Bars from Mars

[JESODIST]

a Friendly Sparring,
Not like other countries across the world Violently Warring,
This is a movie where no one will be Evidently Starring,
These riddles are in no way foul or Venomously Scarring,
Instead they come from a seasoned writer Benevolently Talking,
To the enemy on the horizon globe Arrogantly Charging,
Fooling people with mysterious oaths Malevolently Haunting,
So they are ones angelic men will be Definately Stopping,
This fight is one they Intentionally Starting,
But Due to the forgiveness we will be Affectionately Granting,
These alarming dogs can keep on Irelevantlly Barking,
These roads they are Perilously Walking are Unfortunately Shortening
the life span they should be Meticulously Guarding,
Heavenlly Protected Everything I Rap is Eminently Daunting,
Concentrated Like a master of his art Professionally Carving,
Paladin Blasting these Bastards Apart for Inevitably Charging,
Grappling to many dimension and beyond Eventually Warping,
Your position is one these troopers will be Geographically Maping,
Globally Tracking your Computer Professionally Hacking,
The Seven Chakras they have Arduously Been Channeling,
Living in a world that is Partially Fragmenting,
Robots Practically Inventing products Supernaturally Tempting,
Actually still Marketing no matter where the Actual Setting,
Shine your darkest place with these Stars i am Sending,
heal your malignant sickness and Scars Infecting,
I am unreal something that has been Naturally Happening,
Monstrously Unraveling, Honestly Its Baffling,
The way we have been Fashionably Managing,
Titancally Ravishing those Arguablly Averaging,
Following in order to keep the outcome Miraculously Balancing...
But enough of the Weak Chatter,
My Speech Fatter, None of you Freaks Matter,
Martyred prepare to be Slaughtered by your Greek Father,
I am a Bipolar Schoalar Surpassing Loners,
Tossing Massive Boulders Cracking your Flacid Shoulders,
till you Flat like Lychee or Flounders,
Stimulate your system like Sipping Folgers,
I wake up in the mornings drink Tea with Hanna,
Devoted enough to Enter a League like Juwana,
bringing Heat like Gamma Peeling the Skin like Banana,
War hero? You barely vicious my Pana,
you better off Seeking Nirvana,
Claim you're a beast then we can Meet in Savanna,
I’m higher than smoking Fields of Marihuana,
A raging Dragon You're a Weak Iguana,
with Fading Jargon getting Beat like Piñata,
Then churned into strips of Feed for Piranhas,
Claim i'm boring? We know all know you Really Wanna,
Keep reading these stories hotter than a Sea of Magma,
You're punchlines are Softer than fresh Fleece from Alpaca,
Gangsters are coward hiding their face behind a Cheap Bandana,
Winning rounds because of their Visually Unseen Propaganda,
But The Sibling of Dracula Sipping on Plasma,
Reversing the Sacred Teachings of Tantra,
And Keeping minds possessed Repeating this Mantra,
My pet is Yetti from the Himalayan Mountains,
To me the Mediterranean is just a Subteranean Fountain,
Where you Camaflauge like the cuddle fish or a Sly Chameleon,
I am Paranormally casting spells without Rings like D Prime Merlinean,
Professing Astronomic Knowledge to Beings like Sublime Reptylian,
Out of this world and earthly barriers like Asteroids and Comets,
The Fearless galactic warrior is here to Rumble with Hobbits,
The competition is faker than models featured in Novels and Comics,
Take their Precious bars and submerge them in Puddles of Vomit,
They are Famous in Wars but it doesn’t take much to Topple their Logic,
Intrinsic Speech Apocalyptic, Lyrical Deeply Artistic,
Addictive Shielded Misfits Think its Cryptic,
Critics Depicted, everything you Scripted is Mythic,
Your Schemes Really Simplistic when compared to these Scientific Lynguistics,
Unanimous reputation Thoroughly Hated, I Anchor in Success,
Movements Coldly Calculated, Making the Barriers Less,
Demolish the stage with all Actors then Confess to a Pastor Next,
these words are sharp razors thats can Slash a Neck,
I am the hero Saving the princess trapped in the Dragon's Nest
A savage Beastly feasting the Heart and Chest,
telepathically able to Crack a Chess
This Altitude is Unreachable, Magnitude Unbreachable,
Punishing a soul for having an Attitude thats Unappeasable,
Wrongly ruling in the physical realm but the Truth is Unbeatable
Our Moves Unperseivable, Conquering us in battle? Too Unachievable,
Target your Troop that is Feasible Fruit that is Eatable,
Rampant savages causing damages this Crude Lyrical Tomb is Applicable,
Their minds will be destroyed for being Irrational and Susceptible,
We're Professional Intellectuals chopping them up like Vegetables in a Receptacle,
This Intentional Slaughter was Preventable unfortunately Their
Actions are Regrettable,
A Force manifesting in a Non tangible form here shatter your
Sensible Skeletal,
These lines eat through your iron like Heartless Sentinels
Your style is Lethargic Unacceptable,
I'm Brolly Incredible Bombarding with Chemicals,
not believing in promises; Probably Skeptical,
In this test critics say you're Hardly Legible Oddly Edible
Unfit for a Godly Spectacle,
I Digest your Weak Spirit when I'm So Raw,
You're on fire and about to feel the hand of the Cold Law,
Knock you out in less than 3 Minutes like spiderman did to Bone Saw,

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[JESODIST]

ANYONE HERE? lol

[Mr. J]

a Friendly Sparring,
Not like other countries across the world Violently Warring,
This is a movie where no one will be Evidently Starring,
These riddles are in no way foul or Venomously Scarring,
Instead they come from a seasoned writer Benevolently Talking,
To the enemy on the horizon globe Arrogantly Charging,
Fooling people with mysterious oaths Malevolently Haunting,
So they are ones angelic men will be Definately Stopping,
This fight is one they Intentionally Starting,
^^^^^
this was as far as I got because the flow started to get silly
the word choices up to this point were used nicely to your advantage
I also stopped because after quoting this section that this is a huge ass piece
at what point will I get back to this? I do not know...but know this
I enjoyed this intro based on your ideas and your concepts brought together
nice work & one of these days I will get back to the rest...until then heres a smiley face :(

oops I frowned

[sral]

you're dope with it in the zygote vein of text

very similar style in execution

you can tell on odd occasions this isnt your first language lol but the majority of the read is great and very clean, very precise

you'll do well here

stick around

keep that pen moving!

[JESODIST]

@ sraL Thank you sir you are too kind...I just wish the other vets on here would take it more serious... I guess like you said this isn't my first language thats why they ignore the rhymes or are too pridefull to be involved with a writer like me and yes @zygote is one of my mentors including @Godcomplex... That guy @Nigma Too their work is very inspiring...

[2tripple0]

Way I felt was l oke I found you used a bit more knowledge to back your shirt up things were flimsy they just a bunch 8th one liners with a long list of rhymes which was cool I guess until u mentioned the Hanning part I might gonna disregard the line as well as it didn Mt help as much as th he one was dipping with spirit archeology call process something they thought was boring or funny and this just didn't fit the bill lol another character in my home security film set of a bad m memory lik we some time hinge that should have happ peened but didn't like a chance to read his own writing

[Exis]

I like it...would have loved sumthin' better in terms of rhyme scheme but hey, do you.Content is really Zygote like, as before mentioned that's definitely a compliment & in no way a bad thing...you would do well in leagues & shit here.

Enjoyable read man...stay upwards.