The Ores of Mankind

Vulgar · 01-07-2015, 01:22 AM

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PancakeBrah · 01-07-2015, 08:51 PM

"Humans are fickle negotiators. Even if you max in at full
you'll have a bone to pick, and an axe in your back or your skull
Invertebrates encase internal marshes - sabbaticals usher
We're so cautious when we walk with our masses of brothers
it's like that uneasy feeling you get when entering a capitol suburb
in contrast to survival instinct driven suspicion Neanderthal's might've suffered"
-Dope.

Cool piece. Nice running metaphor throughout. The beginning seemed to start a little slow but it picked up quickly.

Kin · 01-08-2015, 06:24 PM

Most can't posit a molded posture from a coal deposit
Once we're home, we may resume our thrones but the fumes that roam are toxic;
daaamn

you'll have a bone to pick, and an axe in your back or your skull
whoa

We write to puncture, speak to pierce and think to overcome
-droppin' knowledge

well written piece...had some deepness and realness but kept up wit' the creative side....stayin' sharp right here

Good shit

Bodey · 01-11-2015, 02:18 AM

We're brilliantly felt, but coarse with organs and septum's of assembled quartz
One may seldom approach situations with less remorse than the gemstone corpse

That was really cool. Few other lines that others already quoted too. Always an intelligent read from you. Drop another freestyle soon on your soundcloud :)

Geno · 01-11-2015, 06:57 PM

W/b. Havnt seen u in a while bro.
I liked this. Made me happy to read it

01-07-2015, 01:22 AM	#1
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01-07-2015, 08:51 PM	#2
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 12,480 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899407	"Humans are fickle negotiators. Even if you max in at full you'll have a bone to pick, and an axe in your back or your skull Invertebrates encase internal marshes - sabbaticals usher We're so cautious when we walk with our masses of brothers it's like that uneasy feeling you get when entering a capitol suburb in contrast to survival instinct driven suspicion Neanderthal's might've suffered" -Dope. Cool piece. Nice running metaphor throughout. The beginning seemed to start a little slow but it picked up quickly. __________________ Netcees 2025 Revivalist Movement Founder

01-11-2015, 06:57 PM	#5
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	W/b. Havnt seen u in a while bro. I liked this. Made me happy to read it __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

01-08-2015, 06:24 PM	#3
Kin Kill.It.Nonstop Join Date: Jun 2014 Posts: 666 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 662201	Most can't posit a molded posture from a coal deposit Once we're home, we may resume our thrones but the fumes that roam are toxic; daaamn you'll have a bone to pick, and an axe in your back or your skull whoa We write to puncture, speak to pierce and think to overcome -droppin' knowledge well written piece...had some deepness and realness but kept up wit' the creative side....stayin' sharp right here Good shit