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Old 01-01-2015, 03:06 AM   #1
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purpose is lucid
pristine in it's oxygen lack. stay pretty in Providence, black-
bled the lace of that blouse. graft echinacea, pollen, and sprout.
i believe that we that we borrowed *the solemn* from churches and druids-
rose-tinted opiates. as fallen as out.
opening opera ensembles, exit & go for my coat
and cope with some coughfuls, bourbon-influenced. gurgling fluids.
the nausea, clandestine, corrosive in nature and
probably scalding as acid drops in your esophagus/throat
as if seeing disease through chameleon goggles. echolerascope
so pro-creation. so miscreant, broke- it pays to be lonely and vacant.
seven seasons seeped in a bottle. and dreamed through a nostril.
relearned every muse, sleeping beauty, as ghostly old sorrow.
if only tomorrow could be here more soon
permanence muted. sirens sound, and i'll be seeing you too

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Old 01-03-2015, 11:40 AM   #2
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u need direction.

this has potential.

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so pro-creation. so miscreant, broke- it pays to be lonely and vacant.
seven seasons seeped in a bottle. and dreamed through a nostril.

i enjoyed the tone of this segment and really the energy of the piece itself. really obscure but it felt almost like God's bathroom floor. you struck a chord and went with the vibration.

explain to me ECHOLERASCOPE. did you just make that up to rhyme? its not something I've ever heard of.

i hope you stick around, i like your verbiage.

very familiar in a particular fashion.


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hello Dead Man and Innovator. Thank you. I thought that e. coli was short for eschera cholera but it is actually something more medical sounding, I am not a doctor. I meant to suggest that everything I see is shit, but it wasn't well done so I lost my concept

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Liked the vibes you have. Stick around. Soak in some rays. Put your feet in the sand, man.. Pce
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