dead man, Trachea

[dead man]

say

les miserables. post reply, premeditative response
native collage the cave walls just to erase a mandala
cross terrain in a sabb. gin and juice in a honda
breed confusion and consequence. create quadruple entendres
mutant, the doppelganger, doppler radar remodel
for every storm in a teacup, there's a sail in a bottle
creative colossal. male prostitute, Mary's favorite apostle
sherry on rocks when she handed me her cherry to swallow
back at the hostel we're in a hurry to smoke
perfect moments, palming slowly spinal curvature slope
thought processes we'd never want a person to know
reemergence, she wrote. T-shirted secret service her post
i prefer to be alone without my bourbon and coke
blow my nose. bloody tissue paper, garbage disposal
murder me mostly. let me feel it fade and watch you approach
vein thrombosis strangle oxygen right out of your throat
my favorite novel is Choke. not really, that was kind of a joke
would you throttle every botanist if Ka was a rose?
swiss chocolat, mascarpone. mimosas, marmalade, moans
red dress like Mrs. Rabbit. Roger that. it's a go
let me grow. vines that circulate like vinyl composed
or quasi poetry relying on reliable hosts
water to soak. hotel soaps, a universal remote
the world at your fingertips. like you didn't know
puking with 2 fingertips my trachea pulse
another night, another irresponsible dose
naked in clothes. safely drift away in sweaters and shorts
maybe in the morning i'll be better resourced
tighten ropes and torture me and settle the score
moi cheri disorder. marry us. these letters are yours
cliffside stare at the gorge. a gorgeous wreckage at best
gorging allegorically. intestinal stretch
i hear tapping on my window every evening at 6
and i'm frantic cause nobody else believes it exists
it all leads me to this. i've leased more neology to twist
flamethrowing solar icecaps in a polar eclipse
Okra and shrimp, holy shit. shoulder cold as the Cris
beyond the velvet rope another cultural rift
glasses to tip, our plastic PINs. nostalgia to miss
so have another drink like pancake after a lift
magic elixir. its all relative, re: Lannister sisters
crack rock administrar minister crack crucifix
black the remiss. halfway tree between bereavement and bliss
wondering if anybody's listening.




deadman

[Zen]

thought processes we'd never want a person to know
reemergence, she wrote. T-shirted secret service her post
i prefer to be alone without my bourbon and coke
^smooooth

vein thrombosis strangle oxygen right out of your throat
my favorite novel is Choke. not really, that was kind of a joke
&
the world at your fingertips. like you didn't know

I don’t really have the time right now to go as in depth as I’d like to, but those lines I singled out I enjoyed the most. If I get some time, I’ll come back later and give you some more kind words. Smooth as always, man. Cool stuff.

[Bodey]

for every storm in a teacup, there's a sail in a bottle
creative colossal. male prostitute, Mary's favorite apostle
^^loved that

thought processes we'd never want a person to know
i prefer to be alone without my bourbon and coke
^^can definitely relate to that!

swiss chocolat, mascarpone. mimosas, marmalade, moans
red dress like Mrs. Rabbit. Roger that. it's a go
^^that's sexy

puking with 2 fingertips my trachea pulse
another night, another irresponsible dose
^^i'm 26-years old and sometimes i find myself in this exact position, wondering how i overdid it again at this fuckin age

i hear tapping on my window every evening at 6
and i'm frantic cause nobody else believes it exists
it all leads me to this. i've leased more neology to twist
flamethrowing solar icecaps in a polar eclipse
^^thought that was very on point, beautifully written

i dont think i've ever been disappointed reading one of your pieces. you have this effortless flow of things, and even the end was like holy shit with words, ya knkow what i mean. it's really cool you can do that

[dead man]

Ur a peach bodey

Thank you.

[Pent uP]

Dead how come u kept nsing the RHYME?

[dead man]

word man i know. RHYME track record is bogus

i havent really been feeling competitive when it counts

one day, mighty 10......one day

[Pent uP]

I just wanted you to participate in a heavy league. Oh well..ill get to this verse when im in the mood to read

[dead man]

this man sneak dissing AOWL or nah?
@Certain @Dancake

[Pent uP]

Nah. Just the roster was heavy with some writers that dont participate here (for whatever reason). It was interesting for me

Edit sidenote: why is there xo much hostility between the 2 leagues lmfao

[dead man]

thats true. its a fantastic league as far as content and competition.

i keep signing in for that reason but sort of lose interest in the next 4 days or so. gonna give it another run before the season's up hopefully. you know what i mean @oats?

[oats]

Originally Posted by dead man

thats true. its a fantastic league as far as content and competition.

i keep signing in for that reason but sort of lose interest in the next 4 days or so. gonna give it another run before the season's up hopefully. you know what i mean @oats?

I do. I'm tempted to join, but at this point, I know when I'm not really going to stick around a league.

this was dope, btw. will leave better feed later.

[sral]

Originally Posted by dead man

thats true. its a fantastic league as far as content and competition.

i keep signing in for that reason but sort of lose interest in the next 4 days or so. gonna give it another run before the season's up hopefully. you know what i mean @oats?

word

a lot of dope writers involved, i just dont really have the heart for competitive text leagues any more yo

theres only probably richard corey i'd be interested in facing as we've surprisingly never been matched up before

him and possibly TaLi?

the rest i'm too uninspired to spend 6 weeks consecutively writing shit for

one of you needs to offer me some collab ish to write to and keep my hand in

[Geno]

for every storm in a teacup, there's a sail in a bottle

the lead up to this was sick as hell, but that just smacked as dope as fuck bro

wow man, your knowledge of vocabulary and the way you sin words together is parallel to none dog. classic black.

[dead man]

:)

[PancakeBrah]

The window @ 6 couplet was my favorite of this. But this was really.dope throughout. The best of your three pieces on the front page. Thanks for the shout out.

I was piss drunk and felt like talking shit to people online
I hope you understand that. I won $450 in blackjack though.

Nice piece.

[Pharaohs Army]

this is very dope rhyming and flow.
it doesn't seem to tie together or have one particular message... but that's not necessarily a negative as you may just be "gorging allegorically". heheh

[dead man]

while we're upping old threads



its too early to be feeling this way

[oats]

damn it, Black. unearthing another verse that I promised to feed and didn't. I got you shortly.

[sral]

this shit fire though as usual

too much to quote

that ship in a bottle cray though >>>>>>>>>>>>


keep that pen moving!