF · 02-08-2018, 07:07 AM

This was a good play on words and concept. I'm a casual Chess player. I enjoed it.

King Ra. · 02-09-2018, 05:45 PM

J, you're always one of the slickest writers in terms of wordplay and the flow is always on point. Cool concept, too. I especially liked the last 8 lines, the final two was a nice finishing touch. Good stuff.

Alice · 02-12-2018, 01:38 PM

Nice to be reading some of your work again. This was highly entertaining, I enjoyed the various play on words and the 'build up' to the final couplet, which was also the highlight for me. Great read.

Mr. J · 03-05-2018, 03:27 PM

Hey....thanks!

02-07-2018, 01:47 AM	#1
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	If the plots thick call Robotnik Catch all manner of rhythm & cynicism mixed with wisdom A bishop sits in check, out among the common systems vision. I miss the mission that would change how the game is viewed go to war, & where they station you, you would wait your move. pace it too...no sense running in without avoiding ways to lose. the person you are adjacent to plays to a different standard. the choice is in the distant pattern, what can eclipse the slander...? submissive chatter lies in the distance, where witnesses gather. folks pawned off as decoys & were promised sweet picnics after. hell if they made it to the other side they could be Kings & such. they toast, drink each cup filled with victory gin, a distinguished club. laughed as if they didnt drink enough, they never saw things erupt. how one could get slain daily & still stand to fight is freaking nuts... Rooks, how they move straight forward after I will never understand. came packaged with other plans, abilities to collapse one perchance.. but none advance further by choice nor on ones demand... odd folk that came up in the world when it was too late to become a man. where is the wonder at? the misconception is fueled by the Queen whenever her advisers seen you would know its time to leave. whichever eye she meets shes liable to easily defy your dreams... one would say she goes overboard & causes life to seize... why carry on? who would call this a fight? should just hand them an L....& call it a knight.. __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

02-09-2018, 05:45 PM	#4
King Ra. The Throne, The Crown Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 2,667 Battle Record: 21-35 Rep Power: 1932963	J, you're always one of the slickest writers in terms of wordplay and the flow is always on point. Cool concept, too. I especially liked the last 8 lines, the final two was a nice finishing touch. Good stuff. __________________ Vetwork, bitches.

03-05-2018, 03:27 PM	#6
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,046 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349682	Hey....thanks! __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

02-07-2018, 03:56 AM	#2
Nick James death to amen Join Date: Jan 2018 Posts: 1,279 Battle Record: 1-2 Rep Power: 7423718	good shit.. the last 4 words brought it all together. amazing what 4 words can do for a piece lol

02-08-2018, 07:07 AM	#3
ACTIVATE SELF Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2017 Posts: 783 Battle Record: 2-1 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 19584278	This was a good play on words and concept. I'm a casual Chess player. I enjoed it.

02-12-2018, 01:38 PM	#5
Alice Member Join Date: Feb 2018 Posts: 53 Rep Power: 53114	Nice to be reading some of your work again. This was highly entertaining, I enjoyed the various play on words and the 'build up' to the final couplet, which was also the highlight for me. Great read.