Aye.. look

Final Boss · 12-20-2016, 06:29 AM

Came from the bottom, still hang where I started at
chasing the same dreams that Meek Mill already had

It's so close that I can taste the shit
Gotta focus, practice patients it's....
Hard to do when you know that you could snap on any occasion.
If I live it then I write it, Never had to fake a bit
One punch'll lean your shit back like the matrix did.
I'm Dennis the menace, you Mr Wilson how you hate the kid
Choke on the haters tighter than a Kurt Angle ankle grip
quick to spit a sweet 16, bring out the cake and gifts
S'nothin for me to slide down on you, you think I'm Saint nick
Can't teach an old dog new tricks, still wit the same bitch
Boi you all bark no bite, don't make alotta sense

I'm cannabis off a gram of stiff, giving u the most fancy of lines..
...like a cocaine binge ona China dish

Wassup guys lmk what u think what can I improve. It's hard to translate flow into words help

sral · 12-20-2016, 09:38 AM

Binging on cocaine in a china dish surely isn't best practice?

A flat surface would obviously be better. I mean, there's a reason people break our mirrors or the backs of their phone to do it on, its been the same way for years and it isn't broken so why fix it?

Using the china dish would also require you to wash it at some point, so that mom didn't notice. Just saying bro.

They aren't exactly that easy to transport around in your pocket, as say, a small mirror or even the back of your iphone, you dig?

I'm sure it's fine and dandy if you're just doing some blow at home (who wouldn't, right?) but in reality in a night on the town, I aint tryna pull out the Tupperware while my buddy waving a baggy under my nose. There's also the possibility of someone knocking one of the corners of the dish and the entire thing shaking or being knocked over, and losing all the nose candy in a mess on the floor. Which is never good. I don't think you really thought that line through.

Aside from that, this was straight flame emojis.

Stay up player.

Final Boss · 12-21-2016, 01:38 AM

I was just thinking more of how fancy China dishes are. I wasn't thinking thru as thorough as u had, but I like your thinking. Thank you kind one

I have this thing abt using mirrors to snort I be like damn I gotta look myself in the eyes while I do this, I reek of disappoints atm

12-20-2016, 06:29 AM	#1
Final Boss Till The World Blow Join Date: Dec 2016 Posts: 46 Rep Power: 2709671	Aye.. look Came from the bottom, still hang where I started at chasing the same dreams that Meek Mill already had It's so close that I can taste the shit Gotta focus, practice patients it's.... Hard to do when you know that you could snap on any occasion. If I live it then I write it, Never had to fake a bit One punch'll lean your shit back like the matrix did. I'm Dennis the menace, you Mr Wilson how you hate the kid Choke on the haters tighter than a Kurt Angle ankle grip quick to spit a sweet 16, bring out the cake and gifts S'nothin for me to slide down on you, you think I'm Saint nick Can't teach an old dog new tricks, still wit the same bitch Boi you all bark no bite, don't make alotta sense I'm cannabis off a gram of stiff, giving u the most fancy of lines.. ...like a cocaine binge ona China dish Wassup guys lmk what u think what can I improve. It's hard to translate flow into words help

12-20-2016, 09:38 AM	#2
sral LARSLARSLARSLARSLARS Join Date: Aug 2014 Location: CRUMPETVILLE Posts: 8,608 Battle Record: 28-3 Champed - Gimmick Battle League - The Winter Topical - Topical Martyrs - Lime Green Poetry Association - Lyric Olympics - Art of Writing League - Guerrilla Writing League (2x) - Black August II Rep Power: 85899396	Binging on cocaine in a china dish surely isn't best practice? A flat surface would obviously be better. I mean, there's a reason people break our mirrors or the backs of their phone to do it on, its been the same way for years and it isn't broken so why fix it? Using the china dish would also require you to wash it at some point, so that mom didn't notice. Just saying bro. They aren't exactly that easy to transport around in your pocket, as say, a small mirror or even the back of your iphone, you dig? I'm sure it's fine and dandy if you're just doing some blow at home (who wouldn't, right?) but in reality in a night on the town, I aint tryna pull out the Tupperware while my buddy waving a baggy under my nose. There's also the possibility of someone knocking one of the corners of the dish and the entire thing shaking or being knocked over, and losing all the nose candy in a mess on the floor. Which is never good. I don't think you really thought that line through. Aside from that, this was straight flame emojis. Stay up player. __________________ - Netcees Rebuttal Tourney - Art of Writing League (x 4) - AOWL Season 11 Champion (Undefeated Season)

12-21-2016, 01:38 AM	#3
Final Boss Till The World Blow Join Date: Dec 2016 Posts: 46 Rep Power: 2709671	I was just thinking more of how fancy China dishes are. I wasn't thinking thru as thorough as u had, but I like your thinking. Thank you kind one I have this thing abt using mirrors to snort I be like damn I gotta look myself in the eyes while I do this, I reek of disappoints atm