10-13-2013, 05:58 PM | #1 |
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Shogun Dinero vs. Death - DEATH WINS BY KO
10 bars, due midnight
Here's my picture http://profile.ak.fbcdn.net/hprofile...40694632_n.jpg I don't need a pic of u, ok?
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10-13-2013, 06:03 PM | #2 |
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http://www.netcees.co/showthread.php?t=24829
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10-13-2013, 09:31 PM | #3 |
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this has become a no pic, pinkslip 16 max due by midnight PST battle
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10-14-2013, 02:43 AM | #4 | |
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weak faggot.....
Ya girl never faithful, fuck her when she down? gladly I’ll eat ya pum’kin pie while she feed u stories w/ more holes than bags avi he not creative, “$ho Money” still living in 1999 is what my guess is cause Gamble’s so “Authen!k”, his aliases have !’s for I’s and dollar signs for S’s IM BETTER THAN U & capitalized on that, so I have to brag n boast I’ll pretend u are good at swag n flow if u pretend that’s what u don’t lack the most From NY but u not in the top MCs out of there & can’t argue Them dudes living life in the fast lane, while u couldn’t be in HOV lane if u carpooled Quote:
You’ll be remembered as an ill nika…. once he got Alzheimers and forgot how to rhyme Live it up in suburbia too kid, his ass still a clown Son’s such a pussy, he living with an NY state of mind on the outskirts of town wanna fight bags one day then kiss his ass, c'mon bro ya split personality got u tryna be Shogun while ya reach more than Jon Jones 14. u can drop 16 if u want, just don't bite or sway |
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10-14-2013, 03:23 PM | #5 |
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Talkin bout u don't like Pussies.. Witty already proved ur a scared bitch.
I bet this faggot wears pink so much you'd think he was supporting the month of breast cancer awareness. I figured I'd put u on blast.. An beat u till ur full of bad burgundy bruises. I'd say Death is a gateway to the acceptance of God... But that was b4 the tag tourney conclusion. Get brushed by the devil's wrath, from u b more like a choppy approach. The real reason women fear for their lives is cuz they've already witnessed The Kiss Of Death.. yea sloppy & gross. Brought up some other NCGs and this faggot got more scared. Got choked up when Aer was surfacing... It b like this herb was a victim of bio chemical warfare. No1 on this site can stand ur verses.. Face it ur a nauseous wreck. Here let me break it down for u.... NC BOARD: to Death... "When u drop were fucking bored to death". Buffy couldn't convince him to Raise The Stakes... simple fact that he must die. Ud think... with all the Swayze makes... That's when u know for sure.. he's just Acting A Tough Guy. with all ur pathetic topics no one ever bothers.. Maybe we could bond on blondes. Shit I haven't seen someone Go Off From A Post so hard since Hardy did the Swanton Bomb. So I granted this Pinkslip. But remember this first.. u set all the terms. So I guess u could say... Having a Death Wish is the WAY TO GO!.... yeah & NEVER return. Pc faggot.
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10-14-2013, 09:20 PM | #7 |
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change all your shit back faggot, your avi, your username etc
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10-15-2013, 10:04 AM | #8 |
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No1 on this site can stand ur verses.. Face it ur a nauseous wreck.
Here let me break it down for u.... NC BOARD: to Death... "When u drop were fucking bored to death". ^your only decent concept thats why it was quoted... vs IM BETTER THAN U & capitalized on that, so I have to brag n boast I’ll pretend u are good at swag n flow if u pretend that’s what u don’t lack the most Live it up in suburbia too kid, his ass still a clown Son’s such a pussy, he living with an NY state of mind on the outskirts of town wanna fight bags one day then kiss his ass, c'mon bro ya split personality got u tryna be Shogun while ya reach more than Jon Jones Vote- pretty clear cut winner here... Death RTF on Me Vs R!can |
10-15-2013, 01:17 PM | #9 |
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I wasn't feeling Neither verses, But I'll give ya'll breakdown:
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10-15-2013, 04:15 PM | #10 |
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its 2-0 yo, im tryna help sharp out
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that Swayze line was ill...your problem is you got to much going on in this shit..to many ideas man..you gotta level that shit out holmes get in there and really flesh out some concept that concept...that aer line would of worked if you would of just worked on it a bit more... Quote:
overall.. I got death taking this....I honestly thought it was closer than everybody says..gamble showed but prolly cuz death didn't take this to serious..it wasn't one sided though...death just won. Last edited by Inno; 10-15-2013 at 09:06 PM. |
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10-15-2013, 09:21 PM | #12 |
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This shit's two pages long? Wtf?
I'm not gonna give a bar by bar breakdown but I will break it down somewhat. Gamble- You had a few good ideas but your wording and set ups to the punch killed it. The lines were waaaaay too stretched leading up to the punchline that it took away any effect it might have given it. It kinda reminded me of an ihh type battle verse that wasn't good. Death- I've never read any battles from you before but since you call yourself the god I'll assume you can do better than this. It seemed like you hardly tried really, or maybe you did. Idk. The strong point of your verse was the weak point of Gamble's. Your wording led to your punches connecting effectively. Even if they were weak punches they still connected. V/Death |
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10-16-2013, 06:49 PM | #14 |
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Wtf, this battle was too wack for a 'pinkslip'
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10-16-2013, 06:50 PM | #15 |
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GOD FUCKING DAMMIT RAYGE
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10-21-2013, 02:10 PM | #16 |
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Death had some good concepts here and there, but his execution was pretty iffy. e.g. the Hov Lane line that lacks the possessive S on Hov's in the wordplay. But I thought the NY State of mind line was okay. The Jon jones shit was a weak closer, but overall it was a solid verse.
Improv, you didn't start out too bad, but around the middle of your verse, it just seemed like you were doing too much. The board to death line and aer line both seem erratic. I kind of liked the Swanton Bomb line, but I just didn't feel like it was all that insulting Overall, I think Shogun had the hardest hit with the swanton line, but Death was just all around more consistent with his lines. MVGT - Death |
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