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White Earl
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Blood sweat and tears, been through hell on the surface
But them checks when the weekends tell me its worth it nobodies perfect, persevered, bought a whip, im back at it again Hindsights 20/20, readin comments, u backstabbers for friends i got the world in my pad and my pen, stored in the closet so much bread and butter, built a bank just to store one deposit a statue of genocide, at every corner, im through watching cameras in the eye sockets, can never be to cautious im to nautiaous, opiates still keep calling my name i pop one and go hard, could run through a brick wall and be straight My burdens feel like a motherfucking ball and a chain, starvin for fame the rap game is putty in my palms, ima boss, and im already made aint a site you could go that dont know who i am if thats the case, then its home to a bunch of nobodies then struck gold with open mics, drawling crowds like an architect only writers who dont know me, are the ones who aint started yet i keep a knot in the pocket, aint a loose end i aint tied tight All you retards that aint for gen, better get all your minds rite Im ready for limelight, ima do it, ill be damned if cant.. still running shit like schwarzenneggar in the marathon man Every year ive aged, adds another notch my belt And people recognize the god, like i wrote the bible myself
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aint a site you could go that dont know who i am
if thats the case, then its home to a bunch of nobodies then lmfao. you're really humble in this one, especially toward the end. lol I like rapping your shit because your multeez are easy to identify. like, what you are rhyming with what. Also, many of your commas are not "literary commas", but rather frames of reference for delivery. I do this too nowadays. Please try explaining this to some other people here. This is good but you've got better in you; I've seen it. But I understand,of course,that based on the tone it is not intended to be a magnum opus but rather a self-confidence/shock-value thingy. Last edited by Pharaohs Army; 08-05-2015 at 09:38 PM. |
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But them checks when the weekends tell me its worth it
Maybe worded different this line would be better, but as a stand alone im left with wanting clarification. My burdens feel like a motherfucking ball and a chain, starvin for fame the rap game is putty in my palms, ima boss, and im already made up until this point, it was reading well, catching a nice scheme, but i think the shortage of a syllable here hindered the flow a bit. maybe a simple and i have it already made |
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The Clown Prince
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Disagree with that comment right there... instead of 'a ball & a chain, you should have said 'a ball & chain' that rolls of the tongue better than what was going on here... otherwise this was some dope shit to see from you Geno always enjoyable to see you around these parts when you aren't in discussion more than Muff otherwise I kind of felt like this could have been on some inspirational money bags type track seems fitting for that 'keep grinding & you'll get it' type of feel y'know keep making that money brah brah
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