There's no simulating love

EndSane · 01-20-2013, 01:57 PM

Italics is me

Regular is Badi Alii

Even at a distant split somehow you flipped a switch
Our connection was an instant hit, it felt infinite
Kissed and wished we'd be more than desired fantasies
Admired families you have a higher inspired plan to keep
First I thought its dire vanity then I realized its mutual
Snow covers an impeccable mountain I feel like its beautiful
Nothing unusual a bond between two conceptual adults
Never being able to touch each other with our sexual occults
Intellectual; we talk about the past, present and the future
Everybody wonders why I spend every second on computers
Calling me a loser because I never see a ray of sunshine
I dwell in the bitter pits of darkness but my days are sublime
Only perpetual thought is why you can't be closer to home
Cause the first time putting the simulator over my dome
The sobering moans echoing my ears I succumbed too it
As we go at it for hours and make our own love music

Hook
It didn't seem real only a fallacy
Having intercourse in virtual reality
With the girl I met in cyber space
Its awesome being inside her grace
Kissing and caressing her soft skin
Only meditating on what I was lost in

and as i interject, with computerized finesse
my legs so fit to stretch, ready for cyber sex
i expected disrespect from a guy on the internet
chatting nothing less than intellect , til i revealed a breast
and you opened up your soul, swallowin me whole
i felt you every second though, my heartstrings getting pulled
it's like living a double life, glad we've settled in
i swear i could be high runnin off this adrenaline
let's remove the screen, would it interest you to have us meet?
would you touch me the way you do when we're just imagining
sometimes it turns me on to wait, so baby tease me if you can
my underwear will saturate before i feel the touch of both your hands
smellin your affection, i wrap my arms around your chest
relished disconnection from the web, never wanting to get dressed
naked bodies pressed together, my legs tense up around your waist
a feeling so much better than our history in cyberspace

Hook
It didn't seem real only a fallacy
Having intercourse with you in reality
With the guy I met in cyber space
Mesmerized by your eyes and face
As you gently embrace my soft skin
Only meditating on what I was lost in

At first it's lust as I work and thrust your perfect cusps
Now it's them verses us; sweetie your well worth the bucks
I paid for this site called search and fuck it turned me up
So after several months of chatting where you urged enough
I gave in and paid for your flight to the United States
Measurements were grand; the right size and shape
I thrived for taste; I abide the haste and grind your waist
With my driving pace as you get on top and ride me great
Never implying brakes until you told me the lie you made
That you wanted to be a citizen I was just a guy you laid
In cyber space; "she says you was desperate but sweet
Not to mention a geek with the most affection to please
When I suggested to meet I wanted it for citizenship
But you pecked my quivering lips and entered my hips
I rendered to it and I fell in love that's why I come too you"
It's okay sweetie your only a robot but I love you too

Hook
It wasn't real only my fallacy
I never talked to you in reality
There wasn't anybody in cyber space
The last robot I ordered I fried the plates
I put the money for another soft skin
So again I could feel what I was lost in

Nice · 01-20-2013, 03:37 PM

this was cool, this is where i realized where you two were going with this lol

Never being able to touch each other with our sexual occults
Intellectual; we talk about the past, present and the future
Everybody wonders why I spend every second on computers
Calling me a loser because I never see a ray of sunshine
I dwell in the bitter pits of darkness but my days are sublime

your transitions were on point, flow control stood out a few sneaky metaphors thrown in, kudo's

Brodey, hi love

Never being able to touch each other with our sexual occults
Intellectual; we talk about the past, present and the future
Everybody wonders why I spend every second on computers
Calling me a loser because I never see a ray of sunshine
I dwell in the bitter pits of darkness but my days are sublime

this part made me "oh dayum" lol.. i dont get a chance to read too much from you but when i do im always pretty impressed. you have a nice structure which is always easy to read, like hella layed back. props

sane im not gunna quote anything from your last verse because it was my favorite and i really didnt see any flaws. thi was a nice collab, you 2 meshed well on this. lookin forward to more from both of you. peace

p.s. thanks for feedin my piece sane

Geno · 01-20-2013, 08:28 PM

Yo, honestly thought this was a dope ass idea. Maybe a little old in concept, but I havnt seen this done in a while so for the moment its fresh

You both meshed really well here. Endsane brought the dope flow and vivid ideas of cyber sex into the opening verse real nice, thought you could of used a few well placed commas to break flow up here and there but other than that the shit was ill from you.

Bodey, what can I say love, I've watched you progress very nicely in the last few months and even more so since we did bonnie n clyde. Your concepts and flow are getting way smoother and more crystalized. This was one of the better reads I've seen of yours and you really came off as someone who's been polished for a long time even though your omnly just now finding yourself. Very dope. Good to see you being active and collabing as heavy as you have been

Both of y'all keep active and stay writing. Thanks for the read, dope drop

Bodey · 01-21-2013, 02:58 PM

thanks for the feed. and gen, thank you so much. it's been an awesome process and still goin. hope it never stops. would love to collab with you again soon

Greed · 01-22-2013, 12:03 AM

Me and you go together.

Split · 01-22-2013, 09:48 AM

Thought the hook was gay as fuck

I'll be back to quote lines after classes once I'm off my garbo phone

Zen · 01-22-2013, 11:40 AM

Liked it and read it all even though it was long as hell and I rarely do that. Honestly didn't like the hook though. Yall got some great lines in the verses and the hook just comes off weak to me.
To Alli I felt like the opening lines were nice but got weaker as they progressed but still a nice drop. And to Endsane your opening verse was dope but your second verse was dope as hell. Overall this was a nice collab like I said I'd just work on the hook

EndSane · 01-22-2013, 04:11 PM

The hook is suppose to b short and catchy. Lmao at split

Thanks zen I know it was long but it's the way it came out

Split · 01-22-2013, 05:33 PM

Bodey:
my legs so fit to stretch, ready for cyber sex
i expected disrespect from a guy on the internet
chatting nothing less than intellect , til i revealed a breast

EndSane
I gave in and paid for your flight to the United States
Measurements were grand; the right size and shape

thought youve both come nicer... no hate, I like your writing. just wasnt a fan of the wording and concepts. keep up yo

Just Write · 04-11-2013, 07:57 PM

lmao, THIS... was very entertaining, when I first started to read this I thought it was going to be an intimate tale of two lovers, boy was i wrong haha. this was definitely a very highly skilled comedic written. was this for a league or simply for fun? either way respect. I will look for more of your stuff. good day sir

Sharon Peters · 04-13-2013, 10:33 PM

This was so gay I had a boner when I started reading it, and never will get one again. Thanks for that faggot.

01-20-2013, 01:57 PM	#1
EndSane Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 88 Battle Record: 0-1 Champed Challenge Week I Challenge Week II Challenge Week III Challenge Week IV Challenge Week V Challenge Week VI Challenge Week VII Challenge Week VIII Challenge Week IX Challenge Week X Rep Power: 38	There's no simulating love Italics is me Regular is Badi Alii Even at a distant split somehow you flipped a switch Our connection was an instant hit, it felt infinite Kissed and wished we'd be more than desired fantasies Admired families you have a higher inspired plan to keep First I thought its dire vanity then I realized its mutual Snow covers an impeccable mountain I feel like its beautiful Nothing unusual a bond between two conceptual adults Never being able to touch each other with our sexual occults Intellectual; we talk about the past, present and the future Everybody wonders why I spend every second on computers Calling me a loser because I never see a ray of sunshine I dwell in the bitter pits of darkness but my days are sublime Only perpetual thought is why you can't be closer to home Cause the first time putting the simulator over my dome The sobering moans echoing my ears I succumbed too it As we go at it for hours and make our own love music Hook It didn't seem real only a fallacy Having intercourse in virtual reality With the girl I met in cyber space Its awesome being inside her grace Kissing and caressing her soft skin Only meditating on what I was lost in and as i interject, with computerized finesse my legs so fit to stretch, ready for cyber sex i expected disrespect from a guy on the internet chatting nothing less than intellect , til i revealed a breast and you opened up your soul, swallowin me whole i felt you every second though, my heartstrings getting pulled it's like living a double life, glad we've settled in i swear i could be high runnin off this adrenaline let's remove the screen, would it interest you to have us meet? would you touch me the way you do when we're just imagining sometimes it turns me on to wait, so baby tease me if you can my underwear will saturate before i feel the touch of both your hands smellin your affection, i wrap my arms around your chest relished disconnection from the web, never wanting to get dressed naked bodies pressed together, my legs tense up around your waist a feeling so much better than our history in cyberspace Hook It didn't seem real only a fallacy Having intercourse with you in reality With the guy I met in cyber space Mesmerized by your eyes and face As you gently embrace my soft skin Only meditating on what I was lost in At first it's lust as I work and thrust your perfect cusps Now it's them verses us; sweetie your well worth the bucks I paid for this site called search and fuck it turned me up So after several months of chatting where you urged enough I gave in and paid for your flight to the United States Measurements were grand; the right size and shape I thrived for taste; I abide the haste and grind your waist With my driving pace as you get on top and ride me great Never implying brakes until you told me the lie you made That you wanted to be a citizen I was just a guy you laid In cyber space; "she says you was desperate but sweet Not to mention a geek with the most affection to please When I suggested to meet I wanted it for citizenship But you pecked my quivering lips and entered my hips I rendered to it and I fell in love that's why I come too you" It's okay sweetie your only a robot but I love you too Hook It wasn't real only my fallacy I never talked to you in reality There wasn't anybody in cyber space The last robot I ordered I fried the plates I put the money for another soft skin So again I could feel what I was lost in

01-20-2013, 08:28 PM	#3
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,354 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036761	Yo, honestly thought this was a dope ass idea. Maybe a little old in concept, but I havnt seen this done in a while so for the moment its fresh You both meshed really well here. Endsane brought the dope flow and vivid ideas of cyber sex into the opening verse real nice, thought you could of used a few well placed commas to break flow up here and there but other than that the shit was ill from you. Bodey, what can I say love, I've watched you progress very nicely in the last few months and even more so since we did bonnie n clyde. Your concepts and flow are getting way smoother and more crystalized. This was one of the better reads I've seen of yours and you really came off as someone who's been polished for a long time even though your omnly just now finding yourself. Very dope. Good to see you being active and collabing as heavy as you have been Both of y'all keep active and stay writing. Thanks for the read, dope drop __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

01-22-2013, 09:48 AM	#6
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,898 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899399	Thought the hook was gay as fuck I'll be back to quote lines after classes once I'm off my garbo phone __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com

01-22-2013, 05:33 PM	#9
Split . Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 8,898 Battle Record: 27-22 Rep Power: 85899399	Bodey: my legs so fit to stretch, ready for cyber sex i expected disrespect from a guy on the internet chatting nothing less than intellect , til i revealed a breast EndSane I gave in and paid for your flight to the United States Measurements were grand; the right size and shape thought youve both come nicer... no hate, I like your writing. just wasnt a fan of the wording and concepts. keep up yo __________________ http://split8.yolasite.com

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01-20-2013, 03:37 PM	#2
Nice Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 93 Rep Power: 0	this was cool, this is where i realized where you two were going with this lol Never being able to touch each other with our sexual occults Intellectual; we talk about the past, present and the future Everybody wonders why I spend every second on computers Calling me a loser because I never see a ray of sunshine I dwell in the bitter pits of darkness but my days are sublime your transitions were on point, flow control stood out a few sneaky metaphors thrown in, kudo's Brodey, hi love Never being able to touch each other with our sexual occults Intellectual; we talk about the past, present and the future Everybody wonders why I spend every second on computers Calling me a loser because I never see a ray of sunshine I dwell in the bitter pits of darkness but my days are sublime this part made me "oh dayum" lol.. i dont get a chance to read too much from you but when i do im always pretty impressed. you have a nice structure which is always easy to read, like hella layed back. props sane im not gunna quote anything from your last verse because it was my favorite and i really didnt see any flaws. thi was a nice collab, you 2 meshed well on this. lookin forward to more from both of you. peace p.s. thanks for feedin my piece sane

01-22-2013, 12:03 AM	#5
Greed Raw Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 1,721 Battle Record: 21-40 Rep Power: 29975687	Me and you go together.

01-22-2013, 11:40 AM	#7
Zen Arm the Homeless Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,102 Battle Record: 22-24 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 35079722	Liked it and read it all even though it was long as hell and I rarely do that. Honestly didn't like the hook though. Yall got some great lines in the verses and the hook just comes off weak to me. To Alli I felt like the opening lines were nice but got weaker as they progressed but still a nice drop. And to Endsane your opening verse was dope but your second verse was dope as hell. Overall this was a nice collab like I said I'd just work on the hook

01-22-2013, 04:11 PM	#8
EndSane Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 88 Battle Record: 0-1 Champed Challenge Week I Challenge Week II Challenge Week III Challenge Week IV Challenge Week V Challenge Week VI Challenge Week VII Challenge Week VIII Challenge Week IX Challenge Week X Rep Power: 38	The hook is suppose to b short and catchy. Lmao at split Thanks zen I know it was long but it's the way it came out

04-11-2013, 07:57 PM	#10
Just Write Senior Member Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,709 Battle Record: 9-12 Rep Power: 4997617	lmao, THIS... was very entertaining, when I first started to read this I thought it was going to be an intimate tale of two lovers, boy was i wrong haha. this was definitely a very highly skilled comedic written. was this for a league or simply for fun? either way respect. I will look for more of your stuff. good day sir

04-13-2013, 10:33 PM	#11
Sharon Peters Junior Member Join Date: Apr 2013 Posts: 7 Rep Power: 38	This was so gay I had a boner when I started reading it, and never will get one again. Thanks for that faggot.