So..

Exis · 05-22-2018, 01:34 AM

Ayo,

Your stuck in the surface, fully trapped in position
Think outta the box for a minute my nigga like some crafty magician
I've left prints of disaster on every ass that's been kicked in
& Sonned more kids who be bastard like
Slummin' it,
Who pray for what's after life
in a fucked up African village
I spend my time perfectin' a passion because without the practice there's limits
You waste all of yours straight up boardin' here or fuckin' hash taggin' Twitter
Your a crack baby nigga,
That got all smacked daily with it
Grew into some dumb fuck slash spastic cunt
Strollin' down a less than average path whilst you bitchin'
Add on, do the math on some aarhythmic type shit
I'll fuckin' divide you in half like that bloody wig I just split
My name isn't Lenox, I don't spit Eurythmics rhymes kid
But Annie are you ok?
Can you tell us why your so lame?
Really weepin' over one's lyrics like the bitch that she is
Isn't you zero & four whore...?
Let's toast up with Kamikaze & Twisted while redrum is smeared over floor boards
There's so much blood on these four walls,
So many mutts need a muzzle as sayin' nothin' I'm all for.

Twodrop · 05-24-2018, 12:16 AM

Thought there were moments of brilliance here

I enjoyed the way you can tell it's an Exis verse from a mile away...

I don't know if it's an accent thing but I miss some of your rhymes.

Your stuck in the surface, fully trapped in position
Think outta the box for a minute my nigga like some crafty magician
I've left prints of disaster on every ass that's been kicked in
& Sonned more kids who be bastard like
Slummin' it,

This couplet was dope, but slummin' it/been kicked in... thought it should've followed a similar rhyme scheme

I spend my time perfectin' a passion because without the practice there's limits
this is dope

Your a crack baby nigga,
That got all smacked daily with it
Grew into some dumb fuck slash spastic cunt
Strollin' down a less than average path whilst you bitchin'
Add on, do the math on some aarhythmic type shit
I'll fuckin' divide you in half like that bloody wig I just split
My name isn't Lenox, I don't spit Eurythmics rhymes kid
classic exis

The last couple bars just seemed like toss ins...

Good shit tho, keep posting

Current faggot · 05-24-2018, 12:27 AM

Why did you write this?

I talk shit but I respect the open mic area..ill give response after u answer

Twodrop · 05-24-2018, 12:40 AM

kys

Exis · 05-24-2018, 05:31 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Former Textcee

Why did you write this?

I talk shit but I respect the open mic area..ill give response after u answer

Because I can bitch...

Exis · 05-24-2018, 05:39 AM

@Twodrop...Your right, I was born in LA...raised by a fully Chilean mother...grew up in Jamaica & now live in Australia...So my accent is idk I wanna say unique but that seems really egocentric so I'll go with different...I need to work on wordin' things better for readers, that's my bad.

Thanks heaps for the feedback fam, 'tis appreciated.

Mr. J · 06-04-2018, 03:13 AM

I lold after I got to Annie are you OK.

I stopped there to say is this towards someone?
I thought it was a story that was unfolding then pow it took an offroad route
dope shit littered in here regardless.
i feel like you have an accent of some sort for this wording.
the flow is pretty smooth though, choppy in the beginning but straightened out later on.
dope shit

Exis · 06-04-2018, 08:27 AM

Thanks bro...nah wasn't directed @ anyone tbh, even pm'd Lenox to say no disrespect...keyed shit up on the bus when goin' home back from Uni.

Gracia's for the feed fam...I appreciate it.

05-22-2018, 01:34 AM	#1
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	So.. Ayo, Your stuck in the surface, fully trapped in position Think outta the box for a minute my nigga like some crafty magician I've left prints of disaster on every ass that's been kicked in & Sonned more kids who be bastard like Slummin' it, Who pray for what's after life in a fucked up African village I spend my time perfectin' a passion because without the practice there's limits You waste all of yours straight up boardin' here or fuckin' hash taggin' Twitter Your a crack baby nigga, That got all smacked daily with it Grew into some dumb fuck slash spastic cunt Strollin' down a less than average path whilst you bitchin' Add on, do the math on some aarhythmic type shit I'll fuckin' divide you in half like that bloody wig I just split My name isn't Lenox, I don't spit Eurythmics rhymes kid But Annie are you ok? Can you tell us why your so lame? Really weepin' over one's lyrics like the bitch that she is Isn't you zero & four whore...? Let's toast up with Kamikaze & Twisted while redrum is smeared over floor boards There's so much blood on these four walls, So many mutts need a muzzle as sayin' nothin' I'm all for.

06-04-2018, 03:13 AM	#7
Mr. J The Clown Prince Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 5,033 Battle Record: 35-45 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 59349679	I lold after I got to Annie are you OK. I stopped there to say is this towards someone? I thought it was a story that was unfolding then pow it took an offroad route dope shit littered in here regardless. i feel like you have an accent of some sort for this wording. the flow is pretty smooth though, choppy in the beginning but straightened out later on. dope shit __________________ .....laugh....and the world laughs with you

05-24-2018, 12:16 AM	#2
Twodrop Unknown Join Date: Mar 2018 Posts: 673 Battle Record: 2-2 Rep Power: 0	Thought there were moments of brilliance here I enjoyed the way you can tell it's an Exis verse from a mile away... I don't know if it's an accent thing but I miss some of your rhymes. Your stuck in the surface, fully trapped in position Think outta the box for a minute my nigga like some crafty magician I've left prints of disaster on every ass that's been kicked in & Sonned more kids who be bastard like Slummin' it, This couplet was dope, but slummin' it/been kicked in... thought it should've followed a similar rhyme scheme I spend my time perfectin' a passion because without the practice there's limits this is dope Your a crack baby nigga, That got all smacked daily with it Grew into some dumb fuck slash spastic cunt Strollin' down a less than average path whilst you bitchin' Add on, do the math on some aarhythmic type shit I'll fuckin' divide you in half like that bloody wig I just split My name isn't Lenox, I don't spit Eurythmics rhymes kid classic exis The last couple bars just seemed like toss ins... Good shit tho, keep posting

05-24-2018, 12:27 AM	#3
Current faggot Senior Member Join Date: May 2018 Posts: 233 Rep Power: 0	Why did you write this? I talk shit but I respect the open mic area..ill give response after u answer

05-24-2018, 12:40 AM	#4
Twodrop Unknown Join Date: Mar 2018 Posts: 673 Battle Record: 2-2 Rep Power: 0	kys

05-24-2018, 05:39 AM	#6
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	@Twodrop...Your right, I was born in LA...raised by a fully Chilean mother...grew up in Jamaica & now live in Australia...So my accent is idk I wanna say unique but that seems really egocentric so I'll go with different...I need to work on wordin' things better for readers, that's my bad. Thanks heaps for the feedback fam, 'tis appreciated.

06-04-2018, 08:27 AM	#8
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Thanks bro...nah wasn't directed @ anyone tbh, even pm'd Lenox to say no disrespect...keyed shit up on the bus when goin' home back from Uni. Gracia's for the feed fam...I appreciate it.