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nok Su kow
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Srs. Who needs fireworks when you gave me the entire earth?
Kicking forever reality to those who don't know what life is worth We live with hole's in our centers. Like a thousand bagels I want to spit lightening to knock down tornadoes I suggest you count your halos, Before the years are peeled off you couch potatoes We found remains though, so closure is optional I know it's tough, but, look around soldier, you're not alone What afterlife? All I know is stab & slice & chop the bone I mean, look at how perfect the city is! You'll be back. An old soul trying to stir up the idiots Right on time, murder the prettiest. Re word your little fibs Herder of brilliance. A foundation, preserver of brittleness Waves and more waves.. It's an ocean. I need ayahuasca, the mystic potion. That liquid holy The trick to getting stardust is to get it smoking Stupid foliage. Super nova eyes. No balance. Edge of seat or prude and sober lives I mean really. Now that the mask's down, like me? Fuck drinking. I do NOT miss all the black outs & dry heeves Gotta go all in. All out. All day. You've got to gamble And I wanna Led this bitch and leave, I've got to ramble The shambles are tidy now but the glue marks are obvious Keep it moving. Coal for days. Wonder who dropped the naughtiest? I WANT seclusion from all this bullshit that's botched & ruined It is what it is though. Ears stay addicted to karma's music
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Indigo
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that jump off is crazy..spit lightning to knock down tornadoes..this whole shit was mean mean
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I suggest you count your halos,
Before the years are peeled off you couch potatoes We found remains though, so closure is optional I know it's tough, but, look around soldier, you're not alone What afterlife? All I know is stab & slice & chop the bone I mean, look at how perfect the city is! my personal favorite section. you should compile everything youve written in the last, say, 6-7 months into a collective series. no lie. i don't know where your motivation lies to do that. if its anything like mine thats a stupid fucking idea. but its my hypocritical suggestion to you. thanks for another one homie. and take care
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In a few snips, i've noticed your admiration for other writers.
In short couplets you post, you probably have a very strong voice, and a very strong foundation of emotion and narrative that very few writers possess. This is your strength! You should wield more readily and more confidently! the couplet deadman quoted was on point and razor sharp. I hope you are doing well |
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Dope write. Most nights. Folks write.
I mean, look at how perfect the city is! You'll be back. An old soul trying to stir up the idiots Right on time, murder the prettiest. Re word your little fibs Herder of brilliance. A foundation, preserver of brittleness Waves and more waves.. It's an ocean. I need ayahuasca, the mystic potion. That liquid holy The trick to getting stardust is to get it smoking ^Oh, nice. |
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Dope but that thousand bagel shit was straight stupid.
then u spit hot fira the next line which is funny to me lol..
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nok Su kow
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You don't like bagels?
We have holes in our centers like a halo of an eclipse Don't buy too much into all this playful little bullshit
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Yeah, Kenny, you stupid fuck.
jk. I need ayahuasca, the mystic potion. That liquid holy The trick to getting stardust is to get it smoking Stupid foliage. Super nova eyes. No balance. Edge of seat or prude and sober lives ^das dope mane Last edited by Zen; 01-10-2015 at 08:20 PM. |
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