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03-29-2013, 06:54 PM
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White Earl
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Genocide: Unbreakable.
Eyo..
From the dust was stones created in shades of grey I've walked through those walls unscathed or fased Cause genocide paves the way through detours in roads I'm a wrecking ball you cant stop from important goals Drink poison, grow, and survive despite the odds I'm the prophet you can turn to when christ is not My life, the block, the rugged spots I'm welcomed at The faith I used to have in my heart, I fell from that Selfish acts, sound the alarm in my wake til the bells destroyed Ill talk to my demons til every single one in hell deploys I felt the void collapse, the strength of my pride restore Went to bat for my sins and stood alone in the violent war What you think I've been so silent for, consumed at work Cause broke niggas don't get paid til they prove their worth Ruthless jerk, who's berserck when you tell me I won't win With confidence and leadership that makes you follow this Hollow tips, grenades, or bare hands on balls and knuckles Swing til I've burnt all the strength from my largest muscles Til I fall and buckle, you can't fuck with the passion inside The cry, My fury can't be held back until the last of it dies need a casket the size of the grand canyon to bury my pulse and the whole entire fucking world just to carry me off
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04-03-2013, 09:56 AM
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White Earl
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Can I at least get a hello, clearly not my best work, but damn.. long time no see gen
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04-03-2013, 10:05 AM
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04-03-2013, 10:10 AM
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Greetings, welcome back. Precise almost methodical rhyme scheme combined with aggressive emotion driven internal thoughts, your last two lines were a perfect illustration of it.
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04-03-2013, 10:11 AM
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Genocide I will give you the best feed I can once I finish revitalizing Swag and Flow
i don't need feed (too economic) but if you either hit up Me vs Pancake Topical in the BA or got to me, Nigma, and Vlgar's collab it'd be appreciated... I feel kinda plateau'd atm and could use some harsh criticism Either way I got you soon
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04-03-2013, 10:16 AM
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lol this was pretty cool man. i liked the whole dark feel to it, like gruesome but still mellow toned if you get me. liked the grand canyon part and a few other lines. just came off smooth as fuck. nice job uce.
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04-03-2013, 11:37 AM
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White Earl
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I got yoju tonight. Gonna drop a lot of feed in different areas/votes. Ill be there.
Hi cereal
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04-03-2013, 04:27 PM
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Definatly not your best piece but it seems like it could be your most emotionally driven piece I've read from you. You feel like you're carryin the world on your shoulders, stressed out, etc. Still a great piece because of the emotional impact imo. Welcome back Geno
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04-03-2013, 06:07 PM
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White Earl
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just how we do bruh, emotion is 50% of my stiggity lol. thanks peoples, nice to be back, lets see if the kid can crack some heads in the league now.
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04-03-2013, 06:25 PM
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2 TAME
GET YOUR FEET WET
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04-03-2013, 07:32 PM
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this was a bit strange, felt like it was really slow to get rollin. usually your rhymes are smooth and unstuttered. the content was rough around the edges but also methodically honest, seemed real and built into reality... i can tell your stories/ concepts are gonna be fire as fuck this first match. GL WELCOME BACK DOE
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04-05-2013, 09:15 PM
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@Genocide
Solid keystyle. A bit clunky but you got your point across, at least tone-wise. You made it seem like unfinished business has the tendency to make others pay interest in the form of suffering, while you maintain your rise to the top in civilized life. Keep doing you |
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