IAmRhetoric 0-2 vs Alpo the Alpha 0-3 - RHETORIC WINS

[Sharp]

Netcees Battle League Season VIII

Rules

Due Dates:

• Verses are due Thursday, June 18th 2015 11:59 PM PST. and will be open until the following Sunday
• Battles that lack votes may close later.
• One sided battles may get closed early.
• Extensions are 24 hours

Line Limit:

• Minimum of 10, maximum of 16
• If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first

For additional Rules refer to rule thread


First to 5, win by at least two votes
Good luck!

@IAmRhetoric @Alpo the Alpha

[IAmRhetoric]

We really waiting, is this dude alpha yet?
A be seein D's without a firm grasp of the alphabet..
I don't think I'm alone here, what you drop is lackluster
Drop wack n we'll see he pasta way because I fed him w/ shells like an italian grandmother..
Hold up yur hands buster, i got fists of timber that'll leave you injured
Break ya knees to splinters, have ya ribs seeping inward, this one right'll keep you hindered
I'm the winner you fuck, and you're a beginner you chump,
The only metal you have is the one you got at the Dinner for Schmucks
I'll always keep the heater tucked, you need to bend for yours
My crew like the Navy Seals saying "Objective Alpha has been secured"
Every word from the crowd is "damn" like I was payin for an adlibber
Act your age or I'll have kids so young they don't have hair pulling hairtriggers
Damn nigga! My sick bars will educate you in the chemicals
You getting worse and worse every day like the racism in America

[Chyeahhh!!!]

shouts to Sharp, I sure needed this handicap match
you wanna be down? I'll leave you there permanently, and I aint tryna bring that Brandy track back
I heard you're like..... trying text again on some 2nd childhood shit
yah style doesn't turn heads, even Linda Blair would yawn at u while you spit
yah audio is wack, you'll never make it to the album shops
and you're only known for lying on tracks, like Malcom's pops
fuck your pro tool sessions
war is what I have in store and I'll give you the beats in your local produce section
the hawk will leave you bleeding out, the hands? a similar fate
you were a loser yesterday, you'll be a loser tomorrow, what makes you think you'll be a winner today?
I'll champ your moms anus, and have yah aunt tape it
you like irony?
my SUV's outside with a copy of L&O SVU season 1 in the rape kit
your words rhyme but they lack substance, substantially
I'm a rapper that'll put you in a duffle bag for a ransom fee, then charge a Ransom Fee

[Hush]

Originally Posted by IAmRhetoric

We really waiting, is this dude alpha yet?
A be seein D's without a firm grasp of the alphabet..
ok cool abcd concept but seeing D what? seeing these... man this makes no sense
I don't think I'm alone here, what you drop is lackluster
Drop wack n we'll see he pasta way because I fed him w/ shells like an italian grandmother..
forced but ok not bad
Hold up yur hands buster, i got fists of timber that'll leave you injured
Break ya knees to splinters, have ya ribs seeping inward, this one right'll keep you hindered
i dont mind these type of bars, they hit or miss tho. can be filler or some dope off the wall shit, this felt like filler to me
I'm the winner you fuck, and you're a beginner you chump,
The only metal you have is the one you got at the Dinner for Schmucks
lol movie old wp old but ok i guess
I'll always keep the heater tucked, you need to bend for yours
My crew like the Navy Seals saying "Objective Alpha has been secured"
ok
Every word from the crowd is "damn" like I was payin for an adlibber
Act your age or I'll have kids so young they don't have hair pulling hairtriggers
eh
Damn nigga! My sick bars will educate you in the chemicals
You getting worse and worse every day like the racism in America
nahh

Originally Posted by Alpo the Alpha

shouts to Sharp, I sure needed this handicap match
you wanna be down? I'll leave you there permanently, and I aint tryna bring that Brandy track back
lol nah ultra no
I heard you're like..... trying text again on some 2nd childhood shit
yah style doesn't turn heads, even Linda Blair would yawn at u while you spit
exorcist turn heads line? oh no u dint
yah audio is wack, you'll never make it to the album shops
and you're only known for lying on tracks, like Malcom's pops
...
fuck your pro tool sessions
war is what I have in store and I'll give you the beats in your local produce section
cmon my nigga forreal
the hawk will leave you bleeding out, the hands? a similar fate
you were a loser yesterday, you'll be a loser tomorrow, what makes you think you'll be a winner today?
lol ok light tho borderline no but ok
I'll champ your moms anus, and have yah aunt tape it
you like irony?
my SUV's outside with a copy of L&O SVU season 1 in the rape kit
lol no nigga
your words rhyme but they lack substance, substantially
I'm a rapper that'll put you in a duffle bag for a ransom fee, then charge a Ransom Fee
ok I get it ransom duffle bag ok.. light

chyin u better than this
that shit was weak

v rhetoric

both yall was punching light tho man

[Junto]

We really waiting, is this dude alpha yet?
A be seein D's without a firm grasp of the alphabet..
wack set up... punch isn't real complex but not bad
I'm the winner you fuck, and you're a beginner you chump,
The only metal you have is the one you got at the Dinner for Schmucks
this was solid... Metal wordplay old but I liked the reference
Every word from the crowd is "damn" like I was payin for an adlibber
Act your age or I'll have kids so young they don't have hair pulling hairtriggers
cool idea, coulda been nice if you worded it differently

vs.

yah audio is wack, you'll never make it to the album shops
and you're only known for lying on tracks, like Malcom's pops
unique reference here but coulda been done better... ok
I'll champ your moms anus, and have yah aunt tape it
you like irony?
my SUV's outside with a copy of L&O SVU season 1 in the rape kit
haha aight... wordy & not the best concept but set up / punch kinda humorous

Wanted to pick some I liked but to be honest there were a lotta misses here fellas...
Hinder & closer were the main ones I wasn't feelin from IAR.
Beats & loser loser from Chyeaa were his weakest...
the ones I quoted above were best, and overall Rhetoric just brought more creative ideas
That plus dinner for shmucks was enough to take it in my opinion

V/IAR

[Sn00p]

We really waiting, is this dude alpha yet?
A be seein D's without a firm grasp of the alphabet..
^cool
I don't think I'm alone here, what you drop is lackluster
Drop wack n we'll see he pasta way because I fed him w/ shells like an italian grandmother..
^not bad. punchline coulda been cleaned up a bit. drop wack part was unnecessary.
Hold up yur hands buster, i got fists of timber that'll leave you injured
Break ya knees to splinters, have ya ribs seeping inward, this one right'll keep you hindered
^right will keep u hindered? idk if i'm missing some wp here...
I'm the winner you fuck, and you're a beginner you chump,
The only metal you have is the one you got at the Dinner for Schmucks
^okay
I'll always keep the heater tucked, you need to bend for yours
My crew like the Navy Seals saying "Objective Alpha has been secured"
^this was solid idea & connection, but could'a been expanded upon to make it rly good
Every word from the crowd is "damn" like I was payin for an adlibber
Act your age or I'll have kids so young they don't have hair pulling hairtriggers
^not bad. flip could be better
Damn nigga! My sick bars will educate you in the chemicals
You getting worse and worse every day like the racism in America
^okayyy

nice verse. u getting better. sometimes the flips cud be better to make the line hit even harder

vs.

shouts to Sharp, I sure needed this handicap match
you wanna be down? I'll leave you there permanently, and I aint tryna bring that Brandy track back
^eh. this is a rly old reference lol. not the hardest hit
I heard you're like..... trying text again on some 2nd childhood shit
yah style doesn't turn heads, even Linda Blair would yawn at u while you spit
^eh. this is rly old
yah audio is wack, you'll never make it to the album shops
and you're only known for lying on tracks, like Malcom's pops
^okay
fuck your pro tool sessions
war is what I have in store and I'll give you the beats in your local produce section
^beats beets? ehh
the hawk will leave you bleeding out, the hands? a similar fate
you were a loser yesterday, you'll be a loser tomorrow, what makes you think you'll be a winner today?
^uh, this doesn't hit hard
I'll champ your moms anus, and have yah aunt tape it
you like irony?
my SUV's outside with a copy of L&O SVU season 1 in the rape kit
^connection's not strong enough. kinda decent tho
your words rhyme but they lack substance, substantially
I'm a rapper that'll put you in a duffle bag for a ransom fee, then charge a Ransom Fee
^okay

idk. chyeah felt kinda uninspired. i've seen much better from him. but he had too many played things here and things that kinda went nowhere. so yea. idk what happened. rhet was decent. he's still got a lot to learn, but he's getting better for sure. he got this pretty clearly, more consistent and less misses.
v/iamrhet

[fraze]

Originally Posted by IAmRhetoric

We really waiting, is this dude alpha yet?
A be seein D's without a firm grasp of the alphabet..
i liked the abcd concept, but you didn't do anything to shape an effective punch. if you want to make this hit, use your setup better and tie into the punch
I don't think I'm alone here, what you drop is lackluster
Drop wack n we'll see he pasta way because I fed him w/ shells like an italian grandmother..
'pasta way' is cool, but this doesnt really count as wordplay b/c the flip only works one way. use your wording to give 'pasta way' a second meaning
Hold up yur hands buster, i got fists of timber that'll leave you injured
Break ya knees to splinters, have ya ribs seeping inward, this one right'll keep you hindered
simple word associations. if you go this route use more tie ins. timber/splinters is boring. stretch your vocab and make more connections
I'm the winner you fuck, and you're a beginner you chump,
The only metal you have is the one you got at the Dinner for Schmucks
liked the flow on this but the punch is meh
I'll always keep the heater tucked, you need to bend for yours
My crew like the Navy Seals saying "Objective Alpha has been secured"
stretched rhymes and not an effective punch
Every word from the crowd is "damn" like I was payin for an adlibber
Act your age or I'll have kids so young they don't have hair pulling hairtriggers
didnt set this up well enough to do anything
Damn nigga! My sick bars will educate you in the chemicals
You getting worse and worse every day like the racism in America
relevant to recent discussions but not really a punch

Originally Posted by Alpo the Alpha

shouts to Sharp, I sure needed this handicap match
you wanna be down? I'll leave you there permanently, and I aint tryna bring that Brandy track back
i get it but didn't like the wording. too wordy for a light punch
I heard you're like..... trying text again on some 2nd childhood shit
yah style doesn't turn heads, even Linda Blair would yawn at u while you spit
a bit obscure w/ the poltergeist reference. and wording is off
yah audio is wack, you'll never make it to the album shops
and you're only known for lying on tracks, like Malcom's pops
another obscure reference. you typically want to stick with stuff the avg person in your audience knows about, unless its super dope. this wasn't really
fuck your pro tool sessions
war is what I have in store and I'll give you the beats in your local produce section
better wording. this is ok i guess. use the setup to make it hit harder
the hawk will leave you bleeding out, the hands? a similar fate
you were a loser yesterday, you'll be a loser tomorrow, what makes you think you'll be a winner today?
nah. not effective
I'll champ your moms anus, and have yah aunt tape it
you like irony?
my SUV's outside with a copy of L&O SVU season 1 in the rape kit
trying to be harsh but this doesn't make sense. why would you have dvds in a rape kit? why would you have rape kit? need to set this up better
your words rhyme but they lack substance, substantially
I'm a rapper that'll put you in a duffle bag for a ransom fee, then charge a Ransom Fee
Nah.

Rhetoric came with a pretty light verse but had a few bars that showed potential, but no solid hits. Alpo had some misses, but beet's was ok to me. Alpo seemed to have an idea of what he was doing but his wording is hurting his concepts. Still decent battle, props to both.

Vote: Alpo the Alpha

[Sharp]

We really waiting, is this dude alpha yet?
A be seein D's without a firm grasp of the alphabet..
Ok idea but kinda lite for me
I don't think I'm alone here, what you drop is lackluster
Drop wack n we'll see he pasta way because I fed him w/ shells like an italian grandmother..
I want this to work but passed away/pasta way doesn't work for me
Hold up yur hands buster, i got fists of timber that'll leave you injured
Break ya knees to splinters, have ya ribs seeping inward, this one right'll keep you hindered
This is just rhyming. While it's cool to be able to do if there's no punch the bar just isn't efficient
I'm the winner you fuck, and you're a beginner you chump,
The only metal you have is the one you got at the Dinner for Schmucks
not really feeling it, mad dated reference
I'll always keep the heater tucked, you need to bend for yours
My crew like the Navy Seals saying "Objective Alpha has been secured"
Ok idea but kinda basic
Every word from the crowd is "damn" like I was payin for an adlibber
Act your age or I'll have kids so young they don't have hair pulling hairtriggers
not really feeling it
Damn nigga! My sick bars will educate you in the chemicals
You getting worse and worse every day like the racism in America
basic but I kinda like it


shouts to Sharp, I sure needed this handicap match
you wanna be down? I'll leave you there permanently, and I aint tryna bring that Brandy track back
stretched wording in the punchline
I heard you're like..... trying text again on some 2nd childhood shit
yah style doesn't turn heads, even Linda Blair would yawn at u while you spit
I get the exorcist/turn heads connection but feel like it coulda hit harder. Okish
yah audio is wack, you'll never make it to the album shops
and you're only known for lying on tracks, like Malcom's pops
I feel bad for not getting this one. Sorry
fuck your pro tool sessions
war is what I have in store and I'll give you the beats in your local produce section
okay
the hawk will leave you bleeding out, the hands? a similar fate
you were a loser yesterday, you'll be a loser tomorrow, what makes you think you'll be a winner today?
harsh bit nothing really going on here imo
I'll champ your moms anus, and have yah aunt tape it
you like irony?
my SUV's outside with a copy of L&O SVU season 1 in the rape kit
not really feeling this
your words rhyme but they lack substance, substantially
I'm a rapper that'll put you in a duffle bag for a ransom fee, then charge a Ransom Fee
funny tbh


Maaaaan if Chyeahhh dropped like he had been lately he woulda had this but I wasn't feeling most of his concepts.. I think rhetoric got it on creativity
V/rhetoric

[Sharp]

4-1 rhetoric

[Allen Knight]

I'm the winner you fuck, and you're a beginner you chump,
The only metal you have is the one you got at the Dinner for Schmucks
Every word from the crowd is "damn" like I was payin for an adlibber
Act your age or I'll have kids so young they don't have hair pulling hairtriggers

Vs

yah audio is wack, you'll never make it to the album shops
and you're only known for lying on tracks, like Malcom's pops



V/Rhetoric, close battle, i honestly seen chyeah drop way better an thought he'd take this one he wasnt bad but just not as consistent as rhetoric here...he had a solid verse acouple of cool lines an he had LOTB, props to both.