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Old 05-29-2014, 01:29 PM   #1
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Default All This Pain (Youtube video and Lyrics)

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all this pain but the love is there
all this change when it dont seem fair
all this stress and no one to reach to
lookin for someone to relate to what youve been through

all this strife is steady, i lead life thats heavy,
tryna hold back the tears just like a levy
and try to fight my fears, i might be ready
but if not, its pot and twice the beers,
i pray to god for sunny days to come
but all i see is storm clouds n im tryna run away from em
cant seem to let it go but the past is gone
things went from bad to wrong barely graspin on
its hard stay grounded- or feel safe when ur stranded
on an island with sharks swimmin all around it
wish my dad woulda stuck it out and raised me
yeah you made me but not knowin u makes me crazy
i guess my mom couldnt handle me, hug me or manage me
na shed rather drug and abandon me
but i got wife thatll keep me safe
and when i see her face i know that everything’ll be okay
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Old 05-30-2014, 02:05 AM   #2
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I must admit this shows a lot of promise. Good overall scheme throughout your verse, and I like storytelling. That's something you rarely see today, especially since some don't believe for it to be as glamorous. Only thing I have to say about this verse was I was waiting for you to finish the story? But for something slight, not bad. Keep it up.
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Old 05-30-2014, 12:06 PM   #3
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holy fuck man. this shit melts my brain. if u lead a heavy life stop trying to be all positive in ur raps. rap about what u know and experience dont write bed time storys. franklin cornered the bedtime stories market already bro
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Old 06-02-2014, 10:26 AM   #4
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lol whatever bro. haters gon' hate. upp
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