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Old 07-29-2013, 03:03 AM   #1
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Me and my nigga... always in a tiff
Don't know why sometimes thoughts pass the brain to my lips
I apologize for the bitchyness I'm tipsy without an off switch
Victim of the juice drinking dirty mix Friends sayin let loose so I go with it
19 but I swear I'm pro at it don't need how to's act grown with it
Well let me re-evaluate that statement Gulp the forbidden then act like cavemen
Cave in to almost anything they say devil in my ear saying u should try the bombay
One sip one shot down some more vodka now I'm feeling any type of song played
Textin the B.F with W.T.F's tell him I'm leavin but none of it seem like its real....

Days came and went killing my kidneys didn't make sense
Started resisting if given sips got mad one night my attitude flipped
Didn't give a fuck let the rum drip go ahead fill my cup to the rim
Hope forbidden juice lighten up the mood alcohol should sterilize the wound
Hangover should disappear by noon then ill be ready for school by two
Act rude to most so dont approach me proceed with caution if u don't know me
I dont even like the taste drink with a scruch face cuz the effect addicting...
Imma Tell my future kids never get shitfaced ya i know its contradicting...
Sex on the beach got me speakin slurred speach and little less predicting
Less restricting not like i never say no usually i dont dance just try to lay low
Raisin debatin will i stay on my toes side note though no im never too throwed
Instead of blazin on occasion devils nectar flow till i venture outta my zone

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Old 07-29-2013, 03:20 AM   #2
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This instrumental was basically the basis of this rhyme dope this song tho

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Old 07-29-2013, 12:03 PM   #3
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hmmmm??? alcohol isn't that bad young padawan
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iunno what the fux that first verse was, shit was just written sloppy. now i aint down at all with that overly contrived shit at aaaalll, but its like if you was talking that shit i'd straight up tell you to shut the fuck up like its nothing.

wdeva, that said, im glad i read the second verse, far from anything dope or mad creative & concepts been done to....death wouldnt even do it justice. but either way, had a couple lines i liked, & overall was just written a whole lot better than that first verse.
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Hope forbidden juice lighten up the mood alcohol should sterilize the wound
that was coo
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I dont even like the taste drink with a scruch face cuz the effect addicting...
Imma Tell my future kids never get shitfaced ya i know its contradicting...
Sex on the beach got me speakin slurred speach and little less predicting
again, i cant say any of this was ill or anything close, ^ but i did like that, specially tha contradicting line. shit i aint even mad at the way shit close.

iunno, its almost like that second verse was written by a different person. < there's an insult in that statement, but also a compliment - take it as such.

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