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Old 11-18-2014, 12:07 PM   #1
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Yo,

Above your roof I've landed
with a bottle & Brandy
who said "Nah I don't wanna get wasted"
when offered some brandy
so I bottled her face in
which improved things greatly once she'd removed the bandage
I'm used to runnin' rampant
a brute that's random like my upper hand is
it's duck season muther fucker
you can stick the Wu comparisons next to your butt plug
and this
"He's a loser apparently, a noob at battlin' shit
'stead of movin' up gradually
he gravitates to where stagnant be in the most unusual fashion
let's label him planet freak
dressed in overalls with a tooth pick hangin'
on for dear life,
crammed between jagged teeth
restin' above the matted whiskers on a cat who's beard's white
I don't think he's the brightest kid"

bitch I can light up the blackest street
you are what backwards be,
should slide on out of here, Beat It!
'fore I moonwalk over there heathen
and have you side kicked off my galaxy
in one fricken motion this evenin',
so much growth in this being
together goes
like to get her and roses
or your throat and my semen
minus the tenderness, closeness,
makin' the most of the moment
'stead of just bendin' you over and havin' you probed with my boner
let's toast to the penis girls for givin' y'all an ovary beatin'
I'm so fuckin' underrated, love the haters
love the way that you is overly beaten
should stroll over to my piece titled 'Over' like you feel you owe me to read it
do you ever think your so dope that you wish you could clone your own features?
so finely tuned is the system in this lethal opponent
to defeat you's my focus,
I go into usually winnin' mode as you seem to not notice
I'm a sinner, a poet
and if you done didn't know it
some may say an innards exposer
as I have Lucifer in me and I am willin' to show it
get ripped to bits like my flow is
doin' to you over and over continually
forever repeatin' the process
'fore trottin' off on it's killin' spree
you could never lyrically hit me
I'm Vinnie your Iggy in this musical bizness
Netcees is an idiot village you continue livin' in willingly
where your troops in this bitch kid when my movements are vicious?
I'm equipped with limitless usage to maneuver the brilliance
I've a million ways I can do you
whilst your a loser to billions.
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Old 11-18-2014, 12:16 PM   #2
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Nice. Quick read before I get back to work. Flow on point as ever. I been reading your stuff just can't respond to everything. Really some of you concepts in this one though. Stay up homie.
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Old 11-29-2014, 06:56 AM   #3
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Thanks bro.
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Old 12-03-2014, 12:21 AM   #4
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flow is cool dude, could be a bit more smoothed out but i've been listening to the new wu album so this is rocking with me right now.

dressed in overalls with a tooth pick hangin'
on for dear life,
crammed between jagged teeth
restin' above the matted whiskers on a cat who's beard's white
I don't think he's the brightest kid"

the imagery right there had me. loved this part. there was a lot of short entertaining parts outside of this part but nothing that hit me as hard as this part did. i think overall it lacked a bit of focus but this was super fun for a quick write and that's what i'm taking it as, so good job dude.
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Old 12-03-2014, 07:22 PM   #5
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It was cool in content. Just dont really prefer the way you formatted this. Your rhyming style here was off for me... i know its there. I just coukdnt figure out what you were going for. You know what i mean? Whtlat im saYing iss..... im reading it out loud but it isnt flowing as smoothly as i wang it to and i can tell its there but im just reading it wrong and im really getting frustrated trying to find he flow you were using and now i quit
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