How about a safe landing, Captain?

[Vulgar]

T

[veritas]

building a balm Biggums sniffs, a broad filament caulk
filled with De Gaulle's willingness - cinema songs filter in
"♪ mission to 'nam syndicate ♪" picture Incan Magogs stringing it
or Pinkleton's odd instrument, strumming it between his legs
Grimoire incubus
Kiss me or call Gilligan
Jebus Christ... we're lost in the laws - immigrants!
How I wonder, would a Faustian clause mend the rent?
Mental Mensa's limp forward from the stench of commensurates
Hit the deck - the situation just got ODESSA thick
Punk rock Persepolis - visors over eyes since sunspots perplex the kids
No matter if you connect with this
it's guaranteed to beat against the drum-skin of your raunchy meninges

wow. this is intricate and yet relevant. I like that you know what you are talking about even if others don't understand. that is what makes it art. let them decode. your obscure references and worldy historical knowledge are paramount to this ability i see, and I salute thee for it. well played.

[Kin]

Bomb businesses but we're not in the business of bombs...
building a balm Biggums sniffs, a broad filament caulk
filled with De Gaulle's willingness - cinema songs filter in
"♪ mission to 'nam syndicate ♪" picture Incan Magogs stringing it
or Pinkleton's odd instrument, strumming it between his legs
Grimoire incubus

-WHOAAAA

Aircraft's in mint condition - it's human error that isn't
-crazy

liked the ending too.... very skilled writer No doubt..

diggin' how you word ya linez man...Originality at its best

HoLLa

[Vulgar]

Thanks

[Bodey]

Loved it. Genius type shit, so cool you can string all those things together. Any recent freestyles?

[Ghost1]

Its funny cuz


...

Initially i had planned on posting......idk wtf ur even talkin about literally

But then i read the end.....and i understand what this piece is....and the metaphor

And it made me appreciate it

But then i wondered......he mustve purposefully stupified the ending if thats the only thing i was able to grasp. For me i was glad. Tho then i think.....why not simplify the whole verse.....and say no.....he doesnt want to do that. Annnd finally i arrive at.....if he doesnt want to simplify his material.....why sacrifice the integrity of the piece only at the end ...ur conflicted. U want to be absurdly complex and cater to the more politically informed demographic but not to the point that ur more less complex narrative metaphor is lost on the audience as a whole.

Idk wat to tell u. I think weve actually talked briefly on this.

For me.........as the uninformed .....it does little for me when u cater towards me only briefly in a piece that was never meant for me to favor regardless. I still have no fucking clue wat 75% of this shit was even referencing.....i feel like ur overall concept in retrospect did outweigh the references....but the bulk of the verse is references that surely give the piece its charisma. For me im not getting that pinache....its lost on me and i only get the skeleton of this piece to resonate on.

Food for thought i suppose. Imo go one way or the other........by attempting to broaden ur viewership by compromising ur style ur cheating both groups. Dont get me wrong i think u can blend ur style with a less complex approach....but this was not blended well.

Mechanics were great if u care?

Cool piece....it would seem from others comments.

[Vulgar]

I respect your thoughts, I think you're overestimating my intentions with this piece and with most of my work. This was purposefully abstract and out of whack, and it only came together somewhat at the end cohesively because I changed the tempo to end it with finality. There is no overall metaphor for this piece, rather I'm playing with the concept of air travel, planes, vortexes and air space, and seeing all the wild things I can do with it. I'm more of an "enjoy the ride, and the rhymes" type of writer when I'm not doing topicals and actually putting effort into making sense with what I write. Other times, this is how I get my adrenaline pumping - by being as random as possible but trying to make machine gun fire come off elegantly.

You're right about people not knowing how to respond to this kind of stuff though, I get responses like this sometimes. My intention is mainly to pepper your mind frame with as much interesting information as possible to get you thinking, to get your blood pumping. That's my main purpose when I do abstract writing, to de-mystify the Vulgar effect.

[Ghost1]

Word

[PancakeBrah]

This is a great piece of writing, in the realm of this 'artform'. I apologize for not writing for this collaboration. It's just a very difficult verse to riff off of. As has already been mentioned here, it's all over the place, purposefully. But the mechanics are just top notch. Arguably the best I've read from you from that stand point. Lines just a touch shorter, and almost every rhyme trick in the repertoire put on display. Just a consistently high level of quality throughout, but especially in the first verse. As with all your 'wtf's he talking about' pieces, it's lost on me but there are single lines, bars, and sections that are stand-alone dope. Short type of feed but this deserves the bump not only for it's quality but because I feel a bit shitty for stringing out the collab.

Thanks for the read. Maybe I'll write for the next attempt.