05-27-2016, 12:19 PM | #1 |
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Week 13: UnbornBuddha vs. 2Tripple0 [Buddha 3-0]
Season 6 Verses are due MONDAY 5/30 (ext. 5/31) at 11:59 PST Voting ends WEDNESDAY 6/1 at 11:59 PST Verses May Not Exceed 48 Lines Voting on four battles is required. If you win and don't vote the requirement you will receive a loss instead. If you lose and don't vote the requirement, you will receive a one-week suspension. Please post links to your four votes in the voting thread. Topics Explained This week you will receive a period in time that covers a huge range of years and events, you can pull inspiration from anything whether it be real life events and stories or a fictional one as long as it fits the time frames. Enjoy! G/Luck (5-3) @2tripple0 (4-3) @UnbornBuddha Topic: Modern History - 1880-1969 Includes Early Machine age, World War 1, Atomic Age, Post War Era, The Fifties, The Space Age and The sixties.
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05-30-2016, 04:50 AM | #2 |
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The contemporary epoch
On the surface it’s beautiful, Kyoto orchids in bloom, behold. The material surplus is irrefutable. Endorphins as pharmaceuticals Diacetylmorphine leaves me immovable I’m nervous in my own funeral. Smog toxins in my lungs, using purgatives and albuterol. Having to put into a coffin my own son. Carving freedom’s doctrine on my tongue So never to forget the noxious gas chambers. Zyklon B vapors, agnostic by nature. A porcelain soul dropped and shattered Descartes making thoughts to matter. Antibiotics marking the scientific age. Darwin’s nonspecific race, with insipid traits Argued to have bestowed the DNA we inherit today. Empiric faith as Homo sapiens become the futuristic apes. Yet, no one could explain a cell’s liquid space. Abiogenesis says life derived from a cryogenic state. On the surface its beautiful, Relaxed, with a suit and tie working in cubicles. Labor laws not in effect, a child, the stone mason Growing up to know the depression of his own nation. Groveling street orphans, infants suckling on air Wall street muggers hustling for heirs. Einstein indubitably disproving Newtonian physics Relativity explained through motion and distance. Oppenheimer’s emotional distance, explosive existence Plutonium shipments, cancerous omen remission. Nietzsche’s absurdity on the notions of spirit Derived from Plotinus metaphysics. Swallowing anxiolytics to reach the echoes of sleep Polio vaccine, but no cure for the Leper’s disease. There’s a troll under the bridge No one wants to look at. Comfort and bliss. Cherry soda shop, two rosy lip lovers kiss. Alas, we suffer because we discovered it Mental disorders abound, 1950 asylums. Al Capone American-Sicilian violence Top crime lord, subdued by the syphilis virus. Rockefeller’s behemoth avarice. Fiends so ravenous Their heart is gangrenous. Beings who feast on basilisks Greed akin to a serpent’s malnutrition. Gandhi's mercy exhibitions. Sexual revolution releasing dormant inhibitions. Early television. Che Guevara’s nonconformist inquisition. Endorsing ammunition. MK Ultra’s distorted apparitions. Disturbing avolition. The pain lady liberty has seen. History repeats because the mystery we seek is in the misery we reap, Consider it at least. Last edited by UnbornBuddha; 05-30-2016 at 03:24 PM. |
05-31-2016, 10:52 AM | #3 |
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Coach like get in the game ya head in the clouds
I used to love going to shows week in and week out establishments putting on events and going to clubs everyone looked up and just sorta shrugged Ride around you like a road keep the fire hot and this aint italy but my capital stay fly like Rome And like a boat on a winters day I'm about to float But this was like a dam I was digging to stop any floods Was it love or just a crush I've been a thug since a young pup Nah its just a fuck cops likes to wire the dough in my blood call me gas I gotta pump I don't know how to complete this story without follying up Cause its effecting my family I'm thinking about it constantly But its something unique like hair thats curly You can call me fifty cause yall best start begging for mercy This case aint a jury its something fresh like a cup of coffee Ya body get outlined and ya crew getting ate like a curry Call you some puck still ain't skating on ice like a game of hockey Lock my money in cubbies divide you up into seperate countries Wash dishes like Tony keep 1 cocked call it an uzi I'm a shroom like boomers my wife is a straight coogar Fill my bullets with powder last name Simpson like Homer Smoke you every half hour spark up like a motor Plant you like seeds watch you turn into some flowers Couldn't keep it real so I'm smoking you like pot Asking shorties if they fancy a ride and they hop up on it like a mop Picking up a mic tying knots like you was wearing a bowtie Roll up a road and get jumped just for writing some punchlines Drain you of your blood think you can play me like a schmuck Digest this like drugs sweep you up under the rug Fit you like o.j. fitting a glove magazine like inside stuff Carry u around like you a handgun pull you out like a tool Welcome you like a church and keep a Grail in case im searched People like fuck it it's your word against ya homegirl We gotta start talking before we can make an impression first I'm painting a kanvas dreaming of a horse and carriage I guess you could call it love and marriage clean your lenses instead of wearing you like glasses How half the time dudes just dreaming about lasses But right before the tears we were all rolling around on the ground laughing This topic if you don't get it is all about how time is passing and what exactly has just happened
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06-02-2016, 12:51 AM | #4 | |
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2K, seems like a scatter brain-esque verse. I dunno man. There seems to be a loose story in there, seems like you're playing some sport day dreaming about a chick, then you start throwing punchlines & similes & bars to that girl you're now battling.. Lol, it just was too sporadic for me. This could've been cool if it was more concise. Buddha's verse was dope. 2K.. needs focus. *shrugs vBuddha |
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06-02-2016, 01:02 AM | #5 |
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Buddha....you didnt start the fire because it was always burning
I enjoy how you have cut your lines down, & worked on your wording. the flow to this hits you so rapid its like some Immortal Technique/Bone Thugs shit I would have cut the line about burying your child because you didnt really touch on it... or maybe you did, maybe the ills of society had its effect on him in the end whatever the story is you went off into a stream of consciousness my friend you float us down a river of history while showcasing a this worlds rotten past the intro could have been done differently but to be real, this verse is quite memorable...nice work 2...I honestly dont know if you are making a mockery of the league or maybe you are just some idiot savant that needs a blunt of weed. whatever your issue is I dont think you fully comprehend the happenings you need to make up your mind on what you want to be when *rapping* if you want to write a thousand lines that lead up to nothing go to the cypher try to grow from what you read, slow down & try to excel as a writer... I dont know what else to say to you aside from I only got 10 lines in... then I stopped... v/Buddha, this was an unfair battle....really
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06-03-2016, 03:04 AM | #6 |
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2k - I liked the concept, and that closing line was pertinent. The problem though, is the metaphors and line concepts were rather weak. You decided not to go with heavy imagery or detail and instead went with these 'word plays' that were rather remedial. Still, you get cool points for executing a fairly dope concept rather well.
Buddha - Deep shit man, this is classic buddha, jam packed with info, I love it. You seem a tad rusty, but this verse is lovely none the less. You def covered some ground though man. This was a small glimpse in how your brain works, it was a bit like 2k too in all honesty. The way you jumped from thought to thought, far more coherent then his verses, but in the same vain. v/Buddha better mechanics and more captivating, pretty damn close though in all honesty.
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