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Old 02-14-2016, 01:10 AM   #1
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Houston, we have a problem. Im going off the noggin after blowing green thats long as rockets. Hardens old team, ok? See, yall not being wit the thunder, got all my shots missed. Popovich, i got my pen and murder the motive, don't interview without hospice tips, you'll need a coach for the spur of the moment. I had to disperse the poison that squirts from my person, so I started this purge on a post-it. A bad cop on his toxic work shift, couldnt stop my purpose if his glock was bursting. I'll take shot insurgents to bobs for burgers. Autonomous jerk with the oddest wording, awkward mormon, who nicki minaj with virgins while listening to her monster verbiage. Oxymoron, I should have the caps locked on all you wordsmiths but yall not deserving. I rather macgyver plots and write a bomb that could stop the earth's spin until god got nervous.
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Old 03-01-2016, 01:49 PM   #2
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This was cool, key? either way I thought you had some slick references in your piece
been awhile since I have seen you around these parts, I found some lines good...others were a stretch
Bobs Burgers & Harden were kind of awkwardly done but I get your point regardless haha.
I really enjoy some of the rhymes that you tossed out there, verbiage & wordsmiths
nice work there...keep it up yo
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Old 03-04-2016, 12:09 PM   #3
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cool. wish you didnt do the paragraph shit. its just really annoying to read to me anymore and makes me wanna leave. please refrain from doing this -cause your a dope writer but this will cause me to ignore your posts.

other than format -this was pretty sick
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