mainstream needs repair (some shit I wrote abt a month ago)

H4ZE · 01-17-2014, 01:32 PM

I write these words to ignite the people,
They stir and excite the evil
Each verse that I writes unequal,
To yours and I might just seem to
Be strikin lethal,
I make shit pure cus I can see through
The fake image,and the fake gimmicks
Are you sure that your writing gleeful?
Id like to see you,
Try to write like I write
Don't let the dollar signs decieve you
Itl design your mind like
An evil lair,and make you wanna speak to scare the children
Mainstream needs repair,it seems to bare a feelin
Like you have to fight,
Like drugs is the way to go
Like you shouldn't have a wife,
Like you don't need love you can play the hoes
Rap is no longer an artform
Its a way to decieve
And I'm just tryna bring it back
So don't blame it on me
I patiently wait for the day
That they say it with me
Rappin has changed so much
And I'm hatin its scene
And the way that I see it now
Its as strange as can be
Cuz the fakest emcees make it
And its makin it seem
Like rappin has no feelin,
Like its just some stupid shit
But thats not true
Thats just the way rappers are usin it
Only a few can spit,
The rest of em are fake
The only real rappers either hide
Or are stuck in a cage
Its like nothin they say,
Can bring true emcees to the radio
On the radio,
Its just money,girls,weed, and playing hoes
Teaching the negatives
Instead of the positive things to know
Others look past it,some won't
But they don't think we know
What there doing,
Brain washing kids in their own home
Its so cold,
What we don't know is when itl go ghost
Cuz this whole society's fucked up
And its makin me almost
Wanna quit fuck this shit
Its gettin me so low

e11even · 01-19-2014, 07:22 PM

Is this imvu h4ze? The bitch i wanted to murder and dump into a watery grave in 07? Please answer, as it will determine your fate IRL.

H4ZE · 02-06-2014, 01:56 PM

Lmao no. Wtf??

Exis · 02-06-2014, 11:52 PM

I may live to regret this but I actually thought this was good lol...shit's relatively simple which I liked, you didn't have this over complexity nonsense that most on rap forums do so that made it refreshin' to me as it was easier to read and you got your point across minus an upped vocabulary.If I'm bein' honest the structure is sorta gay, a few lines could have been made into one instead of a couple...but yeah, not sure if I've read anythin' you've dropped before so it's hard to compare this to previous work of yours...here's what I felt most.

Like you have to fight,
Like drugs is the way to go
Like you shouldn't have a wife,
Like you don't need love you can play the hoes

^^Cool...the like like like like is repetitive as fuck yet what you said after it I dug.

Rap is no longer an artform
Its a way to decieve
And I'm just tryna bring it back
So don't blame it on me

^^Truth.

It may be basic and your flow is really choppy at times yet you have potential,

Stay upwards man.

01-17-2014, 01:32 PM	#1
H4ZE Member Join Date: Jan 2014 Location: Florida Posts: 77 Battle Record: 1-2 Rep Power: 0	mainstream needs repair (some shit I wrote abt a month ago) I write these words to ignite the people, They stir and excite the evil Each verse that I writes unequal, To yours and I might just seem to Be strikin lethal, I make shit pure cus I can see through The fake image,and the fake gimmicks Are you sure that your writing gleeful? Id like to see you, Try to write like I write Don't let the dollar signs decieve you Itl design your mind like An evil lair,and make you wanna speak to scare the children Mainstream needs repair,it seems to bare a feelin Like you have to fight, Like drugs is the way to go Like you shouldn't have a wife, Like you don't need love you can play the hoes Rap is no longer an artform Its a way to decieve And I'm just tryna bring it back So don't blame it on me I patiently wait for the day That they say it with me Rappin has changed so much And I'm hatin its scene And the way that I see it now Its as strange as can be Cuz the fakest emcees make it And its makin it seem Like rappin has no feelin, Like its just some stupid shit But thats not true Thats just the way rappers are usin it Only a few can spit, The rest of em are fake The only real rappers either hide Or are stuck in a cage Its like nothin they say, Can bring true emcees to the radio On the radio, Its just money,girls,weed, and playing hoes Teaching the negatives Instead of the positive things to know Others look past it,some won't But they don't think we know What there doing, Brain washing kids in their own home Its so cold, What we don't know is when itl go ghost Cuz this whole society's fucked up And its makin me almost Wanna quit fuck this shit Its gettin me so low

01-19-2014, 07:22 PM	#2
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	Is this imvu h4ze? The bitch i wanted to murder and dump into a watery grave in 07? Please answer, as it will determine your fate IRL. __________________ Ahem.

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02-06-2014, 01:56 PM	#3
H4ZE Member Join Date: Jan 2014 Location: Florida Posts: 77 Battle Record: 1-2 Rep Power: 0	Lmao no. Wtf??

02-06-2014, 11:52 PM	#4
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,934 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	I may live to regret this but I actually thought this was good lol...shit's relatively simple which I liked, you didn't have this over complexity nonsense that most on rap forums do so that made it refreshin' to me as it was easier to read and you got your point across minus an upped vocabulary.If I'm bein' honest the structure is sorta gay, a few lines could have been made into one instead of a couple...but yeah, not sure if I've read anythin' you've dropped before so it's hard to compare this to previous work of yours...here's what I felt most. Like you have to fight, Like drugs is the way to go Like you shouldn't have a wife, Like you don't need love you can play the hoes ^^Cool...the like like like like is repetitive as fuck yet what you said after it I dug. Rap is no longer an artform Its a way to decieve And I'm just tryna bring it back So don't blame it on me ^^Truth. It may be basic and your flow is really choppy at times yet you have potential, Stay upwards man.