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02-29-2016, 05:20 PM
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Tributes to J Dilla and Nujabes
"90's Necalli"
J Dilla Tribute. (homage to Eminem's Infinite too, lowkey....well highkey now) https://soundcloud.com/dariusdaterrible/90s-necalli Lyrics Call me Necalli y'all....// Cause it's devour-our// Gimme da beat, and ill eat it up like a Sour Power// I doubt a coward can even repeat what im speakin// get defeated by sleep when competin with my amount of hours// U might as well …try to drown inside the shower// ….. sending shells, down at you like I got a fire flower// …This nonsense… a light you up like the Eiffel tower// …At night you dumb bitch..now light this powder// Run it to ya mic. Make sure yo mic is louder// So when u go it'll …blow yo body to spicy chowder// …You might encounter this flow from a 90s rapper who kinda witty// …could a been me but my Momma timed it shitty// Shout out to Bessma ya'll...but nevermind the city// Just know disingenious niggaz aint NEVER riding with me// adventurous nigga, wit a little bet of grime and gritty// So if some shit happens it happens. U get no kind of pity// U think im clapping at you? Then get out my line of fire// Tongue and cheek, rappin whatever I desire/ "Winner" Nujabes Tribute (Big Daddy Kane homage, low or high key...whatever) Lyrics I'm winner, killin any contender// administerin venomous rhythms when I enter the center of the cypher....I'm preparin to strike ya// like a viper, nigga you shoulda never picked my mic up// so sit it down, give me the crown// i'm spittin nouns so large that my bars probably weigh bout fifty pounds// lyrical gun when I spit all you hear's the trigga sound// fucking clown, you and ya whole crew can get a round// I bang like a shotgun// life's a fighting game and I just put you in 90 frames of blockstun/. you ain't a G that's why you freeze when the cops come// I heard alotta nice emcees... I see you not one I burn like solar star, you can say I'm hot son (sun)// Cause when it come to flows....you know I drop tons// or 2,000 pounds, However you wanna measure it// malevolent, you structure a lame lyric I'll level it// 2nd verse They got rhymes but they ain't quite like mines// I got a bright mind so my lines might blind// cause I shine like a divine light in the night time// Superman when I write, using the mic to fight crime// I got a flow that I found in the Nile River// you get drowned tryna clown on me, I beat you down quicker// my sounds sicker...one round I'm crowned victor// I'm Don Perrion and ya'll just some brown liquor// So slow up before you make me throw up from them lame lyrics// I see you niggas talkin bout it but I can't hear it// The beat is too loud.....// I need a mic, a stage, goddamn i even need a new crowd/ (Song pause) Gungho nigga, with a machine gun flow// keep writin so my ammunication don't even run low// kick you nigga like taekwondo// knock you from the back of the house to front door with like one blow// (Freestyle Shit) 2 more on the page too if you care. Preciate u checkin it and that harsh, real, hip hop critique in advance. Already know. Ya'll stay up |
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02-29-2016, 05:44 PM
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sending shots at you like I got the fire flower..
well...however you may have put it, it was an interesting concept but the wording is off competin with sleep/ amount of hours seems like a weird idea to work with as well I see how you are trying to work these ideas in here but I dont feel like this rhyme scheme works for you back when I took this slightly more serious I always wanted my end rhyme to be different from others take this is an example when that gun spark I power up on some fire flower the high stays in my mind for hours & then I bust off toss shells & stomp the body to prove you cant fuck with ours .... .... ... Or something like that. you dont always have to end your rhyme with the same rhyme if the flow is on point you have some decent ideas & its clear that you are recording for audio so it may not come off the same if you work on your pacing though you can make almost anything work though. I rarely play with audio these days though so I cant really say anything else on it. Ill read more later...just a few thoughts to toss your way
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03-01-2016, 08:07 AM
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preciate that bruh. Stay up
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