Justice

Frank · 01-29-2014, 06:53 AM

Horrified, they slide the cuffs off and walk him past Ted and Jeffreys presence
The two killers express resentment; they are upset by the menaces methods -
Every cell they walk him past, the message is death wish
Exempt; he must live out the rest of his sentence

To be continued. . .

Frank · 02-13-2014, 11:15 AM

1 or 10 responses is appreciated

Just Write · 02-13-2014, 11:53 AM

Horrified, they slide the cuffs off and walk him past Ted and Jeffreys presence
The two killers express resentment; they are upset by the menaces methods -
Every cell they walk him past, the message is death wish
Exempt; he must live out the rest of his sentence
.

My fav part
.

inda streched lines in this one bro. Still appreciate it for being such en elaborate piece compacted in so few lines but still not up to par with the bus one or even the aqua velvet one, havent read the mary jane one but i will eventually get to it.

Frank · 02-15-2014, 11:11 AM

Uppin

Just Write · 02-15-2014, 12:16 PM

Lol so says the 5 word maximum feedback man. You leave some of the most inadequate feedback ive read but ill try harder next time brotha man

dead man · 02-15-2014, 12:33 PM

Just write has a point there franklin.

This was cool. If you dropped this in the league vs. pretty much anybody you would have lost though.

Move on these are old topics.

01-29-2014, 06:53 AM	#1
Frank Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 3,228 Champed - NWL Season 2 - Art of Writing League (5x) - Lime Green Poetry Association - AOWL Season 6 - AOWL Season 10 Rep Power: 3853343	Justice Horrified, they slide the cuffs off and walk him past Ted and Jeffreys presence The two killers express resentment; they are upset by the menaces methods - Every cell they walk him past, the message is death wish Exempt; he must live out the rest of his sentence To be continued. . . __________________ *VETWORK* Last edited by Frank; 04-12-2014 at 08:36 PM.

02-13-2014, 11:15 AM	#2
Frank Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 3,228 Champed - NWL Season 2 - Art of Writing League (5x) - Lime Green Poetry Association - AOWL Season 6 - AOWL Season 10 Rep Power: 3853343	1 or 10 responses is appreciated __________________ *VETWORK*

02-13-2014, 11:53 AM	#3
Just Write Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,709 Battle Record: 9-12 Rep Power: 4997614	Horrified, they slide the cuffs off and walk him past Ted and Jeffreys presence The two killers express resentment; they are upset by the menaces methods - Every cell they walk him past, the message is death wish Exempt; he must live out the rest of his sentence . My fav part . inda streched lines in this one bro. Still appreciate it for being such en elaborate piece compacted in so few lines but still not up to par with the bus one or even the aqua velvet one, havent read the mary jane one but i will eventually get to it. __________________

02-15-2014, 11:11 AM	#4
Frank Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 3,228 Champed - NWL Season 2 - Art of Writing League (5x) - Lime Green Poetry Association - AOWL Season 6 - AOWL Season 10 Rep Power: 3853343	Uppin __________________ *VETWORK* Last edited by Frank; 04-12-2014 at 08:30 PM.

02-15-2014, 12:16 PM	#5
Just Write Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,709 Battle Record: 9-12 Rep Power: 4997614	Lol so says the 5 word maximum feedback man. You leave some of the most inadequate feedback ive read but ill try harder next time brotha man __________________

02-15-2014, 12:33 PM	#6
dead man living Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,468 Battle Record: 33-18 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - AOWL Season 1 - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 4 - Write Week V - GWL Season 1 Rep Power: 77606676	Just write has a point there franklin. This was cool. If you dropped this in the league vs. pretty much anybody you would have lost though. Move on these are old topics. __________________ Zack Wicks for president