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Old 12-10-2014, 11:01 PM   #1
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Yeah I have no damn soul
Dark circles around these two black holes
Aerosmith clothes with the beaten up jansport
Couldn't be fly because I never seen pass poor
Always getting reminded by those bastards fucking assholes
With their privileged lives using daddy's van as transport
Going out with those self centered looking near dikes
Probably going out to see twilight it's premier night
What if I go and show up wouldn't that be a weird sight?
In a trench coat even though it's 90 degrees outside
make em scream in fear, make em ask how nd why
kill them right so they watch their friends slowly die
With a light grin on my face and i feel all bubbly inside
then leave out my humvy leave no trace so they cant find me
Yeah.. that surely would be nice but thats a daydream
ironically at the same time their worst nightmare
Remember in the lunchtable they dumpd ketchup inyour nice hair
Remember they made fun of you and all the fucking dikes stared
Even the teachers coudn't help but giggle at you
Even your so called friend matthew made an ass of you
You must kill them all they dont deserve their lives
You must kill them all its only fair right
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Old 12-11-2014, 02:48 PM   #2
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Couldn't be fly because I never seen pass poor
Cool play on word

Didnt dig a whole lot in this. The major problem is you stil have a dissadvantage with your accent. I say that because you write like you speak broken english. Is that a fair assumption? Keep writing. I like reading
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