IN HONOR OF BIG BABY'S O.M. RETURN: Emcee Squared ROUGH CUT/UNEDITED UNFINISHED December2015 Project.. (it will never be finished. enjoy it, every1))

emcee squared · 05-26-2016, 08:27 PM

good job BB!
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thx for comments Witty/Buddha.
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Witty · 05-27-2016, 07:05 PM

In your second line, it's a better rhyme if you drop the last 'n'

My name is Witty and I have an obsessive need to word things to perfection, because if I don't, I hate myself forever.

I didn't read the rest, but I will...and I will tell you what I think.

emcee squared · 05-27-2016, 08:08 PM

If you like things word to perfection, then you might not wanna read the rest.
It was loosely started in December. probly not touched since january.. but too many good rhymetricks, and too much netcee slapstick to be a throwaway..
Nice to meet you witty, and thank you for your participation.

emcee squared · 05-27-2016, 08:11 PM

and you're absolutely right about that 2nd line.. Just tried it. Of course,, There are at least few other spots where I am now thinking of wording, & a __ blank# I should have filled in, before posting. but i'm so past the piece. the top 10 countdown needed to be seen.

timeless · 05-27-2016, 10:54 PM

Please, stop posting. You'll be doing all of us a favor.

emcee squared · 05-28-2016, 08:53 AM

Did I hear something?
Oh, it's the guy who still hasn't tagged me for a battle.

Very well.. instead of regular battle u can Tag me for Topical battl if you want.. pic or phrase or quote.

It's not my fault that your abstract and polished ways can't handle the rough cuts of intriguing flows and straightforward concepts.

Gl

UnbornBuddha · 05-28-2016, 01:58 PM

keep posting man. Here are my thoughts ~ You hate structure, don't you. I know you understand that by limiting yourself to the confines something more gentle on the eyes or more recognizable on the mind will result. Yet you navigate away from it, due to some unforeseen need to express yourself in erratic ways or strategies. Yet sometimes like Sun Tzu 孫子 teaches us the best strategy is straightforwardness. Sometimes the best strategy is retreat, nonetheless I think being patient with the whole process and your vision will result in something as fruitful and beautiful as what you imagine it to be in your mind. It is rough, there are elements of precise diction, and I've seen you write much more tangible structures, so I know you can limit yourself so you can express that limitlessness you wish to express by having that structure. Remember the best chaos and the most beautiful is the one that exists within order.

05-26-2016, 08:27 PM	#1
emcee squared senior writer Join Date: Aug 2015 Posts: 437 Rep Power: 0	IN HONOR OF BIG BABY'S O.M. RETURN: Emcee Squared ROUGH CUT/UNEDITED UNFINISHED December2015 Project.. (it will never be finished. enjoy it, every1)) good job BB! - thx for comments Witty/Buddha. - Last edited by emcee squared; 06-29-2016 at 11:48 PM. Reason: edited by pharaohs 6/29

05-27-2016, 07:05 PM	#2
Witty Lime Life Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 16,978 Battle Record: 30-41 Accomplishments - Only Slightly Retarded Champed - Lyric Olympics - Summer Classic Rep Power: 85235118	In your second line, it's a better rhyme if you drop the last 'n' My name is Witty and I have an obsessive need to word things to perfection, because if I don't, I hate myself forever. I didn't read the rest, but I will...and I will tell you what I think. __________________ He listens to voices inside of his mind Explicit and poisonous violent crime.

05-28-2016, 01:58 PM	#7
UnbornBuddha Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2014 Posts: 1,008 Battle Record: 23-10 Champed - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 5 Rep Power: 23856379	keep posting man. Here are my thoughts ~ You hate structure, don't you. I know you understand that by limiting yourself to the confines something more gentle on the eyes or more recognizable on the mind will result. Yet you navigate away from it, due to some unforeseen need to express yourself in erratic ways or strategies. Yet sometimes like Sun Tzu 孫子 teaches us the best strategy is straightforwardness. Sometimes the best strategy is retreat, nonetheless I think being patient with the whole process and your vision will result in something as fruitful and beautiful as what you imagine it to be in your mind. It is rough, there are elements of precise diction, and I've seen you write much more tangible structures, so I know you can limit yourself so you can express that limitlessness you wish to express by having that structure. Remember the best chaos and the most beautiful is the one that exists within order. Last edited by UnbornBuddha; 05-28-2016 at 04:14 PM.

05-27-2016, 08:08 PM	#3
emcee squared senior writer Join Date: Aug 2015 Posts: 437 Rep Power: 0	If you like things word to perfection, then you might not wanna read the rest. It was loosely started in December. probly not touched since january.. but too many good rhymetricks, and too much netcee slapstick to be a throwaway.. Nice to meet you witty, and thank you for your participation.

05-27-2016, 08:11 PM	#4
emcee squared senior writer Join Date: Aug 2015 Posts: 437 Rep Power: 0	and you're absolutely right about that 2nd line.. Just tried it. Of course,, There are at least few other spots where I am now thinking of wording, & a __ blank# I should have filled in, before posting. but i'm so past the piece. the top 10 countdown needed to be seen.

05-27-2016, 10:54 PM	#5
timeless past tense Join Date: Nov 2013 Location: NJ Posts: 1,623 Battle Record: 22-39 Rep Power: 4341329	Please, stop posting. You'll be doing all of us a favor.

05-28-2016, 08:53 AM	#6
emcee squared senior writer Join Date: Aug 2015 Posts: 437 Rep Power: 0	Did I hear something? Oh, it's the guy who still hasn't tagged me for a battle. Very well.. instead of regular battle u can Tag me for Topical battl if you want.. pic or phrase or quote. It's not my fault that your abstract and polished ways can't handle the rough cuts of intriguing flows and straightforward concepts. Gl