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with razor spurs
Join Date: Mar 2014
Location: At David Blaine's favorite place with David Spade and Macy Gray
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Listen, Ya’ll can’t stomach what I’m on, sans frontin. Off my ballsack scrotum. Catch me in an all black Cobra with the top back, stuntin. I’m LeBron slam dunkin, a goddamn mothafuckin boss man, nugga. With the all time greatest flow, the all Tom Brady flow, that dollar sign made of dough, Alzheimer’s crazy flow. And rappers get ate. But I’m on diet: Paleo, can’t handle the fake on the top five radio. I’ve got a natural taste for actual brains; serve the type of meal reserved for Hannibal’s plate. The beef is handsomely braised, no need for salmon or steak, just keep it family made, mesquite the lamb when I baste. Dismantle ya brain until synapses are frayed, I need to scramble your eggs to feed my animal rage. There’s candles on the table, with apples and grapes, the shallots sliced finely to match the filet. Invite you back for a date, and show up fashionably late. But I’m so attractive and great you were still emphatic I came. Psychosomatic, addict insane. Dave is the prodigy, the prodigy: Dave. This ought to be rape, misogyny, hate. Cause all you bitches bother me, I’ve got to be frank. I’m not in your ranks or even distantly close. I’m egotistically gross, achieved tremendously, consistently been winning the most. Statistically, my figures just bloat, continuous growth… I’ll decommission your soul, to be specific. I’m dope. I’m chilling with ghosts, while I live in the HOF, cause it really gets cold with no living involved. The greatest alive on the planet of earth, so praise your Allah before the damage gets worse. The favorite top candidate, first. Dave is the boss, you faggots are clerks.
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obsessed
Join Date: Nov 2013
Location: fucka idiyote
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Battle Record: Faggot-1
Accomplishments - can recite entirety of shrek 2
Champed - tangoed with spider man behind scenes in spider-man 2
- was candidate for gerber baby 3x
- smush parker like bb comment on instagram saying "u fucka suck idiyote"
- smush beer on head and didn't cry
- parallel parked in between 2 ferrari's in tonky truck once
- when saying pledge of allegiance i said "i don't" lmao deadass bb satan
- won tshirt from taco bell saying "taco cat" is the same backwards for filling out 500 surveys in a
- neighbor house caught on fire i call FIRE department and saved lives, was in newspaper
- set neighbor house on fire lmao
- fuck neighbor husband and wife
- first fish caught resembled david ortiz
- colin kaepernick
- related to genghis khan
- elected assistant to the vice president assistant to the president for regional chess club
- never lost game of hide and seek
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sucked thx
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Om
Join Date: Jan 2013
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I've read better from u guy. Seemed almost intentionally lackluster. Could've been a keystyle. Phrasing and syllable count were on point but also bland. I still love you.
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¯\_(ツ)_/¯
Join Date: Feb 2015
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damn
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Banned
Join Date: Aug 2014
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probably good with respect to how much time you spent on it. probably better audio than type, with a lot of bombast or somethin. otherwise...eh...
You're way doper though &I know it. Show us next time. Sounds like I'm feeding half my shit. But na, feeding yours. Show us Show us. |
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Senior Member
Join Date: Jul 2014
Posts: 1,008
Battle Record: 23-10
Champed - Art of Writing League
- AOWL Season 5
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I liked the schemes, and the flow, which is attributed to the schemes no doubt. The content itself is, of course, a boost of the self. While, not my exact cup of tea, it nevertheless has an entertaining factor to it and was a nice ride. Can't say I truly enjoy the format, but nonetheless a worthy piece to spectate upon. One thing I did find a bit awkward was the constant repetition of Dave, which I know is your name, but it feels kind of contrived and takes away from the impact as a whole; It humanizes what is not intended to be so, as dictated by the braggadocio and self-entitlement throughout. Anyways, thank you.
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more like dark bladder |
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